故事— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 구체적인 예시를 들어 답변을 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child. Reading many books helped me build my creativity and broaden my perspective, which I really enjoyed.

建議: 답변이 중간에 끊기고 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 답변을 자연스럽게 이어가는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I prefer reading books rather than listening to stories because when I read, I can imagine the scenes vividly. For example, I often draw pictures based on the stories I read.

建議: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 과거 경험을 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장을 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I loved writing stories when I was a child. In primary school, I often wrote my own stories, mostly adventure and romantic tales.

建議: 답변이 중복되고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 감정을 표현할 때 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I really enjoy romantic stories because I like following the characters' emotions and adventures. These stories inspire me and help me understand different perspectives.

× Yes, I am a big fan of tree When I was young reading many books I California I could build build my creativity and broaden my perspective.

✓ Yes, I was a big fan of reading many books when I was young in California. It helped me build my creativity and broaden my perspective.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure, making it difficult to understand. The correction combines ideas into coherent sentences with proper subject-verb agreement and logical flow.

× So I enjoy reading many books and bottled.

✓ So I enjoy reading many books and novels.

The word 'bottled' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'novels'. Also, 'and' connects two nouns, so the correction replaces 'bottled' with the appropriate noun.

× I prefer reading books over listening them because, uh, when I read a book, I can imagine in person.

✓ I prefer reading books over listening to them because, when I read a book, I can imagine the scenes personally.

The verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. Also, 'imagine in person' is awkward; 'imagine the scenes personally' is clearer.

× So I draw, uh, I drew my own scene and.

✓ So I draw my own scenes.

The sentence is incomplete and mixes present and past tense unnecessarily. Using present tense 'draw' fits the context of a general preference.

× Yes, uh, yes, I love it. Umm, when I was a primary student, uh, I have had to write uh, stories in my own way.

✓ Yes, I loved it. When I was a primary student, I had to write stories in my own way.

The past tense 'loved' and 'had to write' are appropriate for past events. 'Have had to' is present perfect and does not fit the past time reference.

× So this project I usually load Lobstery and romantic story.

✓ For this project, I usually wrote mystery and romantic stories.

'Load Lobstery' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'wrote mystery'. Also, 'story' should be plural 'stories' to match 'usually'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I am a big fan of romantic history because I enjoy following characters emotions line and adventure of characters.

✓ I am a big fan of romantic stories because I enjoy following characters' emotional lines and their adventures.

'Romantic history' is incorrect; 'romantic stories' fits better. Possessive form 'characters'' is needed. 'Emotions line' is awkward; 'emotional lines' is clearer.

× So it inspired me, inspired me touch my mind and I can understand their mind.

✓ So it inspired me, touched my mind, and helped me understand theirs.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward. The correction uses parallel structure and correct verb forms to improve clarity and flow.