Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and accuracy: give a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, correct verb choices, remove repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words for coherence. For example, say you walk often because of childcare responsibilities, how many times and how long each time.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because I take my children to and from daycare every day. I usually walk to the daycare twice a day, and each walk takes about 10–15 minutes. Because of this routine, I get regular short walks that help me stay active.

Sugerencia: Make grammar and word choice accurate, give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas. Correct past tense and nouns (e.g., 'active' and 'child').

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went outside when I was a child because I was very active. For example, almost every day I played football with my friends in the park after school, which kept me outdoors.

Sugerencia: Focus on clear vocabulary and coherent linking. Use correct verbs (walk, not work) and explain reasons with specific details. Provide two clear reasons and a linking phrase.

Ejemplo: People like to walk in parks because it reduces stress and helps them relax. In addition, the fresh air and green surroundings make walking more enjoyable, and many people find it peaceful compared with walking on busy streets.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with correct conditional form and clearer expression. State the place and one specific reason why you want to walk there. Avoid unclear phrases and correct grammar (e.g., 'long walk', 'wish list').

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along the streets of Santiago, Chile, because the historic neighborhoods and hills would offer interesting scenery and a challenging route for walking.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear past-tense answer with specific details: name or describe the park, when you went, and what you did there. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

Ejemplo: Lately I went for a walk in the small park near my house last Sunday. I walked around the lake for about 30 minutes and sat on a bench to read, which I find very relaxing.

× Yes, I quite work because I often drop off and pick up my children at daycare.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because I often drop off and pick up my children at daycare.

The student used 'quite work' which is ungrammatical and likely a wrong verb choice. This is a sentence structure/word choice error: the verb 'walk' fits the question and context. Suggestion: use the appropriate verb related to the question (walk) and keep simple present tense for habitual actions.

× So every day I often work several times a day.

✓ So every day I often walk several times a day.

The verb 'work' is incorrect in context; the speaker means a habitual action of walking. Use the simple present 'walk' for repeated actions. Also avoid redundant adverbs 'every day' and 'several times a day' together if concise phrasing is desired.

× Yes, I always went outside.

✓ Yes, I always went outside when I was a child.

The original sentence is grammatically correct in past tense, but adding the time reference 'when I was a child' clarifies the context of the question. Keep past simple 'went' for past habitual actions.

× I was really activity children.

✓ I was a really active child.

The student used 'activity' (a noun) and plural 'children' incorrectly. The correct adjective is 'active' and the subject refers to a single speaker 'I' so singular 'child' is required. Use 'a' before the noun: 'a really active child.'

× So every day, almost every day, I went outside and I hung out with my friend.

✓ So almost every day I went outside and hung out with my friends.

'Hung' as past tense is acceptable, but 'friends' plural is more natural for general socializing. Remove the extra 'I' for smoother sentence flow: 'I went outside and hung out with my friends.' Keep past simple for past habitual actions.

× Many people like to work in the parks because working makes people reduce stress and make them feel relaxed.

✓ Many people like to walk in parks because walking helps reduce stress and makes them feel relaxed.

Preposition and word choice errors: use 'walk in parks' not 'work in the parks.' Also change verb forms: 'walking helps reduce stress' (helps + base verb) and 'makes them feel' (makes + object + base verb). Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'makes' matches 'walking' as singular noun.

× The fresh air also will comfortable working is.

✓ The fresh air also makes walking comfortable.

Original word order and forms are incorrect. Use 'makes' + object + adjective: 'makes walking comfortable.' Place 'also' where natural: 'The fresh air also makes walking comfortable.' This corrects verb usage and word order.

× Umm, if I have a chance, I'd like to go to Santiago, which can long work.

✓ Umm, if I have the chance, I'd like to go to Santiago, which I could walk around for a long time.

Several issues: 'if I have a chance' should be 'if I have the chance' or 'if I get the chance'; 'which can long work' is ungrammatical. Use modal 'could' + verb phrase 'walk around for a long time' to express ability/possibility. Maintain conditional form for hypothetical future plans.

× It is one of my wish list, so someday.

✓ It is on my wish list, so I hope to go there someday.

Use the correct preposition 'on my wish list' and combine fragments into a complete sentence. 'So someday' is a sentence fragment; expand to 'so I hope to go there someday' for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× I will go them.

✓ I will go there.

Incorrect pronoun/object: 'them' refers to people or objects, not a place. Use the adverb 'there' to refer to a location. Keep future simple 'I will go there.'

× Uh, I went to go for a park nearby my house.

✓ Uh, I went to a park near my house.

'Went to go for' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use past simple 'went' plus 'to a park' and correct preposition 'near my house' (not 'nearby my house').

× All that place is really comfortable for me, so I sometimes when I get.

✓ That place is really comfortable for me, so I go there sometimes when I can.

Multiple errors: 'All that place' should be 'That place'; awkward clause 'so I sometimes when I get' is incomplete. Use 'so I go there sometimes when I can' to complete the thought. Maintain tense consistency and correct adverb placement.