Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, fix collocations and tense/word choice (e.g., "not as much as I'd like", "I lead a quite sedentary lifestyle", "I like to walk in the park after work"). Use one linking phrase to add detail. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Not as much as I’d like. I lead a quite sedentary lifestyle because I spend most of the day at my desk. However, after work I often go for a short walk in the park near my home to relax and get some fresh air.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar (past tense forms and word order) and use linking words for coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with correct verbs and articles. Avoid repetition and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Definitely — I was very active as a child. My friends and I used to go out to play games like hide-and-seek, and my family often visited the local park where we played volleyball and had picnics.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear single-sentence main idea, then support with specific reasons using linking words. Fix awkward phrases and repetition (e.g., "to be around surrounded"). Use vocabulary relevant to reasons (relaxation, exercise, socialising). Keep answer concise.

Ejemplo: Many people like walking in parks because it offers fresh air and a peaceful environment. In addition, parks are convenient places to exercise or meet friends, so people can relax and socialise after a busy day.

Sugerencia: Make the response grammatically correct and fluent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give vivid specific details (where, what you would do, why). Replace fragmented phrases with complete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I would like to take a long walk along a mountain trail to enjoy the scenery. I imagine taking photographs, listening to birds, and using the quiet time to clear my mind and relax.

Sugerencia: Clarify sequence and correct past tense and subject references. Start with a direct topic sentence stating where you went, then give two specific details about what you did. Remove fillers and incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: The other day I went to the park near my home after a stressful day. I bought a cup of tea, walked around the lake, and listened to music while looking for interesting plants and birds.

× Do you walk a lot? To be honest, not as so much as I'd like.

✓ Do you walk a lot? To be honest, not as much as I'd like.

The phrase 'not as so much' is ungrammatical. Use 'as much' to compare quantity (comparative structure). Remove extra word 'so'. Suggestion: 'not as much as I'd like.'

× I have a quite sedentary lifestyle due to my work, uh, where I spend a lot of time at my desk.

✓ I have quite a sedentary lifestyle because of my work, where I spend a lot of time at my desk.

The article 'a' with 'quite' is acceptable but 'a quite sedentary lifestyle' is less natural than 'quite a sedentary lifestyle'. Also 'due to my work' is formal; 'because of my work' fits spoken register. Suggestion: 'I have quite a sedentary lifestyle because of my work.'

× However, after a long day, I prefer working in the park near my home.

✓ However, after a long day, I prefer to work in the park near my home.

After 'prefer', use the infinitive 'to work' or the gerund 'working' consistently; 'prefer to work' is more natural for a habitual preference referring to a specific action. Suggestion: 'I prefer to work in the park.'

× I was quite active kid so I with my friend used to went out to play hide and seek as well as my family and I often went to the local park to spend time playing volleyball and having picnic.

✓ I was quite an active kid, so my friends and I used to go out to play hide-and-seek, and my family and I often went to the local park to play volleyball and have picnics.

Missing article before 'active kid' -> 'an active kid'. 'I with my friend' is incorrect order and number; use 'my friends and I'. 'Used to went' is wrong: modal 'used to' followed by base verb 'go'. 'Hide and seek' in spoken/written form uses hyphens. 'Having picnic' needs article/plural: 'have picnics' or 'have a picnic'. Suggest: 'my friends and I used to go out...and my family and I often went...to play volleyball and have picnics.'

× Walk in parks Walking in the park has become more popular recently, so many people prefer walking in the park to grab a coffee and catch up with friends.

✓ Walking in parks has become more popular recently, so many people prefer walking in the park to grab a coffee and catch up with friends.

Redundant 'Walk in parks' at start should be removed; use consistent plural 'parks' or singular 'the park'. Original had repetition. Suggestion: start with 'Walking in parks has become...' to be concise.

× It's a great way to to be around surrounded, green and fresh air to invite after a long day.

✓ It's a great way to be surrounded by green, fresh air after a long day.

Multiple issues: duplicated 'to', incorrect word order 'to be around surrounded' and wrong preposition—use 'surrounded by'. 'Green and fresh air to invite' is meaningless; remove 'to invite'. Suggest: 'be surrounded by green, fresh air after a long day.'

× To be honest, I'd like to head to alone trail to the mountain to observe, picture scenery and uh, become one with nature.

✓ To be honest, I'd like to head to a lone trail up the mountain to observe and photograph the scenery and become one with nature.

'Alone trail' is incorrect; use 'a lone trail' or 'a solitary trail'. 'To the mountain' is less natural than 'up the mountain'. 'Picture scenery' should be 'photograph the scenery' or 'take pictures of the scenery'. Remove extraneous commas and filler. Suggest: 'head to a lone trail up the mountain to observe and photograph the scenery.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately? The other day I had to the park near my home after a stressful day.

✓ Where did you go for a walk lately? The other day I went to the park near my home after a stressful day.

'Had to the park' is ungrammatical. Use past simple 'went to the park' to answer 'did you go'. 'Had' is auxiliary that needs past participle (e.g., 'had to' meaning 'was required to'), but here 'went' is correct. Suggest: 'I went to the park.'

× I grabbed a cup of tea and enjoy.

✓ I grabbed a cup of tea and enjoyed it.

Mixes past tense 'grabbed' with present 'enjoy'. Maintain past tense: 'enjoyed'. Also include object 'it' for clarity. Suggest: 'I grabbed a cup of tea and enjoyed it.'

× We uh, looking for unusual treats and listened to.

✓ We were looking for unusual treats and listening to the music.

'We uh, looking' is missing auxiliary verb 'were' for past continuous. 'Listened to' is incomplete — needs an object (what was listened to). Context likely 'listening to the music' or 'listening to birds'. Use 'were looking' and 'listening to the music.' Suggest: 'We were looking for unusual treats and listening to the music.'