故事— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by combining sentences and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your favorite stories.

範例: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child. I used to ask my mom to read me a story before I went to sleep every night. My favorite stories were Disney princess tales, especially those featuring mermaids, because I found them magical and inspiring.

建議: Improve fluency by avoiding hesitations and unclear phrases. Also, clarify your points with smoother linking words and more precise vocabulary to make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: I enjoy both listening to and reading stories. When I'm busy with household chores, I prefer listening because it allows me to multitask. However, during my leisure time, I like reading stories since seeing the characters on the page helps me imagine the story more vividly.

建議: Make your answer more concise and structured by directly answering the question first, then explaining with clear reasons. Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow.

範例: Yes, I did try writing stories as a child because I dreamed of becoming a novelist. However, I was quite young and lacked real-life experience, so my stories weren't very good.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to complete your thoughts, use linking words, and avoid hesitations. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

範例: As an adult, I enjoy narrative stories that explore complex social issues or depict real-life experiences of different groups. I appreciate stories that inspire me to think deeply and develop more sophisticated perspectives.

× My favorite story is including the mermaids.

✓ My favorite story includes the mermaids.

The verb 'including' is incorrectly used here. The correct form is 'includes' to indicate that the story contains mermaids. 'Including' is a present participle and does not fit as the main verb in this sentence.

× Those Princess stories from Disney.

✓ Those are princess stories from Disney.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'are' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× before I go to sleep.

✓ before I went to sleep.

The sentence refers to a past habit ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'went' to maintain tense consistency.

× When I am busy with some Iran's registered housework, I would prefer listening to stories.

✓ When I am busy with some registered housework in Iran, I would prefer listening to stories.

The phrase 'Iran's registered housework' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'in' is needed to indicate location, and 'registered housework' should be modified properly.

× However, if I am, uh, free from other work, I can just enjoy it. Leisure time.

✓ However, if I am free from other work, I can just enjoy it during leisure time.

'Leisure time' is a fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence to clarify when the enjoyment happens.

× having those characters visualized in front of you help you imagine those stories better.

✓ having those characters visualized in front of you helps you imagine those stories better.

The subject 'having those characters visualized in front of you' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number.

× Yes, my childhood dream is to become a novelist, so I tried a few times to write my own novel, but you know, I was too young and I don't have enough experience, uh, from real life, so I couldn't really write a good story.

✓ Yes, my childhood dream was to become a novelist, so I tried a few times to write my own novel, but you know, I was too young and I didn't have enough experience from real life, so I couldn't really write a good story.

The sentence refers to past events, so 'is' should be 'was' and 'don't have' should be 'didn't have' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Nowadays, as an adult, I like those narrative stories that I can review some complex issues of the society or of some group of people's real life, if that story can also inspire me to think deeper or to come up with some, uh, more sophisticated.

✓ Nowadays, as an adult, I like those narrative stories that allow me to review some complex issues of society or some groups of people's real lives, especially if the story can also inspire me to think deeper or to come up with something more sophisticated.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'That I can review' should be 'that allow me to review' for clarity. 'The society' should be 'society' without 'the'. 'Group of people's real life' should be pluralized to 'groups of people's real lives'. The ending is incomplete; 'some, uh, more sophisticated' is unclear and needs completion.