Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar (e.g., "full-time", "at the moment", school name) and avoid unclear phrases like "the aisles."

Ejemplo: I'm a full-time student in my final year at Nazarbayev Intellectual School. At the moment most of my time is spent on classes and preparing for final exams, which makes this a very busy period. However, I enjoy it because the workload helps me learn new skills every day.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear supporting reason. Improve grammar and linking words (remove contradictory connectors like "and however"). Use consistent capitalization and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I study full time at Nazarbayev Intellectual School. I spend a lot of time on my studies because the school offers a challenging but supportive environment that helps me develop academically and personally.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct odd phrases (e.g., "close Knight society"). Give one clear reason and a specific example of how the school helped you (organize, independence). Keep it concise and natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work. Although the workload is intense during exams, the teachers push me to improve. For example, I learned to manage my time better and take responsibility for group projects, which made me more organized and confident.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct statement (Yes or No) then add two specific details. Fix grammar ("stimulating for me", "a little different", "competitions"). Use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like it because it's intellectually stimulating for me. Every day is different — we have lessons, group projects and competitions — so it never gets repetitive. Also, meeting classmates with different perspectives helps me learn new ideas.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and relevant. To improve, add a brief example or a specific field of interest and use linking words for flow. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Ejemplo: I'm keeping my options open, but I want a career where I can keep learning, solve real-world problems and collaborate with others. For instance, I'm interested in engineering or data science because they combine problem-solving with teamwork and have the potential to benefit people's lives.

× I'm a full time student in my final year of high school at Nerf intellectual school.

✓ I'm a full-time student in my final year of high school at Nazarbayev Intellectual School.

Incorrect school name and missing hyphen in 'full-time' create sentence clarity issues; also proper nouns must be capitalized correctly. Use 'Nazarbayev Intellectual School' (proper name) and hyphenate 'full-time' when used as adjective. Improve accuracy by checking proper nouns and compound adjective punctuation.

× At that moment, most of my time is taken by of my classes and preparing for my final exam as well as the aisles.

✓ At the moment, most of my time is taken up by my classes and by preparing for my final exams as well as by extracurricular activities.

'At that moment' is inappropriate for a habitual present; use 'At the moment'. 'is taken by of' is ungrammatical; correct is 'is taken up by'. 'final exam' should be plural if referring to multiple subjects. 'the aisles' appears to be a wrong word; likely 'extracurricular activities' or 'assignments' fits. Use parallel structure with repeated 'by' or remove duplicates.

× It's definitely a busy period, but I actually enjoy being challenged because I feel like I'm learning something new every day.

✓ It's definitely a busy period, but I actually enjoy being challenged because I feel I learn something new every day.

Original is acceptable, but to match tense consistency prefer 'I feel I learn' or keep 'I feel like I'm learning' — avoid mixing 'feel like' with progressive if aiming for concise present-tense description. Both versions are grammatical; suggestion improves stylistic consistency.

× As I said earlier, I'm a full time student at Nazarbayev Intellectual School.

✓ As I said earlier, I'm a full-time student at Nazarbayev Intellectual School.

Missing hyphen in compound adjective 'full-time' when used before a noun. No tense or agreement issue; hyphenation fixes adjective form.

× I devote A considerable amount of time to my studies and however, I genuinely enjoy expanding my knowledge because school provides A challenging but supportive learning environment for me.

✓ I devote a considerable amount of time to my studies; however, I genuinely enjoy expanding my knowledge because the school provides a challenging but supportive learning environment for me.

Capitalization errors ('A' should be 'a') and punctuation/connector misuse: 'and however' is incorrect; use a semicolon or period before 'however'. Also add definite article 'the' before 'school' if referring to the institution previously mentioned. Ensure lowercase 'a' and proper sentence connectors.

× Yes, it is. School can be quite demanding, especially during exam season, but I like the fact that they constantly push me to improve.

✓ Yes, it is. The school can be quite demanding, especially during exam season, but I like that it constantly pushes me to improve.

Use 'the school' to refer back to the named institution. Pronoun 'they' is plural and does not agree with singular 'school'; replace with singular 'it'. Also 'the fact that' is wordy; 'that' is sufficient. Maintain subject-pronoun agreement.

× Looking back, I think school has helped me become much more organized, independent and confident because of the close Knight society.

✓ Looking back, I think the school has helped me become much more organized, independent, and confident because of the close-knit community.

'close Knight society' is incorrect word choice and capitalization; likely intended 'close-knit community'. Also add 'the' before 'school' and commas in list. 'Close-knit' is hyphenated when used as adjective before noun.

× I think that it's intellectually stimulating me because every day it's a little different from each other.

✓ I think that it's intellectually stimulating because every day is a little different from the previous one.

'stimulating me' is awkward; use 'stimulating' alone. 'every day it's a little different from each other' is ungrammatical: 'each other' requires two entities; compare days to 'the previous one' or 'the last'. Use clear comparative phrase.

× We have lessons, group projects, competition and school events, so it never feels too repetitive.

✓ We have lessons, group projects, competitions, and school events, so it never feels too repetitive.

List consistency: 'competition' should be plural 'competitions' to match other plural nouns in list. Also add Oxford comma for clarity. Maintain parallel structure among items.

× I also enjoy meeting people with different ideas because I always ended up learning something from them.

✓ I also enjoy meeting people with different ideas because I always end up learning something from them.

Mix of present-tense context with past 'ended up' is inconsistent. Change 'ended up' to present 'end up' to match habitual present. Use consistent tense for habitual actions.

× I'm still keeping my options open, but I'd like a career where I can keep learning, solve real problems, and work with people.

✓ I'm keeping my options open, but I'd like a career where I can continue learning, solve real problems, and work with people.

'I'm still keeping' is acceptable but wordy; 'I'm keeping' or 'I still keep' is better. 'Keep learning' is informal; 'continue learning' is more natural. Maintain parallel verbs in list.

× Good salary is essential of course, but I'd also like to enjoy what I do and feel that my work has a positive impact on others.

✓ A good salary is essential, of course, but I'd also like to enjoy what I do and feel that my work has a positive impact on others.

Missing article 'A' before 'good salary'. Add commas around 'of course'. This fixes article error and punctuation.