Band 7 Example
Topic: Describe a time when you saw something in the sky
Example
A meteor shower What you saw I'm going to talk about a time when I witnessed a meteor shower. It was an incredible experience to see so many shooting stars streaking across the night sky. Where/when you saw it/them This happened about a year ago when I was on a camping trip with some friends in a remote area far from the city lights. We were in the countryside, which was the perfect spot for stargazing because there was no light pollution to obscure our view of the sky. How long you saw it/them We had been told that the meteor shower would be visible for a few hours, starting around midnight. We stayed up late, wrapped in blankets, and watched the sky for about two hours. During this time, we saw countless meteors, some of which were incredibly bright and left trails that lingered for a few seconds. How you felt about the experience The experience was truly magical and left me in awe of the universe. Seeing the meteor shower made me feel a deep sense of wonder and appreciation for the natural world. It was a humbling reminder of how vast and mysterious the universe is. Sharing this moment with my friends made it even more special, as we all felt a sense of connection and amazement. It was a night I'll never forget, and it sparked a newfound interest in astronomy for me.
Grammar Analysis
The answer uses a variety of sentence structures, including simple, compound, and complex sentences, which contribute to the overall fluency and coherence. For example, "It was an incredible experience to see so many shooting stars streaking across the night sky" combines a simple sentence with a participial phrase to add detail. The use of past tense is consistent and appropriate for recounting a past event, as seen in "This happened about a year ago" and "We stayed up late, wrapped in blankets." The answer also effectively uses descriptive language and modifiers to convey emotions and details, such as "truly magical," "deep sense of wonder," and "humbling reminder."
Vocabulary
  • meteor shower
  • shooting stars
  • streaking across
  • remote area
  • light pollution
  • stargazing
  • linger
  • magical
  • awe of the universe
  • sparked a newfound interest