Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar: say "I go for a walk every evening" is fine but avoid repeating reasons. Replace "because" repetition with varied connectors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk every evening. I do this mainly for exercise, which keeps me fit, and also to relax after a stressful workday.

Sugerencia: Provide a complete, coherent answer without trailing off. Use a topic sentence then add a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Fix grammar: say "let me play" (not "let me to play"). Avoid repetition like "it was really fun" twice.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. For example, my parents used to take me to the park on Sundays where they would let me play on the swings and slides, which I always found very fun.

Sugerencia: Organise your answer: give a clear reason, then a supporting detail. Use correct phrases ("beautiful nature" -> "beautiful natural scenery"). Avoid unfinished phrases like "we can breathe with"; say "we can breathe fresh air." Use linking phrases such as "for example" or "moreover."

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because of the peaceful atmosphere and attractive natural scenery. For example, parks offer fresh air and greenery, which is a welcome change from noisy city streets.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear wish, then give a precise reason using correct grammar. Avoid awkward phrases like "once a time in my life" and say "at least once in my life." Clarify why the place appeals to you rather than vague observations about photos.

Ejemplo: I'd like to take a long walk in Central Park in New York at least once in my life because I've seen many photos of its varied landscapes and walking paths, and I want to experience the combination of nature and city views in person.

Sugerencia: Complete your answer and avoid trailing off. Start with a direct statement of where you went, then give a specific reason using linking words. Use natural phrasing: "a park near my house" and "the city-centre park is too busy, so I prefer the quieter local park."

Ejemplo: Lately I went for a walk in a park near my house. I prefer it because the city-centre parks are quite busy, whereas the local park is quieter and helps me relieve stress.

× Yes, I go for a walk every evening because it improves my physical fitness and I really enjoy walking outside because it helps me unwind from my stressful week. Uh.

✓ Yes, I go for a walk every evening because it improves my physical fitness, and I really enjoy walking outside because it helps me unwind after a stressful week.

The sentence uses present simple correctly but contains awkward phrasing 'from my stressful week.' Use 'after a stressful week' or 'after a long week' to show the relief that walking provides. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× Yes, my parents usually brought me to the park on Sunday and they let me to play with the playground equipment and it was really fun and it was my.

✓ Yes, my parents usually brought me to the park on Sundays, and they let me play on the playground equipment; it was really fun and one of my favorite memories.

The original mixes past simple with incorrect infinitive 'let me to play' (should be 'let me play') and has incorrect singular 'Sunday' when referring to habitual past action (use 'Sundays'). The ending 'it was my' is incomplete; supply a noun phrase such as 'one of my favorite memories.' Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× I think because it has a quiet atmosphere and a beautiful nature which you cannot see when you live in a big city and on top of that we can breathe with.

✓ I think it's because parks have a quiet atmosphere and beautiful natural scenery that you can't see in a big city, and on top of that we can breathe more easily there.

Problems: missing subject ('it' or 'parks'), 'a beautiful nature' is unidiomatic (use 'beautiful natural scenery' or 'nature'), 'which you cannot see when you live in a big city' should be 'that you can't see in a big city.' The phrase 'breathe with' is incorrect; use 'breathe more easily' or 'get fresh air.' Rework sentence for clarity and correct relative clause.

× I love to visit the Central Park in New York City once a time in my life because I have seen many of pictures with people walking in the Central Park and they were really busy.

✓ I'd love to visit Central Park in New York City once in my life because I have seen many pictures of people walking there and it looks very busy.

Tense and modal: use conditional 'I'd love to' or 'I would love to' to express desire for a hypothetical future action. 'The Central Park' should be 'Central Park' (no article). 'Once a time in my life' is unidiomatic; use 'once in my life.' 'Many of pictures with' is incorrect; use 'many pictures of.' 'Walking in the Central Park and they were really busy' is unclear; change to 'walking there and it looks very busy.'

× I went to a park nearby my house. I don't want to go to the park in the center of the city because it is fairly bustling and I cannot relieve my stress from my work, so I usually.

✓ I went to a park near my house. I don't want to go to the parks in the city center because they are fairly bustling and I can't relax from work there, so I usually go to the nearby park instead.

Errors: 'a park nearby my house' should be 'a park near my house.' Tense consistency: past 'I went' and present 'I don't want' are acceptable if describing general preference, but sentence ends incomplete 'so I usually.' Complete with 'so I usually go to the nearby park instead.' 'Relieve my stress from my work' is awkward; use 'relax from work' or 'relieve my work stress.' Also 'the park in the center of the city' is better as 'parks in the city center' or 'the park in the city center.'