Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason. Avoid filler phrases and give one specific detail about when or how often you walked. Use linking words like 'but' or 'because' correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to walk a lot. I often walked for 30–60 minutes while listening to music because it helped me relax, but I haven't had time recently because I'm busy writing my thesis.

Sugerencia: Correct the grammar and give clearer, specific details. Begin with a direct statement, then add one or two precise examples of activities and places. Use linking words such as 'and' or 'for example' to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child. For example, I used to hang out with friends and play on the playground and nearby streets, where we rode bikes and climbed trees.

Sugerencia: Fix unclear words and structure. Give one main reason and support it with a specific consequence or example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' for coherence.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduces stress from work or studies, so they can clear their mind and feel more energetic afterward.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, grammatical topic sentence naming the place, then add specific details explaining why you would choose it. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases; use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk at Han River because it has wide riverside paths and open views of water, which help me relax and think clearly.

Sugerencia: Clarify place names and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a direct answer about when and where, then give one or two specific details about the surroundings or activities. Avoid repetition and unclear words.

Ejemplo: Yesterday I walked near a small stream called Chun Lang Chan. The area had large old trees and a quiet path where I sat and listened to the water.

× Yes, I used to walk a lot because I'm into just walking by listening to the music, but I haven't been walking a lot lately because I'm busy with my thesis.

✓ Yes, I used to walk a lot because I enjoy listening to music while walking, but I haven't been walking much lately because I'm busy with my thesis.

The sentence mixes present continuous and idiomatic expressions awkwardly. 'I'm into just walking by listening to the music' is unnatural; use 'I enjoy listening to music while walking' to express habitual preference (present simple). Also use 'much' instead of 'a lot' after 'haven't been walking' for natural negative form. Keep tense consistent: past habit 'used to' and present perfect continuous 'haven't been walking' are appropriate.

× Yes, when I was a child I often went out it for hanging out with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went out to hang out with my friends.

The original has extra pronoun 'it' and incorrect verb form 'for hanging out'. Use the infinitive 'to hang out' after 'went out' to indicate purpose. Remove 'it' which is unnecessary.

× I especially I liked play in the play in the playgrounds and the street fats surrounded.

✓ I especially liked playing in playgrounds and on the streets nearby.

Use the gerund 'playing' after 'liked'. Remove duplicate words and correct preposition: 'in playgrounds' and 'on the streets' are appropriate. 'Fats surrounded' is nonsensical; replace with 'nearby' to convey nearby streets. Also remove extra 'I'.

× I think P4 enjoy walking in parks because it helps them relax and they refresh their mind from their work and the OR busy assignments.

✓ I think people enjoy walking in parks because it helps them relax and refresh their minds from work and busy assignments.

'P4' and 'OR' appear to be typos; replace with 'people'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'people enjoy' (plural). Use 'refresh their minds' (plural pronoun agrees with people) and simplify 'from their work and busy assignments' for clarity.

× If I had the chance to work where I left you freely, umm I just say it's Han Weber.

✓ If I had the chance to walk where I liked freely, I would choose Han River.

The original has several errors and unclear words: 'work where I left you freely' is wrong. Use conditional structure 'If I had the chance... I would...' Change 'walk where I liked freely' to express preference. 'Han Weber' seems to be a misrendering of 'Han River' (a common place); replace for meaning. Use 'would choose' to match hypothetical conditional.

× It has a beautiful and the big re big water to helps me relax.

✓ It has beautiful, wide waters that help me relax.

Remove redundant articles and words: 'a beautiful and the big re big water' is ungrammatical. Use adjective 'beautiful' and 'wide' to describe waters. Use plural 'waters' or 'river' and the verb 'help' (not 'helps') to agree with plural 'waters' or use 'that helps me relax' with singular 'river'. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yesterday I went to a workload near the a a small stream and called the Chun Lang Chan.

✓ Yesterday I went to a walk along a small stream called Chun Lang Chan.

'Workload' is incorrect; likely meant 'walk'. Remove duplicate articles 'the a a'. Use 'a walk along a small stream' for natural phrasing. Place the name correctly: 'called Chun Lang Chan'. Use simple past 'went' appropriately.

× It has a big tree around the past it was.

✓ There were big trees around it.

Original word order and tense are confused. Use 'There were' for existence in the past and plural 'trees' if multiple. Place 'around it' at end for natural prepositional phrase. This corrects 'around the past it was' which is ungrammatical.