广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意时态和主谓一致，回答要更简洁并包含明确主题句与具体细节。可以将句子压缩为最多五句，避免重复用词（如“a lot”）。举例时说明为什么印象深刻（例如声音、画面或功能）。使用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: Yes. One TV advert for a reading device stayed with me when I was ten because it showed a child easily learning to read with bright animations and a friendly voiceover. As a result, I felt excited and asked my parents to buy it. That commercial stood out because it combined clear demonstration of the product with an emotional appeal.

建議: 注意名词单复数和词汇准确性，答案要有主题句并用一两句具体说明地点或形式。避免拼写错误和含糊表达，使用连接词（for example, such as）使句子更流畅。

範例: Yes, I often see adverts on public transport. For example, trains and buses usually display posters on the walls and back of seats, and sometimes there are full-panel wraps promoting products like mattresses or local services.

建議: 回答要更清晰地表达观点并减少语法错误与冗余。先给主题句（I like some but not others），接着用连接词说明原因并举具体例子（informative vs. intrusive ads）。避免使用不明确的词如“fishing advertisements”，可用正确词汇如“misleading”或“clickbait”。

範例: It depends. I appreciate informative adverts that clearly explain a product’s features because they help me make decisions. However, I dislike intrusive or misleading ads, such as pop-ups and clickbait, because they interrupt my browsing and can be deceptive.

建議: 開頭要有完整主題句，句子結構應更正確，避免多餘連接詞。擴展一兩個具體特徵（e.g., clear information, honest claims, demonstrations）並簡短說明原因。

範例: I prefer clear and informative adverts that honestly describe a product’s features and include demonstrations. Such ads help me compare options quickly and decide whether a product suits my needs.

建議: 避免使用強烈且不準確的詞如“toxic”，可改用中性表述（annoying, intrusive）。回答要有主題句並用具體例子支持，控制句子數量和長度，注意語法和介詞用法（on my phone, on my computer）。

範例: Yes, I see many adverts on my phone and computer. For instance, I often get pop-up ads and banner ads while browsing, and social media feeds are full of sponsored posts, which I find quite distracting.

× Yes, when I was a child, there are a lot of advertisements impressed me a lot.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, there were a lot of advertisements that impressed me.

句子中使用了过去时“when I was a child”，但主句用了现在时的“There are”，时态不一致。应使用过去时“There were”。另外“impressed me a lot”需要一个关系代词“that”来修饰“advertisements”，并避免重复使用“a lot”。建议保持时态一致，并使用关系代词连接。

× For example, when I was 10 years old, I saw on TV an advertisement that promoting a point reading machine.

✓ For example, when I was 10 years old, I saw on TV an advertisement that promoted a point reading machine.

原句中“that promoting”不符合关系从句中动词形式，应该用过去式“promoted”来说明该广告在过去起的作用；也可改为“that was promoting”（被动进行或过去进行），但最自然的是用过去式。建议根据句子时态选择正确的动词形式或使用被动结构。

× Yes, there are a lot of advertising on public transportations.

✓ Yes, there is a lot of advertising on public transport.

“advertising”作不可数名词或用“advertisements”作可数名词。原句用“there are”与不可数名词不匹配，应使用“There is a lot of advertising”或“There are a lot of advertisements”。“transportations”通常不用复数，改为“transport”。注意主谓一致和名词单复数用法。

× Trans bars, mattress, all of them have advertisements.

✓ Trains, buses, and mattresses all have advertisements.

原句列举项目有拼写和分类错误：可能想说“trains, buses”。“mattress”是“床垫”，通常不在此列。需要使用复数名词并使用正确单词。若指交通工具应写“trains and buses”。确保单词拼写正确并保持并列名词的一致性。

× For example, there are a lot of posts or pasted at the seat of the train and buses.

✓ For example, there are a lot of posters pasted on the seats of trains and buses.

原句中“posts”应为“posters”（海报），并且“pasted at the seat”介词和单复数不当。正确搭配是“pasted on the seats”，并将“train and buses”统一为复数“trains and buses”。注意名词形式、介词选择和一致性。

× Actually, it depends.

✓ Actually, it depends.

该句本身语法正确，但作为答句可能需要接补充内容以更完整地回答问题。此处没有语法错误，只是简短回答，故保留原句。（无需修改）

× Some advertisements are useful and informative which can help me learn a lot about the products that I want to buy, while some like fishing advertisements will make me annoyed and bother me alerts that kind of advertisements I don't like.

✓ Some advertisements are useful and informative, which can help me learn a lot about the products I want to buy; while some annoying advertisements, like clickbait ads, make me irritated and bothered — I don't like those kinds of ads.

原句存在多处问题：关系从句连接不当，应在“informative”后用逗号并接“which”；“some like fishing advertisements”表达不清，猜测为“clickbait/annoying ads”；“will make me annoyed and bother me alerts”语序混乱且词汇使用错误，需改为“make me irritated and bothered”并用“those kinds of ads”指代前文。建议使用清晰的名词并调整语序。

× Like some clear, informative and useful advertisements because which can help me understand more about the products that I might buy.

✓ I like clear, informative, and useful advertisements because they can help me understand more about the products I might buy.

原句缺少主语，“Like”作为开头不完整。关系代词“which”在此处用法不当，应该用“because they”引出原因。保持主句完整并确保代词与先行词一致（they 指 advertisements）。另外去掉冗余词以使表达更自然。

× Yes, I think advertisements are toxic nowadays because I can see on my phone, computer as well as transportation systems in my classroom.

✓ Yes, I think advertisements are ubiquitous nowadays because I can see them on my phone, on my computer, and on transportation systems and in my classroom.

原句用词“toxic”语义上不太合适（可用“ubiquitous”或“everywhere”），且“I can see on my phone”缺主语/宾语，应加“them”。并且并列成分需要一致的介词“on my phone, on my computer”或“in my classroom”。建议补全宾语并保持平行结构。

× For example, there are a lot of pop up messages in my phone.

✓ For example, there are a lot of pop-up messages on my phone.

英文中通常说“on my phone”而不是“in my phone”来表示屏幕上出现的消息。并且“pop up”作为复合形容词或名词应写为“pop-up messages”。建议使用正确介词并固定写法。