假期— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response direct, grammatically correct and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating where you went, then briefly explain why. Use correct tense and smoother linking phrases (e.g., "because I'm an international student"). Avoid repetition.

範例: I went back to my home country for my last holiday. Because I'm an international student studying in New Zealand, I usually return home during breaks to visit family.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and use linking words like "because" and "also". Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I really like holidays because I don't have to attend school and can rest. Also, I usually return to my hometown to visit family and catch up with old friends, which makes the break enjoyable.

建議: Respond with a clear topic sentence naming the holiday and give specific reasons. Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Mention one or two unique features of the holiday and use correct prepositions and articles.

範例: My favourite public holiday is Children's Day, which falls on March 5. It's a family-oriented day for children to relax and spend time with relatives, so I enjoy resting and celebrating with my family.

建議: Give a coherent, logical answer: one topic sentence about typical holiday activities, then brief specific details. Fix unclear sentences (e.g., "to play something" and the unrelated Olympic comment). Only include relevant facts and correct tense.

範例: On holidays I usually visit my grandparents in Hawaii with my family. We spend time together, relax on the beach, and go sightseeing. (If you want to mention your father, add a clear connection: "My father, who won an Olympic medal in 2022, likes to join our family outings.")

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and add one or two specific activities you do at home. Use precise wording ("spend my days at home") and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: Yes, I enjoy spending my days at home during holidays because I don't have school or homework. I usually relax, watch movies, and cook with my family.

建議: State your preference clearly and give two specific reasons linked with proper linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and translate ideas into natural English. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: I prefer busy holidays because I like to do many activities and make the most of my time. For example, I plan museum visits, hikes and markets so each day feels productive and exciting.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct vocabulary. Replace unclear words ("window", "Busy Market") and use plural forms where needed. Give specific examples of activities and connect them with linking words.

範例: I prefer an exciting holiday because I enjoy trying new activities and exploring different places. For example, I like going hiking and visiting busy local markets, which makes my trips more memorable.

× I backed to my country in the last holiday because now I'm in New Zealand because of I'm international student, so each holiday I'm always back to my country.

✓ I went back to my country during the last holiday because I'm an international student now in New Zealand, so I always return to my country for each holiday.

The student used 'backed' which is incorrect past tense; the correct verb is 'went back' or 'returned'. Also 'in the last holiday' should be 'during the last holiday' and 'because of I'm international student' needs grammatical subjects and articles: 'because I'm an international student'. Use consistent past/simple present appropriate to context.

× Yes, I like holiday because I don't have to attend school so I can relax and sleep in.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because I don't have to attend school, so I can relax and sleep in.

Use plural 'holidays' to match general preference (singular 'holiday' is less natural here), and add a comma before 'so' for clarity. The verb tenses are fine otherwise.

× I usually turn to my hometown to visit my family and catch up with old friend, which makes the break more enjoyable.

✓ I usually go to my hometown to visit my family and catch up with old friends, which makes the break more enjoyable.

'Turn to' is the wrong preposition/verb; use 'go to'. 'Old friend' should be plural 'old friends' to match general meaning.

× My best public holiday is Children Day.

✓ My favourite public holiday is Children's Day.

The holiday name normally uses the possessive form 'Children's Day' and 'best' is less natural than 'favourite' when naming a preferred holiday.

× That day is just for children to relax with family on March 5, so that day I don't have to attend school and I can relax with my family.

✓ That day, which is on March 5, is just for children to relax with their families, so I don't have to attend school and can relax with my family.

Clarified date placement and corrected 'with family' to 'with their families' for agreement. Removed redundant 'that day' repetition and tightened sentence structure.

× I usually go to Hawaii with my family. To play something because my father is Olympic champion in 2022.

✓ I usually go to Hawaii with my family to relax and do activities because my father was an Olympic champion in 2022.

Combine fragments into one sentence and change 'To play something' to 'to relax and do activities' for natural expression. Use past tense 'was' for the 2022 achievement.

× So I usually go to the Hawaii to see my grandparents and we can spend time with them.

✓ So I usually go to Hawaii to see my grandparents and spend time with them.

Do not use the definite article 'the' with most proper place names like 'Hawaii'. 'We can spend time' can be simplified to 'spend time' to match narrative tense.

× I like to spend my time at home because I don't have to attend school and I don't have to do homework.

✓ I like to spend my time at home because I don't have to attend school and I don't have homework.

Original is acceptable but 'do homework' is fine; simplified to 'I don't have homework' for naturalness. No major grammar error; this suggestion improves fluency.

× I prefer a busy holiday because if I'm busy in the full day, it's me.

✓ I prefer a busy holiday because if I'm busy all day, it suits me.

'In the full day' is incorrect; use 'all day'. 'It's me' is ungrammatical here; 'it suits me' or 'I enjoy it' conveys intended meaning.

× I have a lot of fountain in the full list so I choose the busy holiday.

✓ I have a lot of things planned in my schedule, so I choose a busy holiday.

'Fountain' is the wrong word; likely meant 'things' or 'events'. 'In the full list' is awkward; use 'in my schedule' or 'planned for the day'. Article 'a busy holiday' is correct.

× I prefer an exciting window because I enjoy trying new activity and exploring different places.

✓ I prefer an exciting holiday because I enjoy trying new activities and exploring different places.

'Window' is incorrect word; should be 'holiday'. 'New activity' should be plural 'new activities' to match general preference.

× For example, I like going to hike and visit Busy Market, which makes my holiday more memorable.

✓ For example, I like going hiking and visiting the Busy Market, which makes my holiday more memorable.

Use the gerund forms 'going hiking' and 'visiting'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'Busy Market' if it is a specific place. This corrects verb forms and article usage.