Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe a sportsperson you admire
Example
A picture of Yao Ming Who he/she is I'm going to talk about Yao Mong, a really famous Chinese basketball player who played in the NBA. What you know about him/her He was born in Shanghai and started his playing career there. Then he moved to the US and became an all-star in the NBA for a number of years and raised the profile of basketball in China. I think it's now the most popular sport in the country thanks to him. What he/she is like in real life He's a really nice guy that comes across as very kind in interviews. Since retirement, he's done lots of work about protecting wildlife from hunters, visiting countries where poaching is an issue, trying to raise the profile of this problem. What he/she has achieved He was MVP loads of times during his playing career but for me, it's the work he's done since then that has, in my opinion, been his biggest achievement. And explain why you admire him/her He's appeared in numerous adverts about the ivory trade and how it needs to be stopped. He's made documentaries about the trade in elephant tusks and rhino horns and is an advocate for the banning of trade. It's something that I also believe in and is very close to my heart and this has increased my admiration of him.
Vocabulary
  • all-star
  • raise the profile
  • poach
  • loads of times
  • MVP
  • ivory trade
  • numerous adverts
  • documentaries
  • advocate
  • banning of trade
  • increase my admiration of
Example
The sportsperson I deeply admire is Roger Federer, the Swiss tennis legend. He has been in the professional tennis circuit since the late 1990s and has achieved a staggering 20 Grand Slam titles as of my last update. I've had the privilege of watching him play in a few tournaments on television, and I also closely follow news and interviews about him. He seems to be a gentleman on and off the court, with a down-to-earth demeanor and a genuine respect for everyone around him. In real life, he's known for his philanthropy, having started the Roger Federer Foundation to improve educational opportunities for children in impoverished communities. He's not just an athlete; he's a role model who goes the extra mile to make a difference in people's lives. His most impressive achievement, in my view, is not solely his wins, but the longevity and consistency of his career. In a sport where physical prowess is paramount, his ability to compete at an elite level for over two decades is nothing short of miraculous. What makes me admire him even more is his unwavering sportsmanship and humility. Unlike some athletes who let success get to their heads, Federer remains grounded, always acknowledging the effort of his opponents and cherishing every moment on the court. He embodies the very ideals of commitment, humility, and excellence that I aspire to.
Grammar Analysis
- Combining complex and simple sentences: For example, "In a sport where physical prowess is paramount, his ability to compete at an elite level for over two decades is nothing short of miraculous." This sentence uses compound sentences and relative clauses. - Proper tense usage: Mainly using the present simple and present perfect tenses to describe long-term states and achievements. - Expressing hierarchical sense: By using "even more," "solely," and "unlike," the answer demonstrates a rich sense of hierarchy. - Clever use of modifiers and adjectives: For example, "down-to-earth demeanor," "genuine respect," and "staggering 20 Grand Slam titles" increase the vividness and accuracy of the description. - Logical coherence and clear structure: By using "What makes me admire," "In real life," and "In my view," the answer presents clear logic and structure.
Vocabulary
  • Staggering
  • Demeanor
  • Philanthropy
  • Longevity
  • Consistency
  • Prowess
  • Unwavering
  • Sportsmanship
  • Grounded