购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không đúng (ví dụ “no shopping” sai nghĩa, “buy to purchase” thừa). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc và tối đa 4 câu. Chú ý thứ tự từ, chia thì và danh từ đếm/không đếm (e.g., “a busy day at school”, “recharge my energy”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I often go to the mall after a busy day at school because it helps me relax and recharge. I usually go with my mother, and we buy clothes or small items together.

建議: Nội dung tốt và hợp lý, nhưng cần chỉnh ngôn ngữ cho tự nhiên hơn và sửa một vài lỗi nhỏ (“take online” sai; nên là “check online”). Có thể rút gọn một chút, dùng liên từ hợp lý và hạn chế lặp từ (ví dụ “buy” lặp). Giữ cấu trúc: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ ngắn.

範例: Yes, I often compare prices because I'm a student on a tight budget and I want to save money for my family. For example, I always check online stores and look for special offers or discounts before I make a purchase.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu tính trực tiếp và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, trật từ và cấu trúc. Tránh những cụm rườm rà như “from my perspective” + “I think” cùng lúc; dùng chủ ngữ rõ ràng (e.g., “many people, including me”). Nên nêu câu mở đầu ngắn gọn, giải thích lý do cụ thể và đưa ví dụ ngắn. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

範例: Yes, I often find it hard to choose. Many items look attractive, so I hesitate and compare styles and prices before deciding. For instance, I once spent an hour deciding between two similar jackets.

建議: Ý chính rõ ràng và có ví dụ, nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt cho tự nhiên hơn (ví dụ “I read that” có thể thay bằng “I believe” hoặc “I think”, “higher durability” -> “greater durability”). Câu cuối bị thiếu phần kết luận rõ ràng. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề, hai câu hỗ trợ (lý do + ví dụ) và một câu kết luận ngắn nếu cần.

範例: I think expensive products are often better because they tend to use higher-quality materials and last longer. For example, I bought an expensive pair of shoes that lasted three years longer than a cheaper pair I owned. However, price isn't always a guarantee, so I usually read reviews before buying.

× Yes, of course, I really like no shopping in the mall because going shopping after hard work day at school, having restored battery and reduce stress, I often go with my mom to buy to purchase things.

✓ Yes, of course, I really like shopping in the mall because going shopping after a hard day at school restores my energy and reduces stress. I often go with my mom to buy things.

The original sentence uses 'no shopping' incorrectly and has sentence structure problems. Use 'like shopping' not 'like no shopping'. 'Hard work day' should be 'a hard day' and the verbs must be in base/present form: 'restores' and 'reduces' to agree with the singular gerund 'going shopping'. Remove redundant 'to purchase' since 'buy' is fine. Suggestions: simplify clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct negation usage.

× To be honest, I regularly compare prices when I purchase things because I am a student and I am on a tight budget. I can't afford to buy everything I want and I also try to save money to help my mom. So I usually take online and look for special offers before I decide.

✓ To be honest, I regularly compare prices when I purchase things because I am a student and I am on a tight budget. I can't afford to buy everything I want, and I also try to save money to help my mom. So I usually go online and look for special offers before I decide.

The phrase 'take online' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'go online'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. The rest is fine. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'go online' or 'search online'.

× Without doubt, from my perspective, I think that's every people is also seem like me, because it's very difficult for me and people to make choice when we are see that all the things is very beautiful and great for me to buy to try.

✓ Without doubt, in my opinion, I think many people seem like me, because it is very difficult for me and other people to make choices when we see that all the things are very beautiful and tempting to buy.

Multiple errors: 'every people' is incorrect; use 'many people' or 'every person'. 'that's every people is also seem like me' mixes clauses incorrectly. Subject-verb agreement: 'all the things are' not 'is'. Use plural 'choices' not singular 'choice'. 'see' does not need progressive 'are see'. 'great for me to buy to try' is awkward; use 'tempting to buy'. Suggestions: simplify and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun plurality.

× Yes, I read that expensive products are often better because they are usually of a higher durability and better materials.

✓ Yes, I read that expensive products are often better because they usually have higher durability and are made of better materials.

'Of a higher durability' is not idiomatic; use 'have higher durability' or 'are more durable'. 'Better materials' needs passive construction 'are made of better materials' or 'use better materials'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'more durable' and 'made of'.

× For example, I once bought a costly pair of shoes that lasts 3 years longer than a cheaper pair.

✓ For example, I once bought a costly pair of shoes that lasted three years longer than a cheaper pair.

Tense mismatch: 'bought' is past, so the relative clause should use past tense 'lasted' not present 'lasts'. Also spell out small numbers in formal speech: 'three years'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when telling past events.

× So in many cases higher price reflects.

✓ So in many cases a higher price reflects greater quality.

The original sentence 'higher price reflects' is incomplete and lacks an object. Add what the price reflects, e.g. 'greater quality'. Also include the article 'a' before 'higher price'. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete with subject, verb, and object.