聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'and et cetera.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy parties occasionally, especially on special occasions like my birthday or holidays in New York. I usually join these celebrations and have a great time with friends.

建議: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences and provide specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Honestly, I hardly ever had parties when I was a kid because my family rarely organized them. However, when they did, they invited my friends, and we always had a lot of fun together.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more natural expressions. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I have organized two parties in my life. The first was my golden birthday party, and the second was my best friend's engagement party. I believe I managed both events very well.

× Yes, sometimes I like parties, especially when there is a special day, for example in New York or my birthday and et cetera.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like parties, especially when there are special days, for example in New York or on my birthday, etc.

The phrase 'there is a special day' is incorrect because 'parties' implies multiple occasions, so 'there are special days' is appropriate. Also, 'in New York or my birthday' needs a preposition before 'my birthday' to be correct ('on my birthday'). 'Et cetera' is better abbreviated as 'etc.' and should be used carefully.

× I join, I enjoy and I happy.

✓ I join, I enjoy, and I am happy.

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' before 'happy', which is necessary to form a correct predicate. Without 'am', 'I happy' is grammatically incorrect. Also, commas are needed to separate the clauses properly.

× Honest hardly ever because my family always make me party and invite invited my friends and we always happy together.

✓ Honestly, hardly ever because my family never made me have parties or invite my friends, but we were always happy together.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'Honest' should be 'Honestly' (adverb form), 'make me party' is incorrect; it should be 'made me have parties' or 'made me party' with correct tense, 'invite invited' is redundant and incorrect, and 'we always happy' lacks the verb 'were'. Also, 'hardly ever' needs to be connected properly in the sentence.

× And yes, I can say that so when I was.

✓ And yes, I can say that about when I was a kid.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'So when I was' is a fragment and needs to be completed to make sense. Adding 'about when I was a kid' completes the thought.

× Yes, in my life, I organized only two parties.

✓ Yes, in my life, I have organized only two parties.

Since the question is about experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have organized' is more appropriate than simple past 'organized'.

× 1st is my gold birthday party and second was my best friend's engage party.

✓ The first was my golden birthday party and the second was my best friend's engagement party.

'Gold birthday party' should be 'golden birthday party' (correct adjective form). 'Engage party' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'engagement party'. Also, '1st' should be written as 'The first' for formality and clarity.

× And I think I'm well, very, very well organized.

✓ And I think I am very, very well organized.

The phrase 'I'm well' is awkward here; 'I am very, very well organized' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, commas are unnecessary between 'well' and 'very'.