购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating family members and fix tense/word forms (e.g. 'I enjoy shopping', 'we went shoe shopping'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately.

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially when I go with my daughter because she’s my shopping buddy. For example, tonight we went shoe shopping to buy a pair as a birthday gift for my son.

建議: Clarify and correct noun forms and add a linking phrase to explain contrast. Keep it to two sentences: a direct answer and a concise reason with example. Use plural forms and articles correctly ('compare prices', 'at the supermarket').

範例: Yes, I usually compare prices, especially at the supermarket, because I want to get good value. However, for hobby items I prioritize what I like most rather than the cheapest option.

建議: Correct grammar and phrasing, and make the response coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence ('No, it's not difficult'), then explain the downside with linking words and one specific habit to improve. Avoid unclear words ('M myself') and use correct verb forms ('to buy').

範例: No, it’s usually not difficult because I tend to decide quickly. However, that means I sometimes buy things in a rush, so I try to pause, compare prices and think before purchasing.

建議: Be more concise and precise. Begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because' and 'for example'). Correct grammar ('luxury items', 'overpriced', 'customers want').

範例: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better because price can reflect marketing rather than quality. For example, many luxury items are overpriced and people sometimes buy them mainly to show social status.

× I do love shopping especially I enjoyed a lot if I go with my daughter because she is my shopping buddy.

✓ I do love shopping, especially I enjoy it a lot when I go with my daughter because she is my shopping buddy.

Mixes present and past tenses incorrectly; 'do love' is present, so following clause should use present 'enjoy' and include object 'it'; replace 'if I go' with 'when I go' for habitual action. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habitual situations and include direct object for 'enjoy'.

× Actually my son, my daughter and I went a shoe shopping tonight because my son's birthday is coming up so a nice pair was his birthday gift.

✓ Actually my son, my daughter and I went shoe shopping tonight because my son's birthday is coming up, so a nice pair will be his birthday gift.

Uses past 'went' with time adverb 'tonight' and then past 'was' incorrectly; since the trip is recent and the gift is intended for the future, use present perfect or present simple modal future. Here 'went' can remain for the completed action, but 'was his birthday gift' should be 'will be his birthday gift' to indicate future intention. Also 'a shoe shopping' is incorrect; use 'went shoe shopping' or 'went shopping for shoes'.

× I always try to compare price, especially at supermarket, but when it comes to hobby items I choose what I like the most rather than the reasonable price items.

✓ I always try to compare prices, especially at supermarkets, but when it comes to hobby items I choose what I like the most rather than the reasonably priced items.

Use plural 'prices' and plural 'supermarkets' for general statements. 'Reasonable price items' is awkward; use 'reasonably priced items' (adverb + past participle) to describe price. Suggestion: use plural for general nouns and correct adjective/adverb order.

× No, I'm a hasty person so choosing something is not difficult.

✓ No, I'm a hasty person, so choosing something can be difficult.

Contradiction in meaning: being hasty makes choosing more difficult, not less; original phrasing likely intended to say choosing is easy or that buying impulsively is the problem. Adjusted to logical meaning. Also added comma before 'so'.

× Rather my weak point is buy something in a rush.

✓ Rather, my weak point is buying things in a rush.

After 'is' use a noun or gerund phrase; 'buy' should be 'buying'. Use plural 'things' for generality. Also added comma for clarity.

× So I always tell M myself to step backward, compare prices and think about.

✓ So I always tell myself to step back, compare prices and think things over.

Remove stray 'M'. Use reflexive pronoun 'myself' correctly. 'Step backward' is less natural than 'step back'. 'Think about' needs an object; 'think things over' is a natural phrasal verb meaning reconsider.

× No, I disagree with that actually.

✓ No, I actually disagree with that.

Placement of 'actually' is more natural before the verb. This is a stylistic correction to improve fluency.

× In many cases things are quite expensive because of marketing strategy and especially expensive luxurious items are overpriced, but because of the high-priced customers wants to buy to show their social status.

✓ In many cases things are quite expensive because of marketing strategies, and especially luxurious items are overpriced, but because of the high price customers want to buy them to show their social status.

Multiple errors: 'marketing strategy' should be plural 'marketing strategies' for generalization; 'expensive luxurious items' is redundant—use 'luxurious items'; 'overpriced' is fine; 'high-priced customers' is wrong—should be 'high price' or 'high prices' and 'customers wants' has subject-verb agreement error: use 'customers want'; include object 'them' after 'buy'. Rearranged for clarity and subject-verb agreement.