广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (what the ad showed, the slogan) and finish with a short comment on why it impressed you. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "their slogan was," "Pop is not a carbonated drink; it's sparkling water").

範例: I remember an ad for a sparkling water brand called Pop. The commercial showed children playing in a park and ended with the slogan, “Pop is not a carbonated drink; it’s sparkling water,” which I still recall because it sounded different from other ads. The bright visuals and catchy slogan made it memorable for me.

建議: Organize the answer: begin with a clear statement, then give specific details and use linking words (e.g., "for example," "so"). Correct awkward phrases and tenses ("majority are celebrity endorsements," "when I am at the railway station"). Avoid unclear fragments like "I was an A railway station."

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and at stations. For example, many posters feature celebrities, so people often stop to take photos of the ads and post them on social media. This trend makes station advertising very visible and effective.

建議: Give a clearer opinion and balance it with reasons. Start with a direct response (Yes/No/Mostly), then use linking words ("however," "because") and give specific examples of what you like and dislike. Fix phrasing: "they have economic value," "I'm annoyed by telemarketing calls and pop-up ads online."

範例: I mostly like advertisements because they inform me about new products and offers. However, I dislike intrusive ads—especially telemarketing calls and pop-up ads online—because they interrupt what I'm doing.

建議: Be specific about the type of advertising and explain why. Use clear terms (e.g., "cover advertising" is vague—perhaps "native" or "subtle ads"). Use linking words to compare and clarify: "I prefer subtle or native ads because they blend with content and don't feel intrusive." Avoid unclear reference to "COVID advertising."

範例: I prefer subtle or native advertising because it blends naturally with the content and doesn't feel intrusive. For example, during the pandemic I saw subtle product placements in videos that I didn’t notice as ads, and I appreciated that they didn’t interrupt my viewing experience.

建議: Structure the answer: give a clear yes/no and then two specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar: "I see a lot of advertisements on my phone, especially unskippable YouTube ads," and "I also get pop-ups on websites when I surf the internet." Avoid filler words like "uh" and repeated connectors.

範例: Yes, I see many ads on my phone, especially unskippable ads on YouTube that force me to wait. I also get pop-up ads on my computer when I browse websites, which can be very annoying.

× Yes, I remember it's an advertisement about a sparkling water named Pop. Until now I can still remember their slogan in the advertisements is around is about pop is not carbonated drink is a sparkling water.

✓ Yes, I remember an advertisement for a sparkling water brand named Pop. Even now I can still remember its slogan: 'Pop is not a carbonated drink; it is sparkling water.'

The original uses inconsistent pronouns and awkward phrasing. 'It's an advertisement about a sparkling water named Pop' is grammatically awkward; use 'an advertisement for a sparkling water brand named Pop.' 'Their' is incorrect for a singular brand; use the singular possessive 'its.' The sentence also lacks proper punctuation and parallel structure. Improve by using clearer noun phrases, correct possessive pronoun, and punctuation to separate the slogan. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, I see a lot of advertising at the railway station with majority as celebrity endorsement.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertising at the railway station, the majority of which features celebrity endorsements.

'With majority as celebrity endorsement' is an incorrect prepositional and structural phrase. Use 'the majority of which' to refer back to 'advertising' and 'features' plus plural 'endorsements' for agreement. This clarifies the relationship between the station ads and celebrity endorsements. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Therefore, every time when I was an A railway station, I could see many people standing in front of the advertisement board and taking photo of it to post it on social.

✓ Therefore, every time I was at a railway station, I could see many people standing in front of the advertisement board and taking photos of it to post on social media.

Incorrect article use: 'an A railway station' is redundant and wrong; use 'a railway station' or 'at a railway station.' Preposition needed is 'at.' 'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos.' 'Post it on social' is informal and unclear; use 'post on social media.' Also remove 'when' after 'every time' for smoother grammar. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Well, I would say so. So I know that advertisements are very important and they have their own economic values, but sometimes I'm quite annoyed with the telemarketing and Internet pops up.

✓ Well, I would say so. I know that advertisements are very important and that they have economic value, but sometimes I'm quite annoyed by telemarketing and Internet pop-ups.

'They have their own economic values' is awkward and 'value' is usually uncountable here. Use 'economic value.' 'Annoyed with' is acceptable but 'annoyed by' is more natural for causes. 'Internet pops up' is ungrammatical; use the noun 'Internet pop-ups' (plural) to refer to intrusive ads. Also remove redundant 'So.' Grammar problem type ID: 27

× I would probably say the cover advertising because I don't like to be targeted so I don't like those obvious advertisement.

✓ I would probably say cover advertising because I don't like to be targeted, so I don't like those obvious advertisements.

'The cover advertising' incorrectly uses the definite article; use no article with the general category 'cover advertising.' 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'those.' Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× However, for a COVID advertising is subtle and I even didn't notice that I was being targeted by the business or company.

✓ However, COVID advertising can be subtle, and I didn't even notice that I was being targeted by the business or company.

'For a COVID advertising' is incorrect article and preposition use. Use 'COVID advertising' without an article for the general category. Use 'can be subtle' or 'is often subtle' to express typicality. Move 'even' before 'didn't' for natural emphasis: 'I didn't even notice.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, I see a lot of advertisement when I on my phone when I'm watching YouTube and there are a lot of advertisement that couldn't skip until uh, limit of time range.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone when I'm watching YouTube, and there are many ads that I can't skip until the time limit ends.

Use preposition 'on' with 'my phone.' 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' or 'ads.' 'Couldn't skip' should be present 'can't skip' to match the present context; 'until uh, limit of time range' is ungrammatical—use 'until the time limit ends.' Also simplify and clarify the clause order. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Also and, and on my computer I always have some Internet pops up when I surf the website.

✓ Also, on my computer I often have Internet pop-ups when I surf websites.

The original has redundant conjunctions 'Also and, and'—use a single 'Also' or 'And.' 'Some Internet pops up' is ungrammatical; use 'Internet pop-ups' (plural) or 'pop-up ads.' 'Surf the website' should be 'surf websites' or 'surf the web.' Grammar problem type ID: 16