Keys— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Improve grammar (remove duplicate negatives and unnecessary prepositions) and use a natural collocation (e.g., "carry" instead of "bring with myself").

Ejemplo: No, I don’t carry many keys. I usually only carry my apartment key in my pocket because I don’t need other keys on a daily basis.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear sequence and use linking words to connect events. Correct grammar (use past tense consistently and avoid awkward phrasing like "on a rush situation"). Add one specific detail (when or what happened) to make the story more vivid.

Ejemplo: Yes, I lost my key once. I was in a rush after shopping and accidentally left it in the car park, so by the time I realized it the car was gone and I had to wait an hour to retrieve it.

Sugerencia: Combine sentences into a single clear statement and avoid redundancy ("Not really" and "always"). Use linking words if adding a reason (e.g., "because") and include a specific habit to support your answer.

Ejemplo: No, I rarely forget my keys because I always keep them in my front pocket as soon as I leave the house.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion first, then justify it with clear reasons and one example. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use cohesive devices (e.g., "however", "for example") and correct grammar ("neighbour" consistency and complete sentences).

Ejemplo: I think it depends. If you trust your neighbour and have a close relationship, leaving a spare key with them can be convenient; however, if you are unsure about their reliability, it’s safer to use a secure key box or a professional service.

× Not not really. I just normally bring one key which is my apartment room key with myself.

✓ Not really. I usually bring just one key, my apartment key, with me.

The original has a repeated 'Not not really' (awkward negation) and uses 'normally' and word order awkwardly; 'with myself' is incorrect; use 'with me'. Use 'usually' or 'normally' before the verb and place 'just' before 'one key'.

× Yes, I lost my key once and I remember I was on a rush situation where I left my key in the car park and I forgot to bring it back.

✓ Yes, I lost my key once; I remember I was in a rush and left it in the car park, then forgot to bring it back.

Use 'in a rush' not 'on a rush situation'. Combine clauses clearly and use simple past consistently: 'left' and 'forgot'. Avoid repeating 'my key' when pronoun 'it' suffices.

× Not really. Normally I always bring my key with me everywhere I go and I put it in my pocket.

✓ Not really. I usually bring my key with me everywhere I go and put it in my pocket.

'Normally I always' is redundant; choose 'usually' or 'always'. Also after 'and' the verb 'put' can omit repeated subject. This keeps present simple consistent for habitual action.

× In my opinion, it depends on how close and how you trust your neighbor, because I believe that we can. Really depends on others if we don't really trust them.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on how close you are and how much you trust your neighbor, because I believe it depends on the person; we should not leave keys with someone we do not trust.

Original has missing words and awkward structure: 'how close and how you trust' should be 'how close you are and how much you trust'. 'We can' is unclear; clarify meaning. Also 'Really depends on others' is a sentence fragment; complete it. Use 'person' or 'neighbor' and avoid double negatives like 'don't really trust them'.