Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, well). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., “I don't need to go to the gym” rather than “I don't need. So I don't go to the gym”). Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

Ejemplo: I enjoy playing badminton. I usually play with friends three times a week, which keeps me fit and energetic. Because it combines cardio and agility training, I don’t need to go to the gym.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently and avoid vague or incorrect words (e.g., “I didn't have any hobbies” not “I don't have”). Provide a concise reason and one specific detail. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

Ejemplo: I didn’t have any hobbies as a child because I was very busy with school. For example, I attended regular classes, extra tuition and evening religious lessons, so I had little free time for hobbies.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition (don’t repeat “The reason is”). Use one clear past reason and one concise timeline. Keep sentences in past tense when referring to childhood and present tense for current habits. Use linking words like “however” or “instead”.

Ejemplo: No, I don’t have a hobby that I’ve kept since childhood. Because I was very busy at school, I only developed my interest in badminton during university, and now I play regularly with friends to stay fit.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and present the examples in one fluid sentence. Avoid fragmented sentences and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “my younger sister likes to cook”). Use linking words like “whereas” or “while” smoothly.

Ejemplo: No, our hobbies are different. For example, I play badminton, whereas my younger brother prefers video games and my younger sister enjoys cooking, so we each spend free time differently.

× Yes, my favorite hobby is playing, well, playing badminton.

✓ Yes, my favorite hobby is playing badminton.

Unnecessary repetition and pause words; 'is playing, well, playing badminton' is redundant. Use the gerund 'playing' once after 'is' to form a correct noun phrase ('is playing badminton'). Suggestion: remove filler and repeat: 'My favorite hobby is playing badminton.'

× I often play with my friends and it helps me to keep fit and active throughout the day.

✓ I often play with my friends, and it helps me keep fit and stay active.

The original is mostly correct but wordy: 'helps me to keep fit and active throughout the day' is awkward. Use parallel structure 'keep fit and stay active'. Remove 'to' after 'helps me' for natural English. Suggestion: use parallel verbs and concise phrasing.

× And uh, it is also a kind of exercise so I don't need.

✓ It is also a form of exercise, so I don't need to go to the gym.

The sentence is incomplete ('so I don't need' lacks an object). Also 'a kind of exercise' is better as 'a form of exercise'. Complete the thought by adding 'to go to the gym.' Suggestion: always provide the verb and object after 'need' ('need to do something' or 'need something').

× So I don't go to the gym because badminton is itself an exercise.

✓ So I don't go to the gym because badminton is exercise in itself.

Word order and phrasing: 'is itself an exercise' is acceptable but more natural is 'exercise in itself' or 'is a form of exercise.' Minor stylistic change for naturalness. Suggestion: prefer 'exercise in itself' or 'a form of exercise.'

× No, I don't have any hobbies when I was a child because I was under a lot of study pressure.

✓ No, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child because I was under a lot of academic pressure.

Mixing present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use past tense 'didn't have.' Also 'study pressure' is better expressed as 'academic pressure.' Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions.

× Firstly I go to school and after school I go to attend tuition classes and at evening I attend Quran classes.

✓ First, I went to school, and after school I attended tuition classes, and in the evening I attended Quran classes.

The sentence describes past habitual actions ('when I was a child'), so use past tense verbs ('went', 'attended'). Also use 'in the evening' not 'at evening', and 'first' instead of 'firstly' for conversational style. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past actions and correct preposition 'in the evening'.

× So due to limited amount of time I don't have any hope.

✓ So due to the limited amount of time, I didn't have any hobbies.

'Limited amount of time' needs the definite article 'the' and the original 'I don't have any hope' is incorrect meaning-wise. Likely intended: 'I didn't have any hobbies.' Also tense must be past to match context. Suggestion: use 'the limited amount of time' and state intended meaning (hobbies) rather than 'hope.'

× No, I don't have such type of hobby which I had since childhood.

✓ No, I don't have any hobby that I have had since childhood.

Tense inconsistency: speaker refers to present possession but 'had since childhood' mixes past. Use present perfect 'have had since childhood' for an action starting in the past and continuing to present. Also 'such type of hobby' is awkward; use 'any hobby that' or 'any hobby I have had since childhood.' Suggestion: use present perfect for duration from past to present and simplify the phrase.

× The reason is during uh. The reason is in my childhood I had very limited amount of time so I developed a hobby during my university degree where I often play with my friends to keep myself fit and active.

✓ The reason is that during my childhood I had a very limited amount of time, so I developed a hobby during my university studies, where I often played with my friends to keep myself fit and active.

Fragment ('The reason is during uh.') should be removed. Use 'the reason is that' to introduce explanation. Use past tense 'had' and 'played' because this refers to past events. 'University degree' is better phrased as 'university studies.' Also add articles ('a very limited amount of time'). Suggestion: avoid fragments, maintain consistent past tense for past events, and use natural collocations ('university studies').

× No, my family members have different type of hobbies.

✓ No, my family members have different types of hobbies.

Count noun agreement: 'different' should be followed by plural 'types' when referring to multiple kinds. Also 'have different types of hobbies' is more natural. Suggestion: match singular/plural for 'type/types' according to meaning.

× For example, I love to play badminton whereas my younger brother likes to play video games and my younger sister. Likes to cook food.

✓ For example, I love to play badminton, whereas my younger brother likes to play video games, and my younger sister likes to cook.

Sentence was split incorrectly with a period before 'Likes'; capitalize and punctuation wrong. Remove unnecessary 'food' after 'cook' (cook or cook food both okay, but 'cook' is more natural). Ensure pronoun and verb are connected: 'my younger sister likes to cook.' Suggestion: keep clauses connected, fix punctuation and capitalization, and use parallel structure for the list.