聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki pengulangan kata dan tata bahasa agar jawaban lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'I I' dan 'with my with other people'.

範例: I don't like parties because I am an introverted person. I prefer to socialize only at work or school. Also, parties often give me headaches, so I usually avoid them.

建議: Perjelas dan susun jawaban dengan struktur yang lebih baik. Gunakan linking words untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau berulang.

範例: I didn't have many parties as a child, but I did have small birthday parties. So, if birthday parties count, then I had a few during my childhood.

建議: Perbaiki penggunaan kata dan struktur kalimat agar lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'party' secara berlebihan.

範例: No, I have never organized a party because I don't enjoy them. However, I have attended small birthday parties organized by my friends, which are good opportunities for socializing.

× I hate parties because I I am introverted person.

✓ I hate parties because I am an introverted person.

The noun 'person' is singular and requires an article 'an' before it. Missing the article causes a singular and plural issue.

× I don't really like this socializing with my with other people beside in my job or my work or my study

✓ I don't really like socializing with other people besides at my job, work, or study.

The prepositions 'beside in' are incorrect here. The correct prepositions are 'besides' and 'at' to indicate location or context.

× and I think that parties can make me sick like I had I would have a headache.

✓ and I think that parties can make me sick, like I would have a headache.

The phrase 'I had I would have' is incorrect. The modal verb 'would' is used to express hypothetical situations, so 'I would have' is correct.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

The plural form 'parties' is more appropriate when asking about frequency in the past.

× I don't think that I have one, but if a party, a mini party, maybe I birthday party, can we include it as a party?

✓ I don't think that I had one, but if a party, a mini party, maybe a birthday party, can we include it as a party?

The verb tense should be past 'had' to match the past context. Also, 'I birthday party' is incorrect; it should be 'a birthday party'.

× But it is just when my childhood so I have one and yeah, I think just have part birthday party.

✓ But it was just during my childhood, so I had one, and yeah, I think I just had a birthday party.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'was' and 'had' should be used instead of present tense.

× No, of course not, since I don't like the party and I'm not really interested in the party.

✓ No, of course not, since I don't like parties and I'm not really interested in parties.

The plural form 'parties' is more natural here to express general dislike.

× So I never organized a party, but my friend does and I just attended to that party.

✓ So I have never organized a party, but my friend does, and I just attended that party.

The present perfect 'have never organized' is appropriate for life experience. Also, 'attended to' is incorrect; 'attended' is the correct verb.

× I just attended to that party.

✓ I just attended that party.

The verb 'attend' does not require the preposition 'to' when referring to events.