手表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise, and include a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid tense and word choice errors (e.g., say “I wear a watch” not “I will watch”).

範例: Yes, I usually wear a watch every day. In fact, it’s the first thing I put on after I wake up because it’s a long-standing habit and helps me feel ready for the day.

建議: Use correct phrases and smoother linking (e.g., “if memory serves me right”) and avoid small grammar mistakes. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with coherent linking words.

範例: Yes, I received one as a gift about four or five years ago. If memory serves me right, my mother surprised me with an automatic watch that cost around $300, which I hadn’t expected because I thought she would choose something inexpensive.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize supporting points using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “it can show,” “they may think expensive watches are made from better materials”) and finish your idea—avoid incomplete sentences. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Some people wear expensive watches because they want to project success and good taste. Additionally, they may believe high-end watches are better made and more durable, so they see them as both a status symbol and a long-term investment.

建議: Keep the answer direct and precise with a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting reasons linked smoothly. Avoid filler phrases like “you know.”

範例: Yes, I do. A watch lets you check the time quickly, and smartwatches also offer practical features like health tracking and step counting, which many people find useful.

× Yeah, I will watch pretty much every day, and I've been doing this ever since I was a kid.

✓ Yeah, I wear a watch pretty much every day, and I've been doing this ever since I was a kid.

The student used 'will watch' which is future tense and incorrect for a habitual present action. Use simple present 'wear' for regular habits; present perfect continuous 'I've been doing' is correct for an action continuing from the past to present. Suggestion: use simple present for routines (I wear, he goes, etc.).

× If my memory serves similar, it was about four or five years back at the time my mom bought me an automatic watch.

✓ If my memory serves me correctly, it was about four or five years ago when my mom bought me an automatic watch.

Several problems: idiom 'serves me correctly' requires 'me' and 'correctly'; 'similar' is wrong word choice. Use 'years ago' not 'years back' for clear past reference and 'when' fits timeline. Suggestion: use common idiom 'If my memory serves me correctly' and 'years ago' for past time expressions.

× I mean it can shows their success or good taste in fashion.

✓ I mean it can show their success or good taste in fashion.

Modal 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the third-person singular 'shows'. Use 'show'. Suggestion: after modal verbs (can, should, will) always use base verb form.

× On top of that, they may also think that expensive which is are made from better materials and the last.

✓ On top of that, they may also think that expensive watches are made from better materials and last longer.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: misplaced relative 'which is', incorrect verb form 'are' position, and 'and the last' is unclear. Correct structure: 'that expensive watches are made...' and use 'last longer' to express durability. Suggestion: keep subject and verb close, remove redundant relative clauses, and use clear comparative phrases like 'last longer'.

× If my memory serves similar, it was about four or five years back at the time my mom bought me an automatic watch.

✓ If my memory serves me correctly, it was about four or five years ago when my mom bought me an automatic watch.

The phrase 'an automatic watch' is fine, but the time expression needed revision ('years ago' not 'years back'). Also 'the time' is unnecessary; 'when' is better. Suggestion: use 'years ago' and 'when' to link events.

× You know, it's a great way for us to tell the time immediately.

✓ You know, it's a great way for us to tell the time quickly.

'Immediately' suggests instant action but sounds awkward with 'tell the time'; 'quickly' is a more natural adverb here. Also original is grammatically acceptable but stylistically improve adverb choice. Suggestion: choose adverbs that fit collocations ('tell the time quickly' or 'tell the time at a glance').