礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "That's an interesting question." Also correct small grammar issues (use "good at giving gifts" and "I have gifted many peers").

範例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts because I pay attention to what people like. For example, I once noticed a classmate liked art, so I bought a sketchbook and she was thrilled.

建議: Answer directly and finish the supporting example fully. Use linking words (e.g., "for example") and avoid repetition. Be specific about occasions and complete the anecdote with what you gave and why.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or graduations. For example, when I was back in my hometown for a friend's birthday, I gave him a wristwatch because he had mentioned needing one.

建議: Good: direct topic sentence and relevant specific examples. Improve by adding a linking word to connect ideas and using more natural phrasing ("the recipient's needs" and "for example"). Keep it concise and avoid listing too many examples in one sentence.

範例: I consider the recipient's needs and preferences when choosing a gift. For example, I bought a phone case for a friend who had lost his, and I gave my girlfriend a nice pen because she needed one for work.

建議: Good content and personal detail. Improve fluency by removing filler words ("uh") and using smoother phrasing. Add a linking word to explain the process briefly and limit to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, I once made a crochet scarf for a friend after learning from YouTube. It took a lot of time, but she loved it, which made the effort worthwhile.

建議: Provide a clear opinion with a concise reason and an example to support it. Improve grammar ("does not totally buy happiness") and avoid absolute phrases like "totally wrong"; say "I don't think so" or "Not necessarily."

範例: Not necessarily; I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. The thought behind a gift matters more—for instance, a handwritten letter or a thoughtful handmade item can mean more than an expensive present.

× I think I'm good in gifting someone because I have gifted many of my peers and they have really been pleased by the surprise.

✓ I think I'm good at giving gifts because I have given many of my peers gifts and they were really pleased by the surprise.

Use 'good at' (preposition) instead of 'good in'. Use the gerund 'giving' rather than 'gifting' for natural phrasing. 'Have gifted' can be 'have given' but past simple or present perfect may both work; here 'have given' is more natural. Also simplify 'peers' and 'surprised' structure; 'were really pleased by the surprise' matches tense and is clearer.

× Usually I gift someone on their special occasion like birthday or some kind of happy moment which they are celebrating for.

✓ Usually I give someone a gift on their special occasions, like their birthday or other happy moments they are celebrating.

Use 'give someone a gift' instead of 'gift someone'. Use 'on' with 'occasion' is acceptable but plural 'occasions' fits 'usually'. Remove redundant 'for' after 'celebrating'. Position 'their' before 'birthday' for clarity.

× For for instance, once I was in hometown when my friend's birthday was there and I gifted him with.

✓ For instance, once I was in my hometown when it was my friend's birthday, and I gave him a gift.

Remove duplicated 'for'. Add 'my' before 'hometown'. Use 'it was my friend's birthday' to make clause natural. Use 'gave him a gift' rather than 'gifted him with' and complete the object. This fixes sentence fragments and structure.

× I consider the need of the person who I'm gifting.

✓ I consider the needs of the person I'm giving a gift to.

Use plural 'needs' for general consideration. Avoid ending with awkward 'who I'm gifting'; use 'giving a gift to' or 'to whom I'm giving a gift'. This corrects preposition placement and makes the sentence natural.

× For instance, I once gifted my friend a cover for his phone as he had recently lost his cover and also I gifted my girlfriend with a pen as she did not have one.

✓ For instance, I once gave my friend a phone cover because he had recently lost his, and I gave my girlfriend a pen because she did not have one.

Use 'gave' and natural noun order 'phone cover'. Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity. Avoid 'gifted ... with'; use 'gave ... a'. Combine clauses with commas for flow. Use pronoun 'his' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I have gifted my friend with a crochet which I have done by, uh, watching YouTube.

✓ Yes, I made a crochet item for my friend by watching YouTube tutorials.

Use 'made' for handmade items rather than 'gifted ... with'. Use gerund 'watching' correctly as part of 'by watching'. 'Crochet' as a noun is awkward; 'a crochet item' or 'a crocheted piece' is better. This fixes verb and noun usage and natural phrasing.

× It was really hectic but the results were worth it and she was really happy.

✓ It was really hectic, but the results were worth it, and she was very happy.

Sentence is mostly correct but replace repeated 'really' with 'very' for style. Keep past tense consistent: 'was' and 'were' are appropriate. Add commas for readability.

× No, this is totally wrong in my opinion. Reason being that money does not totally buys happiness. The gifting gesture alone is a loving gesture.

✓ No, I disagree. The reason is that money does not buy happiness. The act of giving is what makes the gesture loving.

Use 'does not buy' (base verb after 'does not')—remove 's'. 'Reason being that' is informal; use 'The reason is that'. 'Gifting gesture' is awkward; 'the act of giving' is clearer. These changes fix verb form and improve adjective/adverb use and style.