广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子有多处语法错误和用词不当，影响理解。建议：1) 使用正确的时态与主谓一致（例：When I was a child）。2) 用连贯的句子结构先给出主题句，然后补充具体细节（例如为什么广告吸引你、广告的内容）。3) 注意代词和主语一致（例如：my mom didn’t allow me，she thinks）。4) 控制长度不超过5句，避免重复和犹豫词。

範例: When I was a child, a cake commercial impressed me because it showed a beautifully decorated cake with melting chocolate. I wanted to taste it immediately, but my mother wouldn’t let me because she thought too much sugar would be bad for my health.

建議: 表达需要更自然、流畅并注意词序与搭配。建议：1) 用更自然的动词（see rather than say）。2) 提供一到两条具体说明，例如广告类型和你的反应；使用连接词（for example, and, which）使逻辑更清晰。3) 修正片段不完整的问题并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains. For example, there are usually Nike posters in the subway which are very eye-catching, and sometimes they make me want to buy the clothes they show.

建議: 回答含糊且有填充词，缺少清晰的支持细节。建议：1) 直接给出立场（yes/no/both）并用一两个清晰的理由支持。2) 避免无意义的填充词（uh, mm）。3) 举具体例子说明不喜欢的广告类型（如误导性或打断性的广告）。4) 使用连接词（however, for example）连接对比观点。

範例: I have mixed feelings about advertisements. On the one hand, attractive ads can persuade me to buy a product; on the other hand, I dislike ads that are annoying or misleading, such as pop-ups that interrupt videos.

建議: 表达混乱且有重复，语法和词汇使用不稳。建议：1) 开门见山说明喜欢的广告类型（fashion/clothing ads）。2) 提供具体原因并用连接词组织（because, for example）。3) 避免重复短语并用恰当词汇（up-to-date, new styles, inspire me）。4) 将答案控制在2-4句内。

範例: I prefer advertisements for clothing because I like to follow current fashion trends. These ads often showcase new styles and outfit ideas, which inspire me to update my wardrobe.

建議: 表达不清并有词汇错误（a nose? attractivity?），答案组织松散。建议：1) 用准确词汇描述感受（annoyed, distracted, attracted）。2) 清晰列出正反两方面并用连接词（however, but）。3) 修正语法与搭配（on my phone or computer; they interrupt me）。4) 提供具体例子说明哪类广告令人烦或吸引你。

範例: Yes, I often see many ads on my phone and computer. They can be annoying when they interrupt videos or webpages, but some funny or well-designed ads catch my attention and make me interested in the product.

× Of course, when I were a child, I was attracted by.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I was attracted by a cake advertisement.

错误类型：现在时/过去时使用（ID 6）。说明：句中使用的是过去时间状语“when I was a child”，应使用过去时“was”，原句中误用“were”。同时原句不完整，缺少受词，需补全为“a cake advertisement”。建议：在描述过去发生的事情时使用一般过去时；注意主语“I”与动词“was”配合。

× A cake advertisement and I really want wanted to taste it but my mom didn't allow me eat too much sweet food because he think it will harmful to my health.

✓ A cake advertisement and I really wanted to taste it, but my mom didn't allow me to eat too much sweet food because she thought it would be harmful to my health.

错误类型：代词使用错误（ID 12）及过去时错误（ID 5）。说明：1) 人称代词与母亲不一致，原句用“he”应为“she”；2) 时态不一致，描述过去的想法应使用过去时“wanted/thought”；3) 动词不定式前需加“to eat”；4) 形容有害用法需加“be”构成“would be harmful”。建议：注意代词性别与时态一致，使用正确的不定式结构和系动词。

× Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport? Student: Of course, I usually say a lot of advertising on trains.

✓ Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport? Student: Of course, I usually see a lot of advertising on trains.

错误类型：介词/动词选择错误（ID 11）。说明：原句“I usually say a lot of advertising”中“say”用错，正确应为“see”表示“看到”。建议：注意常见动词搭配，看到广告用“see”。

× For example, I usually say the advertisement of Nike in the subway and it always attractive and sometimes I will want to buy the. Clothes.

✓ For example, I usually see Nike advertisements in the subway and they are always attractive and sometimes I want to buy the clothes.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用错误（ID 13）及句子结构（ID 26）。说明：1) “it always attractive”缺少系动词，要用“they are always attractive”；2) 单复数不一致，multiple ads→“advertisements”或代词“they”；3) 不需要“will”表示一般倾向，用“want”；4) “buy the. Clothes”断句错误，应为“buy the clothes”或“buy clothes”。建议：注意系动词、数的一致性和连贯句子结构。

× Sometimes I like advertisement because they are attractive and usually make me want to buy the product. But sometimes I don't like advertisement. For example, some advertisement. MMM uh is very unavailable and uh make me feel.

✓ Sometimes I like advertisements because they are attractive and usually make me want to buy the product. But sometimes I don't like advertisements. For example, some advertisements are very unconvincing and make me uncomfortable.

错误类型：句子结构错误（ID 26）与形容词使用（ID 13）。说明：1) 单复数不一致，“advertisement”应复数“advertisements”；2) “is very unavailable”词不当，应为“are very unconvincing”或“not convincing”；3) 结尾“make me feel”不完整需补全情感词如“uncomfortable”。建议：保证主谓数一致，使用恰当的形容词并补全不完整的句子。

× To be honest, I like to watching advertisement about clothes because I really like to buy up to date clothes and push you push you the style, the new style, so the advertisement about new. Please will make me have. Make me want to buy it.

✓ To be honest, I like watching advertisements about clothes because I really like to buy up-to-date clothes and follow the new styles, so advertisements about new styles make me want to buy them.

错误类型：动词+ -ing 形式（ID 8）及句子结构（ID 26）。说明：1) “like to watching”应为“like watching”或“like to watch”；2) “advice”应复数“advertisements”；3) “up to date”需连字符“up-to-date”；4) “push you push you the style”不通，应为“follow the new styles”；5) 句子碎片需合并为完整句。建议：熟悉动词后接动名词或不定式的用法，避免重复与句子碎片。

× Do you often see advertisements when you are on your phone or computer? Student: Yes, with the development of technology I usually can see a lot of advertisements on computer of my phone and they usually will make me feel a nose when it interrupt. What are we what? Waiting. But sometimes I was attracted by this advertisement because of their attractivity and funny.

✓ Yes, with the development of technology I can usually see a lot of advertisements on my computer or phone, and they usually annoy me when they interrupt. But sometimes I am attracted by these advertisements because they are attractive and funny.

错误类型：介词使用错误（ID 11）、时态错误（ID 6）与形容词使用（ID 13）。说明：1) “on computer of my phone”应为“on my computer or phone”；2) “will make me feel a nose”不当，应为“annoy me”表示“让我恼火”；3) “when it interrupt”主语不一致，应为“when they interrupt”；4) 最后一部分时态应与现在情况一致，用现在时“am attracted/are attractive and funny”。建议：注意介词短语的固定搭配、主谓一致以及使用合适的词表达“令人烦恼/有趣”。