Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe a time when you did an exciting activity with other people
Example
A surprise party What the activity was I'm going to talk about a surprise party I held about six months ago for my best friend. I held it in my apartment, which is quite small, ten friends and I organized it. Where you did this activity I had planned to have the party in a restaurant but it was going to be too expensive so I decided to have it in my apartment. It wasn't ideal but I could just about fit twelve people in the living room. Why you did this activity As I said, it was a surprise party so my best friend had no idea about it. She was turning 21 and going to move abroad soon so it was the last chance to celebrate with her for a while. I took a photo of her as she walked in and it's the moment we've just turned the lights on to surprise her. She looks really shocked and it captures the exact moment that everyone shouted 'surprise'. It's such a great photo although she thinks she looks really weird. Explain how you felt about it It was the first time I'd thrown a surprise party and it was such a success. She had no idea about it and she was so grateful. It's such a great memory. It was a lot of work though so I don't know if I'd volunteer to do it again, but it was certainly worth the effort.
Vocabulary
  • organize
  • ideal
  • shocked
  • fit twelve people
  • last chance to celebrate
  • capture the exact moment
  • thrown a surprise party
  • grateful
  • great memory
  • worth the effort
Example
An exhilarating activity I partook in with others was white-water rafting, carried out on the turbulent waters of a local river. A group of friends and I chose this activity to inject a dose of thrill into our mundane routines and to foster stronger bonds amongst ourselves. This adventurous endeavor took place in the serene yet untamed outskirts of our town, where the river's dynamic currents presented a riveting challenge. We decided to embark on this adventure primarily due to our collective yearning for excitement and our desire to step out of our comfort zones. The moment our raft faced the roaring waves, a blend of anticipation and adrenaline surged through our veins. The pulsating rhythms of the river synchronized with our fervent paddling, turning the journey into a symphony of thrill and camaraderie. The synergy amongst us was palpable, as every paddle stroke symbolized a collective pursuit of overcoming the untamed currents. This experience was more than just a confrontation with nature's raw power; it was a vivid illustration of unity and resilience. The surge of euphoria I felt when we successfully navigated through the tumultuous waters was indescribable, weaving a tapestry of emotions sprinkled with moments of suspense, exhilaration, and triumph. It strengthened our bonds and left us with unforgettable memories, turning a fleeting moment into an eternal imprint in our hearts.
Grammar Analysis
- Combining complex sentences with simple sentences: The answer uses various complex sentences. For example, "An exhilarating activity I partook in with others was white-water rafting, carried out on the turbulent waters of a local river." This sentence is a compound sentence that describes the nature and location of the rafting activity. - Proper use of tense: The answer mainly uses the simple past tense to describe past experiences and feelings. For example, "We decided to embark on this adventure primarily due to our collective yearning for excitement and our desire to step out of our comfort zones." This sentence uses the simple past tense to describe the thoughts and decisions at that time. - Sense of hierarchy in expression: By using phrases like "the moment," "more than just," and "indescribable," the answer shows a sense of hierarchy and depth in expression. This not only increases the complexity of the sentence, but also enhances the accuracy and richness of expression. - Using adjectives to enhance descriptions: The answer includes adjectives such as "euphoria," "tumultuous," and "fervent," which not only make the descriptions more vivid, but also demonstrate the precision and sophistication in vocabulary selection.
Vocabulary
  • exhilarating
  • turbulent
  • adrenaline
  • fervent
  • synergy
  • resilience
  • euphoria
  • tumultuous