Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., “every day” and “always” together), and reduce filler words like “you know”. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Also correct word order: “I aim to achieve” instead of “I every day I always target to achieve.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I aim to reach at least 10,000 steps every day because it helps me stay healthy and active. For example, I either walk in nearby parks or use the treadmill at the gym to meet my goal.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and use specific details. Correct prepositions and collocations (say “bring me to parks” and “play with friends” rather than “bring me in parks” / “fellow friends”). Use a linking word to show contrast when mentioning malls.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. My mother used to bring me to parks where I played with friends, and when we went elsewhere, we visited shopping malls and walked around to look at shops.

Sugerencia: Avoid fillers and hesitations, and correct vocabulary (use “de-stress” not “distress”). Make the response more concise and introduce supporting points with linking words such as “first” or “because”. Use varied vocabulary for “greenery”.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks mainly because of the peaceful environment. For example, being surrounded by trees and plants helps people relax and de-stress, and the fresh air also improves mood and concentration.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct expressions (e.g., “hike Mount Apple” rather than “hike, not walk Mount Apple”). Check grammar and articles: “one of the highest mountains”. Avoid incorrect word choice—use “de-stress”. Add linking words to explain reasons.

Ejemplo: I would like to hike Mount Apple in Mindanao. It is one of the highest mountains in the Philippines, and I want to reach the peak because I enjoy challenging trails and being immersed in nature to de-stress.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid starting with conjunctions like “And”. Remove repetition and fillers (“uh”). Be specific about timing (e.g., “recently” or “this week”) and use concise phrasing: one sentence topic + one supporting detail. Replace repeated phrase with a single clear statement.

Ejemplo: Recently I have been walking on the treadmill because it is very hot and humid in the Philippines. For instance, this week I used the gym treadmill four times to reach my daily goal of 10,000 steps.

× I every day I always target to achieve at least 10,000 steps because, you know, it's healthier to keep myself moving and to avoid living a stagnant lifestyle.

✓ Every day I always aim to achieve at least 10,000 steps because, you know, it's healthier to keep myself moving and avoid living a stagnant lifestyle.

Incorrect word order and verb choice for habitual present. Use 'Every day' at sentence start and 'aim' (common collocation) instead of 'target' as a verb here; remove redundant 'to' before 'avoid'. Also keep present tense consistent for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So yeah, I often hit the gym or walk in the parks to achieve my 10,000 daily steps.

✓ So yeah, I often go to the gym or walk in the park to achieve my daily 10,000 steps.

Incorrect use of plural 'parks' and awkward verb 'hit' for habitual action. Use 'go to the gym' and singular 'the park' or 'parks' consistently; 'daily 10,000 steps' word order is more natural. Tense remains present habitual. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I remember my mom used to bring me in parks so I could have a play date with my fellow friends.

✓ Yes, I remember my mom used to take me to parks so I could have play dates with my friends.

Preposition error 'bring me in parks' should be 'take me to parks'; pluralization and article issues: 'play date' becomes plural 'play dates' if habitual, and 'fellow friends' is redundant—use 'friends'. Past habitual 'used to' is correct. Grammar problem type ID:5

× If not in parks, we often visit malls and we roam around, walk and buy some stuff.

✓ If not in parks, we often visited malls and roamed around, walked and bought some things.

Tense inconsistency: question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense: 'visited', 'roamed', 'walked', 'bought'. Also 'some stuff' is informal; 'some things' is more appropriate. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Walking in parks seems to be quite similar to nature bathing.

✓ Walking in parks seems quite similar to nature bathing.

Redundant 'to be' is unnecessary but not strictly grammatical error; this is stylistic. However keep as-is or remove 'to be'. Classified under preposition/structure; recommended concise form. Grammar problem type ID:11

× it's very relaxing to be surrounded with greenery, with trees, with plants.

✓ it's very relaxing to be surrounded by greenery, trees, and plants.

Use preposition 'by' with 'surrounded' not 'with'. Also use commas and 'and' for natural coordination. Grammar problem type ID:11

× And I feel like it's more, umm, more ways to distress and free yourself from any worries that you have in mind.

✓ And I feel like it's more of a way to de-stress and free yourself from any worries you have in mind.

Incorrect noun phrase 'more ways' vs 'more of a way'; 'distress' (cause stress) vs 'de-stress' (relieve stress). Use correct form and article. Also remove redundant 'that'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Right now my goal is to hike, not walk Mount Apple.

✓ Right now my goal is to hike Mount Apple, not just walk it.

Word order and phrasing awkward. 'Hike Mount Apple' is clearer; add 'just' to contrast 'walk' for meaning. Present goal expressed with present tense 'is'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It's in Mindanao and it's one of the highest mountain in the Philippines and I would love to reach the peak, enjoy the difficult trails and just be immersed with nature so that I could distress.

✓ It's in Mindanao and it's one of the highest mountains in the Philippines, and I would love to reach the peak, enjoy the difficult trails, and just be immersed in nature so that I could de-stress.

Subject 'one of the' requires plural 'mountains'. Preposition 'immersed in' not 'with'. 'Distress' wrong meaning; use 'de-stress'. Maintain conditional/modal consistency. Grammar problem type ID:1

× And since it's too hot and humid in the Philippines at the moment, I spend a lot of time hitting the gym to achieve my daily 10,000 steps.

✓ And since it's too hot and humid in the Philippines at the moment, I have been spending a lot of time at the gym to achieve my daily 10,000 steps.

Present perfect continuous 'have been spending' better expresses an ongoing recent habit; 'hitting the gym' is informal—'spending time at the gym' is natural. Tense aligns with 'at the moment'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So I use the treadmill and uh, walk in, uh, walk using the treadmill to achieve my 10,000 daily steps.

✓ So I use the treadmill and walk on it to achieve my daily 10,000 steps.

Correct preposition for treadmill is 'walk on' (not 'walk in'). Also avoid repetition and reorder 'daily 10,000 steps' to 'daily 10,000 steps'. Grammar problem type ID:11