Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce repetition, correct minor grammar and use a clearer structure: a direct topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and a brief follow-up. Use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "also"). Avoid filler sounds and repeated words.

Ejemplo: I have one main hobby: playing badminton with my friends in the evenings. It keeps me fit and active because it involves a lot of running and quick movements. Also, I like it because I don’t need a gym membership — I can play at a local court with friends.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words like "then" or fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence about the past, then give specific reasons using linking words ("because", "so", "in the evenings"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: I didn’t have any hobbies when I was a child because my schedule was full of school and extra lessons. I went to school in the morning, attended tuition in the afternoon, and studied Quran in the evening, so I had little free time.

Sugerencia: Avoid mixing present and past tense; answer directly with past tense. Eliminate repetition and trailing words like "moreover." Provide a concise explanation with one or two supporting details and a linking word such as "because" or "so."

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t keep a hobby from childhood because I was under heavy academic pressure. I attended school in the morning and tuition in the afternoon, so I rarely had free time for hobbies.

Sugerencia: Make sentences grammatically correct and more natural by using plural/singular appropriately and smoother linking phrases like "for example" and "while." Keep it short: one topic sentence and one supporting sentence with specific examples.

Ejemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. For example, my sister enjoys gardening, my brother plays video games, while I prefer playing badminton with friends.

× Yes I I only have one hobby which is playing badminton with my friends in the evening.

✓ Yes, I only have one hobby, which is playing badminton with my friends in the evening.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'I I' and lacks punctuation. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the duplicate word and add commas around the nonrestrictive clause 'which is playing...' to improve clarity. Suggestion: Proofread to remove repeated words and use commas for nonrestrictive clauses.

× The reason is it a also helps me to keep fit and active and doesn't require any type of gym because badminton is itself an exercise.

✓ The reason is that it also helps me to keep fit and active and doesn't require going to a gym because badminton is exercise itself.

This sentence has several problems: missing conjunction 'that' after 'The reason is' (There be/structure issue ID 3), incorrect word order ('it a also'), and awkward phrase 'any type of gym'. Replace with 'that', move 'also' to correct position, and use 'going to a gym' for clarity. 'Badminton is exercise itself' is more natural than 'badminton is itself an exercise.' Suggestion: Use 'The reason is that...' for explanations, place adverbs like 'also' before the main verb, and use natural collocations such as 'going to a gym.'

× So badminton is my only hobby right now.

✓ So badminton is my only hobby right now.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (No applicable ID from the list.)

× When I was a child, then I don't have any type of hobby due to academic pressure because in the morning I have to go to school and afterwards I have to go tuition in the afternoon.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have any hobbies due to academic pressure because in the morning I had to go to school and afterwards I had to go to tuition in the afternoon.

This sentence mixes past and present tenses. Use past tense consistently when describing childhood (Past tense issue ID 5). Change 'don't have' to 'didn't have', 'have' to 'had', and pluralize 'hobby' to 'hobbies' to match context. Suggestion: Keep past-time descriptions in past tense throughout and ensure noun number matches context.

× And uh, furthermore, in the evening I had to go to my Quran teacher to learn Quran.

✓ In the evening I had to go to my Quran teacher to learn the Quran.

Add 'the' before 'Quran' (article error ID 22) and remove redundant 'and uh, furthermore'. Also include 'the' before 'Quran' because it is a specific text. This is primarily an article/preposition usage issue (ID 11 and 22). Suggestion: Avoid filler words and use 'the Quran' when referring to the scripture.

× No, I don't have a hobby when I was a child, uh, the reason is that I was under academic pressure, under a huge academic pressure at that time in the morning, I had to go to school.

✓ No, I didn't have a hobby when I was a child. The reason is that I was under a lot of academic pressure; at that time in the morning I had to go to school.

This sentence incorrectly mixes present and past tenses ('don't have' with 'was'). Use past tense for past events (Present tense issue ID 6 / Past tense ID 5). Also change 'under a huge academic pressure' to 'under a lot of academic pressure' (article/adjective use). Split into two sentences or use proper punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use natural expressions such as 'a lot of academic pressure.'

× Afterwards, I had to go to tuition in the afternoon. Moreover.

✓ Afterwards, I had to go to tuition in the afternoon.

The fragment 'Moreover.' is incomplete (sentence structure error ID 26). Remove the fragment or complete the thought. The corrected sentence is complete and coherent. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure every sentence has a complete thought.

× No, I have different hobby as compared to my family members.

✓ No, I have a different hobby compared to my family members.

Missing article 'a' before 'different hobby' and awkward comparative phrasing. This is a subject-verb/article/structure issue (IDs 1 and 22 and 26). Insert 'a' and simplify to 'compared to' for natural English. Suggestion: Use 'a different hobby' and prefer 'compared to' or 'compared with.'

× Uh, for instance, my sister likes to plant flowers in the garden whereas my brother loves to play video games and uh I love to play badminton.

✓ For instance, my sister likes to plant flowers in the garden, whereas my brother loves to play video games, and I love to play badminton.

Run-on sentence lacking commas before conjunctions and containing filler 'uh'. Add commas to separate clauses and remove filler. This is an incorrect conjunction/ punctuation issue (ID 16). Also ensure parallel structure when listing hobbies. Suggestion: Use commas to separate independent clauses and avoid filler words in formal speech.

× So we all have different type of hobbies in the family.

✓ So we all have different types of hobbies in the family.

'Different type of hobbies' is incorrect; use plural 'types' to match plural 'hobbies' (Incorrect use of quantifiers/number agreement ID 14). Change to 'different types of hobbies.' Suggestion: Ensure quantifiers and nouns agree in number: 'different types of hobbies' or simply 'different hobbies.'