Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe a rule that is important in your school or at work
Example
The most important rule we have at my company is to be polite to our customers no matter what. I work for a large interior design and building company, which means that we deal with clients ranging from the representatives of other large companies, right down to individuals who want their own houses refurbished. Although I am a white-collar worker, there are people with all kinds of jobs working with us. However, the company founder insists that all staff, no matter what business function they work in, attend regular training on customer service. This is to ensure that we treat our customers with respect at all times, even when their expectations might seem unrealistic or they are dissatisfied with our service. Although people don't often break this rule, I have heard of a few incidents where customers have complained about poor service. When this happens, the founder of the company gets personally involved and makes a big effort to smooth things over. The employee responsible is usually fired, or at least loses their bonus for the year. Even though this rule may seem a bit harsh at times, I think it is really important for the continued success of our company, and has been a key part of making it what it is today. I also believe that politeness is important in all areas of life generally, so I support the company founder's insistence on it. Overall, I'm really glad we have this rule, and I think everyone should follow it!
Vocabulary
  • interior design and building company
  • white-collar worker
  • regular training
  • treat our customers with respect
  • unrealistic expectations
  • dissatisfied with our service
  • incidents
  • gets personally involved
  • employee responsible
  • the continued success of our company
  • politeness is important
  • support the company founder's insistence
  • everyone should follow it
Example
One rule that holds immense significance at my university is academic integrity, which essentially means not cheating on exams or plagiarizing from others' work. This rule is strictly enforced, and for good reason. When someone violates this policy, the consequences can be quite severe, ranging from receiving a failing grade for that assignment to more drastic measures like expulsion from the university. What makes this rule crucial is that it safeguards the value of education. By adhering to academic integrity, students are not only learning the material but also internalizing the virtues of honesty and personal responsibility. Personally, I wholeheartedly support this rule. It creates a level playing field for all students and ensures that people who work hard receive the recognition they deserve. At the end of the day, it's about building a culture of respect and fairness, which resonates with me profoundly. Academic integrity is not just a rule; it’s a reflection of one's character. Therefore, I am more than willing to uphold it, not just as a student, but as an individual aspiring to be a responsible citizen.
Grammar Analysis
- Combination of complex and simple sentences: The answer uses complex sentences and compound sentences. For example, "When someone violates this policy, the consequences can be quite severe," this sentence uses "when" to introduce a time adverbial clause. - Proper use of tenses: It mainly uses the present simple tense to describe general rules and views. For example, "It creates a level playing field for all students," this sentence uses the present simple tense. - Expression of hierarchy: By using "essentially," "personally," and "therefore," the answer reflects the hierarchy and depth of expression. - Logical coherence and timeline: By using "when," "therefore," "personally," the answer ensures the coherence of time and logic. - Advanced vocabulary and accuracy: The answer includes words like "immense significance," "adhering," and "internalizing," which not only enhance the richness of description but also demonstrate the precision and sophistication of word choice in the answer.
Vocabulary
  • Immense significance
  • Essentially
  • Strictly enforced
  • Violates
  • Consequences
  • Adhering
  • Internalizing
  • Virtues
  • Level playing field
  • Resonates