Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 3~5문장 내로 답변을 구성하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like singing because I enjoy creating my own songs. It allows me to express my feelings and have fun. Singing helps me relax and feel happy.

Sugerencia: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적으로 맞지 않는 부분이 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간단하고 명확한 문장으로 직접 질문에 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I started taking singing lessons this January because I want to support a campaign against suicide through my singing.

Sugerencia: 답변이 중복되고 문법 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 주제 문장으로 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유와 목적을 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: I want to sing for people who feel depressed or lonely. My goal is to give them hope and encourage positive thinking through my songs.

Sugerencia: 답변이 불완전하고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 긍정적인 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 포함하여 답변을 완성하세요.

Ejemplo: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It can uplift their mood and provide comfort, especially for those who are feeling depressed. That's why I participate in campaigns to help others through music.

× So I really like to sing us songs my that I make.

✓ So I really like to sing songs that I make.

The phrase 'to sing us songs my that I make' is incorrect due to improper word order and unnecessary pronoun 'us'. The correct form is 'to sing songs that I make', which properly uses the relative pronoun 'that' to describe the songs and removes the incorrect 'us'.

× I've started a too long to take. Book a lesson.

✓ I've started taking lessons since January.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I've started a too long to take' is not grammatically correct. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the intended meaning using proper verb forms and sentence structure.

× Since this January, because of asking because the I I like to some campaign for against the suicide.

✓ Since this January, I have been involved in a campaign against suicide because I care about it.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear phrasing. 'Because of asking because the I I like to some campaign for against the suicide' is confusing. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses appropriate prepositions and sentence structure.

× Yes, uh, I want to sing for the people who are depressed or fizzles, think to kill themselves or people who really lonely.

✓ Yes, I want to sing for people who are depressed or feel like killing themselves, or people who are really lonely.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains spelling errors ('fizzles' instead of 'feel like'). The correction fixes pronoun usage and spelling to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× That's why I wanna give them some power to leave or positive thinking. To leave.

✓ That's why I want to give them some power to live or positive thinking.

The word 'leave' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'live' to express encouraging life. Also, 'wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× I think singing can bring happiness and unhappiness as well to people.

✓ I think singing can bring both happiness and unhappiness to people.

The phrase 'happiness and unhappiness as well to people' is awkward. The correction improves clarity and naturalness by restructuring the sentence.

× So that's why I make campaign for the people who are depressed.

✓ So that's why I make campaigns for people who are depressed.

The original sentence lacks plural agreement and proper article usage. 'Make campaign' should be 'make campaigns' or 'run a campaign', and 'for the people' is better as 'for people' for generalization.

× So singing a song has some power, so I.

✓ So singing a song has some power, so I continue to do it.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. The correction completes the sentence to convey the intended meaning.