Part 1
考官
Do you love stories in your childhood?
考生
Yes, I pretty pretty enjoyed listening to my grandma telling about various stories when I was a child. You know, in the small village there's no secret and every stories will umm told, told umm to everyone.
考官
Do you prefer listening to stories or reading them?
考生
I prefer reading them because I enjoy spending time with myself, umm, reading the words and imaging the umm, picture from the book. And although they are uh, nowadays we have the access to the umm, listening apps for a novel for example.
考官
Did you ever write a story when you were a child?
考生
Yes, of course, I suppose every child have tried to write a story by themselves because you know, a writing is a way to express our mental words and for the child is experiencing their creativity.
考官
What kind of stories do you like?
考生
Actually, I enjoy a variety of stories, especially the fairy tale because it creates a peaceful and fascinating world for me to admire and won't have the motivation to explore.
Do you love stories in your childhood?
分數: 65.0建議: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误,且表达不够流畅自然。建议减少重复,注意语法一致性,并使用更自然的表达方式。
範例: Yes, I really enjoyed listening to my grandma tell various stories when I was a child. In our small village, there were no secrets, so stories were shared with everyone.
Do you prefer listening to stories or reading them?
分數: 60.0建議: 回答中有较多犹豫词汇(umm, uh),表达不够连贯。建议减少填充词,使用连接词使句子更流畅,并注意词汇拼写(imaging应为imagining)。
範例: I prefer reading stories because I enjoy spending time alone, imagining the pictures from the book. Although nowadays we can also listen to novels through apps, I find reading more engaging.
Did you ever write a story when you were a child?
分數: 55.0建議: 语法错误较多,如主谓不一致,表达不够清晰。建议注意主谓一致,简化句子结构,并用更准确的词汇表达观点。
範例: Yes, I did. I think every child tries to write stories because writing is a way to express thoughts and creativity.
What kind of stories do you like?
分數: 50.0建議: 句子结构混乱,表达不清晰,逻辑不连贯。建议简化句子,明确表达喜好和原因,避免语义模糊。
範例: I enjoy various kinds of stories, especially fairy tales, because they create a peaceful and fascinating world that inspires me to imagine and explore.
× in the small village there's no secret and every stories will umm told, told umm to everyone
✓ in the small village there's no secret and every story will umm be told, told umm to everyone
这里的every后面应该接单数名词story,而不是复数stories。因为every强调的是每一个单独的个体,所以名词用单数。
× every child have tried to write a story by themselves
✓ every child has tried to write a story by themselves
every后面接单数名词child,谓语动词也应使用单数形式has,而不是复数have。
× every child have tried to write a story by themselves
✓ every child has tried to write a story by himself or herself
every child是单数,反身代词应使用himself或herself,不能用复数themselves。
× I pretty pretty enjoyed listening to my grandma telling about various stories when I was a child
✓ I really enjoyed listening to my grandma telling various stories when I was a child
pretty在这里用作副词修饰enjoyed不合适,应该用really表示程度。
× listening to my grandma telling about various stories
✓ listening to my grandma telling various stories
tell后面直接接故事,不需要介词about。
× I enjoy spending time with myself
✓ I enjoy spending time by myself
表达独自一人时,应该用by myself,而不是with myself。
× reading the words and imaging the umm, picture from the book
✓ reading the words and imagining the picture from the book
imaging应为动名词形式imagining,表示正在进行的动作。
× although they are uh, nowadays we have the access to the umm, listening apps for a novel for example
✓ although nowadays we have access to listening apps for novels, for example
access是不可数名词,不需要加the;novel应为复数形式novels,表示多种小说。
× a writing is a way to express our mental words
✓ writing is a way to express our mental words
writing作为不可数名词时,不需要冠词a。
× for the child is experiencing their creativity
✓ for children to experience their creativity
child应使用复数children,且句子结构调整为不定式短语更通顺。
× and won't have the motivation to explore
✓ and will have the motivation to explore
句意应为“会有探索的动力”,否定形式won't不符合语境,应改为肯定will。