Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobbies, then give one specific supporting detail. Correct grammar (e.g. "these hobbies", "relax and unwind", "work in the park"). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" once to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I enjoy reading, writing and walking as my main hobbies. For example, after a long day at work I like to walk in the park near my home to relax and unwind because the fresh air helps me clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Use correct past tense consistently and be specific about actions. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did"), then explain what you wanted and why you couldn't pursue it. Use linking words like "but" and "although" correctly and avoid vague phrases like "take a chance to practice."

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I wanted to learn the piano, but my family couldn't afford lessons when I was a child, so I only taught myself simple songs and listened to a lot of recordings to practice.

Sugerencia: Clarify what you mean by "working" as a hobby (e.g. gardening, helping in a family business). Use past tense for childhood and present for ongoing habits. Remove repetitions and be specific about activities and benefits. Structure: topic sentence + one or two specific supporting details with linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes. Since childhood I have enjoyed gardening with my parents, helping to plant and water vegetables after school. Even now, gardening relaxes me physically and mentally because being outdoors and caring for plants calms my thoughts.

Sugerencia: Respond with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I share some hobbies with my family") and then give a specific example with linking words. Combine short fragmented sentences and fix minor grammar (e.g. "after dinner in the park"). Mention frequency or a short reason to enrich the answer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I share walking as a hobby with my father. We often go for a walk in the park near our home after dinner because it helps us relax and catch up on each other's day.

× I have some hobbies like reading, writing and working 'cause this hobbies help me relax and on wind, especially after a long boring day of work.

✓ I have some hobbies like reading, writing and working 'cause these hobbies help me relax and unwind, especially after a long, boring day of work.

The original uses 'this hobbies' which mismatches singular demonstrative 'this' with plural noun 'hobbies' (singular/plural issue). Also 'on wind' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'unwind'. Add a comma between 'long' and 'boring' for coordinate adjectives. Suggestion: use 'these hobbies' for plural and 'unwind' instead of 'on wind'.

× For example, when I finish a busy day, I often choose to work in my parks near my home.

✓ For example, when I finish a busy day, I often choose to work in the park near my home.

Phrase 'my parks' is incorrect because 'parks' is plural and odd with 'my' in this context; likely singular 'park' is intended. This is an issue of incorrect noun number and article use, but corrected by using 'the park' (present participle not required). Use 'the park' for a specific nearby park. Also 'work in the park' is natural phrasing.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have a particular hobby.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a particular hobby.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was a child' with present tense 'have'. Tenses must match; use past tense 'had' to agree with the time reference.

× I used to love the idea of learning the piano, but my family was tight on cash so we couldn't afford it.

✓ I used to love the idea of learning the piano, but my family was tight on cash, so we couldn't afford it.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but missing a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' joining two independent clauses. Marked as past tense issue because the sentence refers to past habits; add punctuation for clarity.

× I was disappointed because I couldn't take lessons, although I still enjoyed listening to music and take a chance to practice.

✓ I was disappointed because I couldn't take lessons, although I still enjoyed listening to music and taking any chance to practice.

After 'enjoyed' the verb should be in -ing form: 'taking'. Also 'take a chance to practice' is awkward; 'taking any chance to practice' or 'taking any opportunity to practice' is clearer.

× Yes, when I was a child I developed a hobby that is working.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I developed a hobby of working.

The phrase 'a hobby that is working' is ungrammatical; use 'a hobby of working' or 'a hobby that involved working'. Also tense is past, so 'developed' is correct; adjust noun phrase for correctness.

× I used to work with my parents especially after my homework or either grew older.

✓ I used to work with my parents, especially after finishing my homework or as I grew older.

Original uses 'or either grew older' which is incorrect conjunction and structure. Replace with 'as I grew older' to show time progression and add 'finishing' to clarify 'after finishing my homework'.

× I find hobby I find working good for my my physical and mental health especially it helps relax in the wind.

✓ I find working to be good for my physical and mental health; especially, it helps me relax and unwind.

This sentence has repetition ('I find' twice, 'my my') and awkward structure. Rephrase to 'I find working to be good for my physical and mental health' and use 'helps me relax and unwind' for natural expression. 'Relax in the wind' is incorrect; use 'unwind' or 'relax in the fresh air' if intended.

× Yes, I love walking, so that's my dad. Both.

✓ Yes, I love walking, and so does my dad.

Original 'that's my dad. Both.' is ungrammatical. Use 'so does my dad' to show shared preference; this corrects pronoun and pronoun-verb inversion for emphasis.

× We think walking can benefit our mental and physical health, and we often take a walk together after a dinner in the parks near my home.

✓ We think walking can benefit our mental and physical health, and we often take a walk together after dinner in the park near my home.

Use 'after dinner' without the article 'a' for the general activity. 'the parks' is likely a specific single park near home, so use 'the park' (or 'parks' without 'the' if plural). 'In the parks' is odd for 'take a walk together after dinner'; 'in the park' or 'in parks' would be better. Adjust articles for natural English.