假期— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (what you did and how you felt). Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy.

範例: I went to my hometown, Madharipur, for my cousin’s wedding. I spent several days celebrating with relatives, attending the ceremony and family meals, which made me very happy and helped me reconnect with cousins I hadn’t seen for years.

建議: Fix grammar and clarity: provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason or example. Avoid rhetorical questions that sound informal. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I really like holidays because they relieve the stress of work and study. For example, during my last holiday I could relax, sleep more and spend time with family, which improved my mood and energy.

建議: Remove fillers (uh) and correct word choice and tense. Give a clear reason and one concrete example of activities. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and finish your thought instead of trailing off.

範例: I like the winter vacation the most because it allows me to take a proper break from work and study. During that time my family and I often travel to nearby towns and enjoy long walks and dinners together, which helps me feel relaxed and refreshed.

建議: Organize answer: start with a general topic sentence then give two clear contrasting examples using linking words (for example/otherwise). Correct grammar and pronoun use.

範例: It depends on the holiday. For festivals we follow family traditions — for example, we cook special dishes and decorate the house — whereas on ordinary holidays I usually relax at home or go out with family to watch a movie.

建議: Good clear answer; improve by varying vocabulary (avoid 'chill') and add a brief reason or example. Use linking word to contrast two preferences.

範例: Yes, I often prefer to spend a day at home after a busy week because it helps me rest and recharge. However, sometimes I get bored staying in, so I might invite a friend over or go for a short walk to change the mood.

建議: Good structure and contrast. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'trekking', 'try' -> 'trying', 'made' -> 'makes') and use linking phrase to conclude. Be specific about activities and results.

範例: It depends on who I’m with. With friends I prefer a busy holiday visiting tourist sites, going trekking and trying new cuisines, while with my parents I enjoy staying at a resort to relax and spend quality time together, which strengthens our relationship.

建議: Concise and relevant. Remove repetition ('as I said before') and combine ideas smoothly with linking words. Give one specific example of each type of holiday to illustrate preference.

範例: It depends on my recent schedule. If I’ve been very busy I prefer a peaceful holiday at home to rest, but if I’m free I enjoy an exciting holiday going out with friends to watch a movie or go shopping.

× I went to my hometown Madharipur for the last holiday for attending my cousin's wedding.

✓ I went to my hometown, Madharipur, for the last holiday to attend my cousin's wedding.

The original sentence uses an incorrect verb form 'for attending' after a purpose phrase. Use 'to' + base verb to express purpose (to attend). Also add commas around the city name and remove redundancy.

× We spent lot of time celebrate the wedding with my family and I love to spend time with them.

✓ We spent a lot of time celebrating the wedding with my family, and I loved spending time with them.

Missing article 'a' before 'lot' and incorrect verb forms: use gerund 'celebrating' after 'spent' and parallel past tense 'loved' to match the past context. Also add a comma before conjunction linking two independent clauses.

× Of course, who doesn't like holidays? I think they are just really the stress of work and studies and provide a break from the monotony of everyday life.

✓ Of course; who doesn't like holidays? I think they really reduce the stress of work and studies and provide a break from the monotony of everyday life.

The clause 'they are just really the stress of work' is ungrammatical and incorrect verb choice. Use 'reduce the stress' to convey the intended meaning. Also adjust punctuation for clarity.

× I like winter vacation because, uh, this time I can free and stress stress out of my work and I visit many place with my family and spend lot of time together.

✓ I like the winter vacation because I can relax and get the stress out of my work; I visit many places with my family and we spend a lot of time together.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'winter vacation' and incorrect phrases: 'can free and stress stress out' is incorrect — use 'relax and get the stress out'. 'many place' needs plural 'places'. 'lot of' needs article 'a lot of'. Also keep consistent tense and subject agreement ('we spend').

× That's helped me, uh, to feel relaxed and, uh, *****.

✓ That helped me to feel relaxed and refreshed.

Use past simple 'helped' to match previous past context and avoid awkward present-perfect form. Include an appropriate adjective 'refreshed' for completion. Use 'to feel' or the gerund consistently; here 'helped me to feel' is correct.

× It depends, if it's a festival we take part in a special tradition like cooking a special food and decorating the house.

✓ It depends. If it's a festival, we take part in special traditions like cooking special foods and decorating the house.

Run-on sentence should be split with a period. Add commas after subordinate clause. Use plural 'traditions' and 'foods' to be natural; 'special' before noun does not need 'a' if plural.

× Otherwise I spend time with my family when another go out and just stay home and watch a TV show or movie.

✓ Otherwise I spend time with my family; when others go out, I just stay home and watch a TV show or a movie.

Incorrect pronoun 'another' should be 'others'. Also improve clause separation with a semicolon or comma, and add article 'a' before 'movie'.

× Sometimes after a few hectic or busy days, I prefer to stay home and chill.

✓ Sometimes, after a few hectic days, I prefer to stay home and relax.

'Chill' is informal; 'relax' is more appropriate for test speaking. 'Hectic or busy' is redundant; choose one. Added comma for introductory phrase.

× However, sometimes I also get bored staying at home and doing nothing.

✓ However, sometimes I also get bored staying at home and doing nothing.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It already uses present simple correctly to state a habitual feeling.

× It depends upon the company.

✓ It depends on the company.

'Depends on' is the more natural and common prepositional collocation in this context. 'Depends upon' is formal but less common; 'depends on' suits spoken English.

× With my friends I prefer busy holiday like going to different tourist sites, doing tracking, try new cuisine.

✓ With my friends I prefer a busy holiday, like going to different tourist sites, doing trekking, and trying new cuisine.

Missing article 'a' before 'busy holiday'. 'Tracking' should be 'trekking' (hiking) and 'try' should be in the gerund 'trying' to parallel the other gerunds. Add commas and conjunction for correct list structure.

× On the other hand, with my parents I just like to stay at resort and relax, spend quality time with them.

✓ On the other hand, with my parents I like to stay at a resort, relax, and spend quality time with them.

Missing article 'a' before 'resort'. Use parallel verb forms with commas and 'and' for the list: 'relax, and spend'. Remove 'just' for clarity or keep for emphasis but adjust placement.

× That made our bond more strong.

✓ That made our bond stronger.

Adjective 'stronger' is the comparative form; 'more strong' is nonstandard. Use 'stronger' for the comparative.

× As I said before, it depends.

✓ As I said before, it depends.

This sentence is correct and fits the context; no change needed.

× After a few hectic days, I prefer to just stay home and relax.

✓ After a few hectic days, I prefer to just stay home and relax.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× Otherwise I love to hang out with my friends watching movie or go shopping with them.

✓ Otherwise, I love hanging out with my friends, watching movies, or going shopping with them.

Use parallel gerunds 'hanging', 'watching', 'going' for consistent verb forms in a list. 'movie' should be plural 'movies' or 'a movie'. Added commas for clarity and introductory comma.