Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar and remove fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., "I do strength training", "after studying at UMM", "I really enjoy it").

Ejemplo: Yes. I do strength training twice a week and take jazz and hip hop classes four to five times a week. These activities keep me fit and energetic after studying at UMM, and I really enjoy how dancing lifts my mood.

Sugerencia: Use correct past tense and clearer details. Avoid unclear words ("eight" seems wrong). Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, then give specific examples and a linking phrase. Correct grammar: "I loved dancing when I was a child," and specify performances.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved dancing when I was a child, especially traditional ethnic dances. For example, I often performed for my family at festivals, and I enjoyed the colorful costumes and lively music.

Sugerencia: Good structure but avoid repetition ("energetic energy") and keep sentences concise. Use linking words like "however" or "since then" to show progression. Include one specific detail about how the new styles differ from traditional dances.

Ejemplo: Yes, I've been dancing since childhood. I started with traditional ethnic dances; however, since my teens I moved on to jazz and hip hop because they have more dynamic movements and give me greater freedom of expression.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers and improve clarity. Provide one clear reason and a specific example of how you practice together. Fix vague phrase "before coming" — specify where you go (e.g., classes or events).

Ejemplo: Yes. My mother and I both practice traditional ethnic dance because it connects us with our culture and helps us bond. For instance, we rehearse together at home twice a week before going to our weekend performances.

× Yes, I do uh, I do stress training twice a week and I take jazz and hip hop classes four to five times a week.

✓ Yes, I do stress training twice a week, and I take jazz and hip-hop classes four to five times a week.

Comma needed before conjunction joining independent clauses; 'hip hop' as compound adjective is commonly hyphenated as 'hip-hop'. This is an issue of sentence structure and word form; keep present simple consistent.

× They keep me fit and energetic after studying UMM, and I'm really enjoyed doing those.

✓ They keep me fit and energetic after studying at UMM, and I really enjoy doing those.

'I'm really enjoyed' is incorrect because 'enjoyed' is past participle; after 'I'm' (I am) you need present participle or adjective. Correct is 'I really enjoy' (simple present) to match habitual action. Also add preposition 'at' before institution name: 'studying at UMM'. This matches Present tense issue and verb form usage.

× I love the dancing when I was child, especially the traditional ethnic dances.

✓ I loved dancing when I was a child, especially the traditional ethnic dances.

Mixing present tense 'I love' with 'when I was a child' (past time) is inconsistent. Use past tense 'I loved' and include article 'a' before 'child'. Also 'the dancing' is better as 'dancing' without 'the'. This is a Past tense issue and Article error.

× I used to perform eight in front of my family and I really enjoyed the colorful costumes and lovely music.

✓ I used to perform often in front of my family, and I really enjoyed the colorful costumes and lovely music.

'Perform eight' is likely a mispronunciation or wrong word; context suggests 'often'. Replace with 'often'. Maintain past tense 'used to' and add comma for clarity. This fixes quantifier/word choice and sentence structure.

× Yes, I've been dancing since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I've been dancing since I was a child.

Sentence is correct. Use present perfect continuous 'I've been dancing' to show an action that started in the past and continues; no change needed.

× But over the years I moved on to jazz and hip hop because I enjoy their energetic energy and freedom of movement.

✓ But over the years I moved on to jazz and hip-hop because I enjoy their energetic style and the freedom of movement.

'Energetic energy' is redundant; use 'energetic style' or simply 'energy'. Hyphenate 'hip-hop'. Tense 'moved on' (past) is acceptable following 'over the years'; 'enjoy' stays present because it's a general truth. This addresses word choice and present tense consistency.

× Yes, I do. My mom and I both do traditional ethnic dance, uh, because they connect us with our culture and uh, uh, help us bond.

✓ Yes, I do. My mom and I both perform traditional ethnic dance because it connects us with our culture and helps us bond.

'They connect' is incorrect because the subject 'traditional ethnic dance' is singular (or a singular activity); use 'it connects' and 'helps'. Also replace 'do' with 'perform' for a natural collocation. Remove filler 'uh' and ensure verb agreement. This is Incorrect use of pronouns and Subject-verb agreement.

× We often practice together at home before coming.

✓ We often practice together at home before going out or before performances.

'Before coming' is incomplete and unclear; specify the intended action: 'before going out' or 'before performances'. Adjust to make the sentence clear and grammatically complete. This fixes sentence structure and preposition use.