聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but to improve, try to use more natural phrasing and avoid minor grammar mistakes. For example, say 'listening to music' instead of 'listen music', and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to be concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they give me a chance to listen to music, dance, and catch up with family and friends. Moreover, they always boost my mood and make me feel happy.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrasing. To improve, use past tense consistently ('there were lots of parties'), and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to list events clearly. Also, try to be more specific about frequency and experiences.

範例: When I was a child, my parents organised many parties because I have a big family. For example, we had birthday parties, New Year's celebrations, and Christmas parties quite often. These events were great opportunities to spend quality time with friends and family.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has several grammar and clarity issues. To improve, avoid repeating 'but' at the start of sentences, and use correct sentence structures. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to connect sentences logically. Try to express your feelings more naturally and avoid awkward phrasing like 'I invite my relatives and friends it'.

範例: I haven't organised a party myself yet, but I definitely plan to in the future. My parents used to organise a birthday party for me every year, which was always a joyful occasion. I would invite my relatives and friends, and it felt very special to be the centre of attention on that day.

× I love to listen music and dance in the party and it is a great chance to meet relatives, family and friends having conversation with them.

✓ I love listening to music and dancing at parties, and it is a great chance to meet relatives, family and friends and have conversations with them.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing) when expressing enjoyment of activities. Also, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. 'In the party' is incorrect; 'at parties' is the correct prepositional phrase. Additionally, 'having conversation' should be 'have conversations' to correctly express the action.

× When I was a child there are lots of party organised by my parents because I have a big family.

✓ When I was a child, there were lots of parties organised by my parents because I had a big family.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'are' should be changed to 'were' to match past tense. Also, 'party' should be plural 'parties' to agree with 'lots of'. 'Have' should be 'had' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So there are so many events, birthday parties, New Year's party, Christmas party and lots of.

✓ So there are so many events: birthday parties, New Year's parties, Christmas parties, and lots more.

The list includes multiple events, so 'New Year's party' and 'Christmas party' should be plural to match 'birthday parties' and the context. The phrase 'and lots of' is incomplete and should be 'and lots more' or similar.

× Also it is a great time when we spend time with friends and family.

✓ Also, it was a great time when we spent time with friends and family.

The sentence refers to past events, so present tense verbs 'is' and 'spend' should be changed to past tense 'was' and 'spent' to maintain tense consistency.

× Not yet, but in future I definitely will be.

✓ Not yet, but in the future I definitely will.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' for correct article usage. Also, 'will be' is incomplete; 'will' alone suffices here to indicate future action.

× But my parents organized a party for my birthday every year.

✓ But my parents organised a party for my birthday every year.

In Australian English, the past tense of 'organize' is commonly spelled 'organised' with an 's'. This correction aligns with Australian spelling conventions.

× It's a great joy for me and I invite my relatives and friends it.

✓ It's a great joy for me, and I invite my relatives and friends to it.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' before 'it' to correctly link the verb 'invite' with the object. Adding a comma before 'and' improves readability.

× It is the best day for me because I am very special on that day.

✓ It is the best day for me because I feel very special on that day.

The adjective 'special' describes a feeling, so it should be linked with a verb like 'feel' to express the intended meaning. 'I am very special' implies a different meaning than intended.