Band 7 Example

Question: Why do most children draw more often than adults do?

Idea 1

Imagination and Creativity
Model Answer
I think children draw more because they have a lot of imagination. They like to show their ideas and feelings by drawing pictures. Kids don’t worry if their drawings are good or bad, so they just draw for fun. But adults often feel shy or think their drawings are not good enough, so they stop drawing as much.
Children tend to draw more frequently because their imaginations are incredibly vivid, and drawing is a natural way for them to express their thoughts and emotions. They’re not self-conscious about their artistic abilities, so they draw freely without worrying about being judged. In contrast, adults often feel embarrassed or believe their drawings aren’t good enough, which discourages them from drawing as often.
Grammar Analysis
- Present simple tense is used to state general truths (e.g., "Children tend to draw more frequently"). - Contrast is shown with linking words ("In contrast") to compare children and adults. - Infinitive of purpose ("to express their thoughts and emotions") explains reasons. - Use of adjectives and adverbs to add detail ("incredibly vivid," "freely," "often").
Vocabulary
  • draw
  • sketch
  • doodle
  • create pictures
  • make art
  • more frequently
  • on a regular basis
  • with greater frequency
  • regularly
  • imagination
  • express their thoughts and emotions
  • self-conscious
  • artistic abilities
  • embarrassed
  • judged
  • discourages

Idea 2

Learning and Development
Model Answer
Drawing is important for children because it helps them learn and develop skills like using their hands and eyes together. Schools and parents usually encourage kids to draw as part of their education. Adults, on the other hand, are busy with work and don’t have much time for drawing, so they don’t do it as much.
Drawing plays a significant role in children’s learning and development, as it helps them improve their fine motor skills and hand-eye coordination. It’s also a common activity in schools and at home, where it’s encouraged as part of early education. Adults, however, tend to focus on more practical tasks and have less time or motivation to engage in creative hobbies like drawing.
Grammar Analysis
1. Present simple tense: Used to state general facts, e.g., "Drawing plays a significant role," "Adults tend to focus on more practical tasks." 2. Infinitive of purpose: "to engage in creative hobbies" shows the purpose or reason for an action. 3. Comparative structure: "less time or motivation" compares adults' situation to that of children. 4. Passive voice: "where it’s encouraged as part of early education" uses the passive to focus on the action rather than the doer.
Vocabulary
  • significant role
  • learning and development
  • fine motor skills
  • hand-eye coordination
  • common activity
  • encouraged
  • early education
  • practical tasks
  • less time or motivation
  • creative hobbies

Idea 3

Time and Priorities
Model Answer
Children usually have more free time and not many responsibilities, so they can draw whenever they want. Drawing is a fun way for them to relax. Adults are often too busy with work or family, so they don’t have much time for drawing and prefer to do other things instead.
Time and priorities also play a big role. Children generally have more free time and fewer responsibilities, making drawing an enjoyable and relaxing activity for them. As people grow older, their schedules become busier with work, family, and other commitments, so they tend to prioritize other activities over drawing, which leads to a decline in how often they draw.
Grammar Analysis
1. Comparative structures: "more free time," "fewer responsibilities," and "busier with work" use comparative adjectives to highlight differences between children and adults. 2. Present participle as adverbial: "making drawing an enjoyable and relaxing activity" uses a present participle phrase to explain the result of the previous clause. 3. Cause and effect: "so they tend to prioritize other activities over drawing, which leads to a decline..." uses a cause-and-effect structure to logically connect ideas. 4. Relative clause: "which leads to a decline in how often they draw" uses a relative clause to add detail and explanation. ####
Vocabulary
  • time and priorities
  • more free time
  • fewer responsibilities
  • enjoyable and relaxing activity
  • grow older
  • busier with work, family, and other commitments
  • prioritize other activities
  • decline in how often they draw