Band 7 Example

Question: Why do some people in the workplace dislike technology?

Idea 1

Privacy and Security
Model Answer
It's true that we share a lot about ourselves on the internet, and I think this is why some people don't like using technology. For instance, some people won't use a work phone because they don't want their internet searches to be seen, or they worry about their employer watching them.
There is certainly something to be said about how much of ourselves we put on the internet and I think that’s why some people really dislike using technology. There are people that refuse to have a work phone, for example, because they don’t want their internet search history out there, or they feel like they are being watched by their employer.
Grammar Analysis
Using the present participle as an adverbial phrase "being watched by their employer" indicates a continuous state of being monitored by the employer, adding complexity to the sentence. The object clause "they don’t want their internet search history out there" elaborates on the concerns of certain individuals, enhancing the informational content and depth of the sentence.
Vocabulary
  • something to be said
  • refuse
  • internet search history

Idea 2

Work-Life Balance and Health
Model Answer
Many people now feel that technology causes longer work hours. It seems like we can't turn off and are always reachable. For example, when commuting home, we can still get work emails or messages and are expected to reply. I think this discourages many people because they want their free time to really be free.
I think a lot of people now are finding that technology is leading to longer hours. It’s like we can’t switch off and we are always contactable. So, on our commute home from work, for example, we can still receive work emails or messages and we are expected to answer. I think this puts a lot of people off as they want their free time to actually be free time.
Grammar Analysis
Present continuous tense: "are finding" is used in the present continuous tense to indicate a current and ongoing trend, highlighting the continuity of technological impact. Passive voice: "are expected to answer" is used in the passive voice, emphasizing that the expectation towards individuals is imposed from the outside, enhancing the meaning and emotional color of the sentence.
Vocabulary
  • switch off
  • contactable
  • commute home
  • expected to answer
  • free time
  • puts a lot of people off