Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe a child you know who likes drawing very much
Example
Step 1: Identify the Part 2 question requirements. The question asks you to describe a child you know who enjoys drawing a lot. You need to mention: - How you knew him/her - What he/she is like (personality/characteristics) - How often he/she draws - Explain why you think he/she likes drawing Step 2: Think about strategies for a better answer. - Expand your answer with more details or extra stories: Add anecdotes about the child’s drawing habits or achievements. - Coherence is important: Make sure each point flows logically to the next. - Paraphrasing: Use different expressions to avoid repetition. - Referring: Refer back to previous points for cohesion. - Signposting: Use linking words to guide the listener. - Vocabulary needs to be appropriate as well as varied: Use descriptive adjectives and verbs. - Using synonyms or substitution: Avoid repeating words like “drawing” or “child” too often. - Demonstrating a range of grammar is key factor: Use complex sentences, conditionals, and different tenses. - Whole Model Answer MUST be more than 300 words. Step 3: Output in the required format. Topic:A creative child who loves drawing How you knew him/her The child I’d like to talk about is my younger cousin, Lily. I first got to know her really well about three years ago when my aunt’s family moved to the same city as us. Since then, we’ve spent a lot of time together, especially during family gatherings and holidays. I remember the first time I visited their new home, Lily immediately showed me her sketchbook, which was already filled with colorful pictures. That was when I realized how passionate she was about drawing. What he/she is like Lily is a very imaginative and cheerful girl. She’s only eight years old, but she’s incredibly mature for her age. She’s always curious about the world around her and loves to ask questions about everything she sees. What stands out most about her personality is her creativity. She’s not afraid to experiment with different colors and styles, and she often comes up with unique ideas for her drawings. Besides being artistic, she’s also quite friendly and enjoys sharing her artwork with others, which makes her very popular among her classmates. How often he/she draws As for how often she draws, I would say she does it almost every day. In fact, whenever I visit her house, I always find her sitting at the dining table with her colored pencils and sketchbook. Her parents told me that she even brings her drawing materials to school and uses her free time during breaks to sketch. On weekends, she sometimes spends hours working on larger projects, like posters or paintings for school competitions. Drawing seems to be her favorite way to relax and express herself. And explain why you think he/she likes drawing I think Lily enjoys drawing so much because it allows her to express her thoughts and emotions in a creative way. She once told me that when she’s drawing, she feels like she’s in her own world where anything is possible. It’s also a way for her to communicate, especially when she finds it hard to put her feelings into words. Moreover, her family is very supportive and always encourages her to pursue her passion, which motivates her even more. Overall, I believe drawing gives her a sense of accomplishment and happiness, and that’s why she’s so devoted to it.
Grammar Analysis
- **Complex Sentences:** The answer demonstrates a strong command of complex sentence structures, such as, “I remember the first time I visited their new home, Lily immediately showed me her sketchbook, which was already filled with colorful pictures.” This sentence uses a relative clause (“which was already filled…”) and a time clause (“the first time I visited…”), showing grammatical range. - **Varied Tenses:** The speaker skillfully switches between past simple (“I first got to know her…”), present simple (“she’s incredibly mature…”), and present continuous (“she’s always curious…”), which is important for narrating events and describing ongoing habits or characteristics. - **Conditional and Causative Structures:** The answer includes causative and explanatory structures, such as, “I think Lily enjoys drawing so much because it allows her to express her thoughts and emotions in a creative way.” This demonstrates the ability to explain reasons and causes. - **Pronoun Reference and Cohesion:** Pronouns like “she,” “her,” and “it” are used effectively to maintain cohesion and avoid repetition. - **Direct and Reported Speech:** The use of reported speech (“She once told me that when she’s drawing, she feels like she’s in her own world…”) adds variety and authenticity to the narrative. - **Adverbial Phrases:** Phrases like “almost every day,” “on weekends,” and “especially during family gatherings” add detail and temporal variety.
Vocabulary
  • - **Descriptive Adjectives:** “imaginative,” “cheerful,” “mature,” “curious,” “artistic,” “friendly,” “unique,” “colorful,” “creative,” “supportive,” “devoted.”
  • - **Art-related Vocabulary:** “sketchbook,” “colored pencils,” “drawings,” “posters,” “paintings,” “artwork,” “school competitions,” “projects.”
  • - **Emotional and Expressive Language:** “passionate,” “express herself,” “her own world,” “accomplishment,” “happiness,” “motivates,” “sense of accomplishment.”
  • - **Collocations and Phrases:** “spend a lot of time together,” “experiment with different colors and styles,” “share her artwork,” “favorite way to relax,” “pursue her passion,” “gives her a sense of accomplishment.”
  • - **Linking Words and Cohesive Devices:** “Since then,” “especially,” “besides,” “as for,” “in fact,” “moreover,” “overall,” “because,” “when,” “like.”
  • These features together demonstrate a Band 7.0+ level by showing flexibility, accuracy, and range in both grammar and vocabulary.