历史— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence saying when you started studying history, then add one or two brief supporting details (where and why). Use correct tense and simpler structures to avoid confusion.

範例: Yes, I have studied history since elementary school. It was taught as part of my social science classes, and I continued to learn historical topics through secondary school because they helped me understand society better.

建議: Answer directly how you learn (e.g., in classes, through reading, projects). Use one clear topic sentence then add a supporting detail with a linking word (because/so). Keep sentences short and fix grammar (articles, verb forms).

範例: I mainly learn history through my university social science courses and classroom lectures. Because my major focuses on humanities, we also study historical texts and conduct group projects to explore historical contexts.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating one or two benefits, then give a specific example or reason. Reduce fillers (uh) and complete your ideas (e.g., how relationships are formed). Use linking words like for example or because to connect points.

範例: Learning history helps us understand how societies and relationships develop over time. For example, in anthropology, studying past events and social processes explains why certain cultural practices exist today and how social relationships were formed.

建議: Give a concise opinion with one or two clear supporting reasons and a short example. Avoid vague phrasing like 'unleashed' and repetition. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'fundamental to', 'human relationships').

範例: Yes, I believe history is fundamental, especially for social sciences, because it reveals how human relationships and institutions evolved. For instance, studying past migration patterns helps explain current community structures and changing social norms.

× Yes I do, I began learn history since in my elementary school but it was an dominated by the historical major.

✓ Yes, I did. I began learning history in elementary school, and it was dominated by historical subjects.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. Use past tense 'did' to answer a past question. 'Began learn' should be 'began learning' (verb + -ing after 'begin'). 'Since in my elementary school' is incorrect; use 'in elementary school' for a past time period. 'It was an dominated by the historical major' is ungrammatical; correct to 'it was dominated by historical subjects.' Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use 'began learning', and use noun phrase 'historical subjects.'

× But actually it's just part of the social science I ever learned when I'm in elementary school and after and the continue study.

✓ But actually it's just part of the social sciences that I learned in elementary school and continued to study afterwards.

Problems: tense inconsistency and wrong verb forms. 'I ever learned when I'm in elementary school' mixes present and past; use past 'I learned in elementary school.' 'And after and the continue study' is ungrammatical; use 'and continued to study afterwards.' Also use plural 'social sciences.' Suggestions: keep past tense for past actions and use 'continued to' + base verb.

× Because I pre predominantly learn about the social science and humanity, I think that history is one of the part of major that I have to learn and it like embrace in a social science learning until now.

✓ Because I predominantly study social sciences and humanities, I think that history is one part of my major that I have to learn, and it has been incorporated into my social science education until now.

Multiple issues: 'pre predominantly' is redundant; use 'predominantly.' 'Learn about the social science and humanity' should be 'study social sciences and humanities.' 'One of the part of major' should be 'one part of my major' or 'one of the parts of my major.' 'It like embrace in' is wrong; use 'it has been incorporated into.' 'Until now' fits with present perfect 'has been.' Suggestions: use correct collocations ('study social sciences'), correct noun forms and present perfect for actions continuing to present.

× For example, uh, the context of the learn of historical process is one of the fundamental part of the social science, especially in my major anthropology, because we know about the historical process of the, how the person or, or how the relations can be, uh, formed by the.

✓ For example, the study of historical processes is one of the fundamental parts of social science, especially in my major, anthropology, because it helps us understand how people and relationships are formed by history.

Sentence has awkward noun phrases and incomplete clauses. 'The context of the learn of historical process' is ungrammatical; use 'the study of historical processes.' Use plural 'parts' of social science. 'We know about the historical process of the, how the person or, or how the relations can be, formed by the.' is incomplete; rewrite to 'it helps us understand how people and relationships are formed by history.' Suggestions: simplify structure, use correct noun phrases and complete clauses.

× Not only important, but I think that learning history is too fundamental, especially for my social science because I learn about the human relations.

✓ Not only is it important, but I think that learning history is fundamental, especially for my social science studies because I study human relationships.

Word order and verb choice issues. 'Not only important, but' requires inversion: 'Not only is it important.' 'Too fundamental' is awkward; use 'fundamental.' 'I learn about the human relations' should be 'I study human relationships' for correct collocation and present tense usage. Suggestions: use proper inversion after 'not only' and choose correct verbs ('study') and noun forms ('relationships').

× So I think that human relation can be unleashed from the historical process.

✓ So I think that human relationships can be understood through historical processes.

Word choice and noun number: 'human relation' should be plural 'human relationships.' 'Can be unleashed from the historical process' uses wrong verb 'unleashed'; 'understood through' conveys intended meaning. Suggestions: use accurate verbs and correct plural nouns.

× People, people can change over and over. Like, uh, you can see about the evolving or developing It's about.

✓ People can change repeatedly; for example, you can observe their evolution or development over time.

Redundant repetition 'People, people' should be single 'People.' 'Can change over and over' is acceptable but can be improved to 'can change repeatedly.' 'You can see about the evolving or developing It's about' is fragmented; rewrite as 'you can observe their evolution or development over time.' Suggestions: remove redundancy, use clear verbs like 'observe' and complete the sentence.