Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct repetition and small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler phrases and self-corrections.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in the late afternoon. I usually walk my dog around the neighborhood because it keeps me physically active and also helps me relax after work.

Sugerencia: Clarify the main point and avoid major errors and confused words. Give a clear topic sentence about frequency and one specific memory. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and correct vocabulary (e.g. "harvest crops" not "crop deer").

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks with my father when I was a child. We would walk around our neighborhood to watch farmers harvest their crops, and those walks helped us bond and created many happy memories.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and use clearer vocabulary and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. "Cove off"). Offer two specific reasons with a linking phrase like "for example" or "because".

Ejemplo: People often walk in parks because it is a relaxing leisure activity. For example, parks offer fresh air and open space where people can exercise, chat with friends, or enjoy nature.

Sugerencia: This answer is mostly clear but can be tightened and made more natural. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add two specific reasons linked with "because" and "and". Avoid awkward phrases like "gives off more benefits."

Ejemplo: I would like to take a long walk along the beach boulevard because I could enjoy the sunset and the sea views, and the natural setting would help me relax and improve my mood and fitness.

Sugerencia: Keep it concise and use past tense consistently when describing a recent event. Use linking words like "and" or "which" and give one specific detail about where or what you saw.

Ejemplo: I walked my dog this afternoon in the nearby park. It was good exercise, a chance to spend quality time with my pet, and the trees and pond helped me feel peaceful.

× Yes, especially in late afternoons, I always make time to walk my dog around the subdivision for for his help and for my physical health, including my mental health, should I say, because walking gives me a sense of ease and it gives me a time to unwind.

✓ Yes, especially in the late afternoons, I always make time to walk my dog around the subdivision for his exercise and for my physical and mental health, because walking gives me a sense of ease and time to unwind.

Issues addressed: incorrect repetition ('for for'), awkward phrase 'for his help', redundant phrasing 'including my mental health, should I say', and article use. Use 'the late afternoons' for a habitual time period, replace 'for his help' with 'for his exercise' to convey reason, combine 'physical and mental health' for concision, and remove 'should I say' which is informal and interrupts the sentence. Also 'a time to unwind' is better as 'time to unwind' for natural expression. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Well said because my father and I used to roam around our subdivision to watch farmers crop deer, I mean harvest their crops, which gives us a little further and dollar bonding and it's a good time for me to reminisce this all the times.

✓ Well, my father and I used to roam around our subdivision to watch farmers harvest their crops, which gave us a little further and dollar bonding and it was a good time for me to reminisce about those times.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'crop deer' (word choice), incorrect present tense 'gives' with past habitual 'used to', awkward noun phrase 'further and dollar bonding' (likely meant 'closer and deeper bonding' or 'quality bonding'), and wrong preposition 'reminisce this all the times'. Use past tense 'gave' and 'was' to match 'used to'. Replace 'crop deer' with 'harvest their crops'. Use 'reminisce about those times'. Clarify 'closer and deeper bonding' if intended. Grammar problem type ID:5

× People like to roam roam around parks because for leisure purposes and other intended stuffs but I think it's majority that they want to Cove off and have a free time for their their selves themselves.

✓ People like to walk around parks for leisure and other purposes, but I think the majority want to get away and have free time for themselves.

Issues: repeated words 'roam roam' and 'their their selves themselves', incorrect word 'stuffs' (use 'things' or 'purposes'), wrong quantifier 'it's majority' should be 'the majority', incorrect phrasal verb 'Cove off' (likely 'get away'). Use 'free time for themselves' for correct reflexive pronoun. Simplify phrasing for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I would like to take a long walk near the beach at the Boulevard because not only I can enjoy the golden scenery of the sunset, but also having a distinct view of nature helps me relax and gives off more benefits of walking from my physical and mental health.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the boulevard by the beach because not only can I enjoy the golden scenery of the sunset, but also the clear view of nature helps me relax and brings additional physical and mental health benefits.

Problems: preposition and noun order ('near the beach at the Boulevard'→'along the boulevard by the beach'), inversion needed after 'not only' ('not only can I enjoy'), awkward 'having a distinct view' → use 'the clear view of nature', incorrect verb phrase 'gives off more benefits of walking from my physical and mental health' → 'brings additional physical and mental health benefits'. Ensure parallel structure after 'not only... but also'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I just recently walked my dog this afternoon and it gives me a time to exercise and have some quality time with my pet.

✓ I walked my dog this afternoon and it gave me time to exercise and to have some quality time with my pet.

Tense inconsistency: 'just recently walked' and 'it gives' mix past and present. Since 'this afternoon' is past, use past tense 'walked' and 'gave'. Remove unnecessary 'just recently' which is redundant with 'this afternoon'. Use 'gave me time to exercise and to have' for parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And on the other hand, I also gained a sense of peace because of the natural scenery.

✓ On the other hand, I also gained a sense of peace because of the natural scenery.

Minor wording: 'And on the other hand' is redundant; start with 'On the other hand'. Tense 'gained' is correct to match previous past-tense statements. Keep sentence concise and coherent. Grammar problem type ID:6