Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe an activity that made you feel tired
Example
A meal for the family When and where it took place I'm going to talk about the time I cooked a huge meal for all my family at my house about one month ago. What the activity was It was my mum's birthday and all the family came over: my sister, my cousins, and my mum and dad... My uncle helped me cook a feast for everyone as he is an amazing chef. We had discussed what to make and had bought all the ingredients the day before. Why you took part in it The original plan had been to go to a restaurant and eat there but one of my cousins has a lot of allergies so I said I would make dinner for everyone at my house as it would be easier. I love cooking and I love taking traditional recipes and adapting them to experiment with flavors. And explain why it made you feel tired I was so tired by the end because the menu I had worked on with my uncle included so many dishes. It took most of the day to make everything but the food he made was amazing and everyone commented on how great it was, which was a relief.
Vocabulary
  • cook a huge meal
  • amazing chef
  • ingredients
  • traditional recipes
  • adapt
  • experiment with flavors
  • allergies
  • original plan
  • comment on
  • relief
Example
About two years ago, I took part in a demanding hiking expedition. The event transpired on a sunny Saturday in a picturesque national park situated about 50 miles from my city. It was an all-day affair, beginning early in the morning and wrapping up late in the afternoon. The activity was a guided trek along a challenging trail that included steep inclines and intricate paths. Despite the physical intensity, the experience was uplifting, as the trail meandered through lush forests and passed by tranquil lakes. The payoff at the summit, featuring an awe-inspiring panoramic view, made all the effort worthwhile. As for why it left me feeling drained, multiple factors contributed. Firstly, the prolonged physical exertion took a toll on my stamina. Walking uphill for nearly seven hours, with a backpack loaded with provisions, was taxing. Secondly, the weather, albeit sunny, was surprisingly hot, which escalated the fatigue. Lastly, though the landscape was stunning, remaining alert and navigating through the complicated terrain demanded mental concentration, adding another layer of exhaustion. In summary, the hike was both exhilarating and taxing, a paradoxical experience that combined the joy of nature with the fatigue born out of challenging physical and mental engagement.
Grammar Analysis
The use of rhetorical questions in contrast: such as "the weather, albeit sunny, was surprisingly hot," here "albeit" is used to introduce a rhetorical question, adding complexity to the sentence. Past participle as an adjective: in "a demanding hiking expedition," "demanding" as a past participle used as an adjective, adding richness to the description. Combination of nouns and adjectives: for example, in "an awe-inspiring panoramic view," "awe-inspiring" and "panoramic" are well-paired adjectives, making the noun "view" more vivid. Combining subordinate clauses and coordinating sentences: in "multiple factors contributed. Firstly, the prolonged physical exertion took a toll on my stamina. Secondly, the weather escalated the fatigue."
Vocabulary
  • Demanding
  • Expedition
  • Tranquil
  • Panoramic
  • Drained
  • Prolonged
  • Exertion
  • Toll
  • Provisions
  • Paradoxical