礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (use correct verb forms and articles), reduce hesitations and repetition, and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, so). Use accurate vocabulary (useful, thoughtful) and correct noun forms (gifts, friends).

範例: Yes, I'm good at giving gifts. I usually choose practical and thoughtful presents because I know the recipient's preferences; for example, I once bought lipstick for my sister since she enjoys dressing up and wearing makeup.

建議: Correct vocabulary mistakes and article usage (gifts, people's birthdays). Eliminate fillers and unclear words (‘youthful’ is incorrect here). Provide one clear reason with a concise example. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance).

範例: I usually give gifts on people's birthdays and other special occasions such as graduations. For example, I often bring homemade dishes or chocolates because they are practical and show that I thought about the person's likes.

建議: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (tense, pronouns, articles). Be specific and concise: state one main consideration and give a clear example using correct words. Use linking words like 'for example' and past tense for past events.

範例: I consider how useful the gift will be in their daily life. For example, a friend had been looking for a particular watch for months, so I bought that watch for his birthday because I knew he would use it every day.

建議: Use correct tense and singular/plural forms, and clearer structure: topic sentence + one specific detail. Remove unnecessary words and correct vocabulary (paper stars, small box). Use linking words like 'because' to explain why it was meaningful.

範例: Yes. In high school I made a string of small paper stars and gave them to a friend in a small box for his birthday, because it was handmade and personal, and he really appreciated the effort.

建議: Clarify opinion with correct grammar and vocabulary (expensive gifts, express feelings). Avoid unclear adjectives ('tofu'). Provide one concise reason and a clear example in the past tense. Use linking words (because, for example).

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. A thoughtful, practical gift can be more meaningful because it meets the recipient's needs; for example, I bought a high-quality blender for a busy friend who studies a lot, and she used it every day.

× Yes, I quite good at giving gift especially to my colleagues and friend on their birthday.

✓ Yes, I am quite good at giving gifts, especially to my colleagues and friends on their birthdays.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present simple with adjective; 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' when speaking generally; 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'colleagues'; 'their birthday' becomes 'their birthdays' to match plural recipients. Suggestion: include the verb 'to be' and ensure nouns agree in number when speaking generally.

× I will usually pick something that they I know it gonna be useful and tollful.

✓ I will usually pick something that I know will be useful and thoughtful.

The sentence has mixed word order and informal 'gonna'. Use correct clause order: 'something that I know will be...'. 'Thoughtful' is the correct adjective, not 'tollful'. Use 'will' instead of 'gonna' in formal speech. Remove the extra pronoun 'they' and 'it'.

× Something like if I'm buying a gift for my sister, I will pick a lipstick because I know she would love dressing up and wearing makeup so.

✓ For example, if I'm buying a gift for my sister, I will pick a lipstick because I know she loves dressing up and wearing makeup.

Use present simple 'loves' instead of conditional 'would love' to state a habitual preference. Remove dangling 'so' at the end. 'For example' clarifies the phrase. Ensure tense consistency within the sentence.

× I usually give kit on people birthdays or other special occasion like graduations or just a family gathering.

✓ I usually give gifts on people's birthdays or other special occasions like graduations or family gatherings.

'kit' is incorrect; use 'gifts'. Use possessive 'people's birthdays'. Pluralize 'occasion' to 'occasions' to match examples. Use plural 'gatherings' for general statements.

× I prefer practical presents such as chocolates or a home cooked favorite dish because uh they are youthful and show that I'm thought about the person I like.

✓ I prefer practical presents such as chocolates or a home-cooked favorite dish because they are useful and show that I thought about the person.

'Home cooked' should be hyphenated as 'home-cooked' when used as a compound adjective. 'Youthful' is incorrect in this context; 'useful' or 'thoughtful' fits meaning. Change 'I'm thought' to past 'I thought' to indicate consideration before giving. Remove 'I like' which is unnecessary and awkward.

× When buying it for someone, I always pick something a bit more practical and something that they, I know they would, uh, definitely gonna need it in their daily life.

✓ When buying something for someone, I always pick a bit more practical items that I know they will definitely need in their daily life.

'When buying it' is incorrect; use 'something'. Avoid filler words and restructure: 'items that I know they will definitely need'. Replace informal 'gonna' with 'will' and remove redundant 'it'. Ensure subject-verb number agreement with 'items' and plural 'they'.

× For instance, umm, I know my friend who had been looking for his favorite watch for so long.

✓ For instance, I know a friend who had been looking for his favorite watch for a long time.

'So long' is informal; 'a long time' is clearer. 'I know my friend who had been looking' should be 'I know a friend who had been looking' for natural phrasing. Past perfect continuous 'had been looking' is acceptable if referring to a period before another past event; ensure context supports this tense.

× So on the bird on his birthday, I will buy a desk, uh, what he like.

✓ So on his birthday, I bought the watch he liked.

Original has several errors: 'bird' is a typo for 'birth' and redundant 'on'. 'Buy a desk' is inappropriate; likely meant 'buy the watch'. Change future 'will buy' to past 'bought' if referring to a past occasion, and use correct relative clause 'the watch he liked'. Ensure verbs and nouns match intended meaning.

× Yes, when I want in high school I make a small paper stars and I give it to my friend in a small judge on his birthday and I remember he really enjoyed it because it's what handmade and it are so meaningful because I make it myself.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school I made small paper stars and I gave them to my friend in a small box on his birthday, and I remember he really enjoyed them because they were handmade and very meaningful since I made them myself.

Use past tense 'was', 'made', 'gave' for past events. 'Stars' plural requires 'them' not 'it'. 'Judge' is wrong; use 'box'. 'It's what handmade' incorrect; use 'they were handmade'. 'It are' wrong agreement; use 'they were'. Clarify 'very meaningful' and 'since I made them myself'.

× No, I don't think expensive gift and press feeling better.

✓ No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better.

Pluralize 'gift' to 'gifts'. 'Press feeling' is incorrect; use 'express feelings'. Maintain comparative 'better' after 'express'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'gifts express'.

× A cheaper but practical present can be more meaningful because it showed that you considered what the recipient actually need.

✓ A cheaper but practical present can be more meaningful because it shows that you considered what the recipient actually needs.

Use present simple 'shows' for general truth. 'Showed' is past and inconsistent. 'Need' requires third person singular 'needs'. Keep tense and subject-verb agreement consistent.

× For instance, I bought a high quality blender for a friend who study a lot and she used it every day, which make the gift more feel more tofu.

✓ For instance, I bought a high-quality blender for a friend who studies a lot and she uses it every day, which makes the gift feel more thoughtful.

Use hyphen 'high-quality' as compound adjective. 'Study' should be 'studies' for third person singular. 'Used' should be 'uses' if the habit continues. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'which'. 'More feel more tofu' is gibberish; 'feel more thoughtful' conveys intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct vocabulary.