广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more directly and clearly. Start with a topic sentence naming the ad and why it impressed you, then give one or two specific supporting details (what happened in the ad, how it made you feel, and a brief reason). Use simple linking words (for example, because, so) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a public service ad about helping others. It showed a child doing a small kind act for an elderly neighbor, and the neighbor smiling because of the help. Because the ad was simple and emotional, it made me believe small actions can change someone's day.

建議: Be specific about frequency and attention. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and how often), then explain where you see ads and whether you pay attention, providing a reason. Use linking words such as however or because to connect ideas and keep sentences short and natural.

範例: Yes, I often see advertising on buses and trains, especially posters and digital screens. However, I usually do not pay much attention to them because I am focused on my phone or reading. As a result, I remember only a few eye-catching images, not detailed information.

建議: Give a balanced opinion and explain reasons clearly. Start with a direct statement about whether you like ads, then state a reason you dislike some (e.g., they interrupt you) and mention a type you tolerate. Use linking words like but or because and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: I like some advertisements, but I dislike intrusive ones because they interrupt my activities. For example, I often skip video ads in apps since they waste my time. I prefer ads that tell a short story or provide useful information.

建議: Clarify the type and explain why. Start with a topic sentence naming the preferred style (storytelling ads), then give 1–2 specific reasons (they engage emotions, explain product) and an example. Use linking words like because and for example to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer storytelling advertisements because they engage my emotions and explain the product naturally. For example, a three-minute ad that follows a character and shows how a product helped them feels more convincing than a short slogan. Because I enjoy the narrative, I usually watch these ads until the end.

建議: Give a clear, concise answer about frequency and why. Start with a direct yes/no and frequency (often/sometimes), then explain how you avoid ads (ad blockers, skipping) and give a short result. Use simple linking words like because and so to structure your response.

範例: No, I do not see many advertisements on my phone or computer because I use an ad blocker and skip video ads. As a result, my online experience is less interrupted and I rarely notice most ads.

× Yes, that is an advertisement.

✓ Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me.

The original sentence is vague and does not respond directly to the question about an advertisement that made an impression. This is a sentence structure issue: it lacks clarity and the correct tense. Use a complete clause that fits the past context ('made an impression') and refer to the advertisement clearly ('there was an advertisement that impressed me').

× That student plays me.

✓ That advertisement affected me.

The original sentence uses 'student' and 'plays me' incorrectly. It seems the speaker meant the advertisement influenced or affected them. This is an incorrect pronoun/word choice issue. Replace with a proper subject 'that advertisement' and verb 'affected' to convey influence.

× Until now, the entertainment is about how to tell the people.

✓ To this day, I remember how the advertisement tried to tell a message to people.

The phrase 'Until now, the entertainment is about how to tell the people' is ungrammatical and unclear. It mixes time reference and terms ('entertainment') wrongly. Rephrase to match intent: time expression 'To this day' and clear description 'the advertisement tried to tell a message to people.'

× It's just like simple things and just your small action that can change every day.

✓ It showed simple things and how small actions can change a life.

The original uses awkward adjective/adverb phrasing ('just like simple things' and 'change every day'). This is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and collocations. Use more natural noun/verb collocations: 'showed simple things' and 'small actions can change a life.'

× Yes I do, but I don't forgot this.

✓ Yes, I do, but I haven't forgotten it.

The original mixes present tense with past form 'forgot'. This is a third person/tense problem and wrong verb form. Use present perfect 'haven't forgotten' to express memory continuing to present.

× This is like in local brow, but don't concentrate what the information about the advertisements.

✓ This is like in the local area, but people don't pay attention to the information in the advertisements.

'In local brow' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; 'don't concentrate what the information' is ungrammatical. Correct prepositions and noun phrases: 'in the local area' and 'pay attention to the information in the advertisements.'

× Yes I do but this day I didn't see a lot of this because I play ball skip advertisement in the app because sometimes it waste my time.

✓ Yes, I do, but these days I don't see many ads because I skip in-app ads when I play games since they sometimes waste my time.

The original mixes tenses ('didn't see' with 'this day') and uses wrong verb forms ('play ball skip advertisement'). This is a past tense and sentence structure problem. Use present simple for habitual action ('these days I don't see many ads') and correct verbs: 'skip in-app ads' and 'they sometimes waste my time.'

× I don't creative advertising so I love the long advertisements that they tell story about and just show what it is but they you the story to attract the people to watch it until the end.

✓ I'm not into creative advertising, so I prefer long advertisements that tell a story and show what the product is; they use the story to attract people to watch until the end.

The original contains incorrect adjective usage ('I don't creative advertising'), word order and missing verbs. This is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure. Use 'I'm not into' to express preference, 'prefer long advertisements that tell a story' and 'they use the story' for correct verbs and structure.

× No, I don't often see a lot of better timings when I on the phone or computer because this day you can escape the other timings when you are on the screen, so I didn't see it's not now today.

✓ No, I don't often see many ads when I'm on the phone or computer because nowadays you can skip other ads on the screen, so I don't see them much anymore.

The original mixes tenses and contains incorrect phrases ('better timings', 'when I on the phone', 'this day you can escape the other timings'). This is primarily a present tense and sentence structure issue. Use present simple and correct expressions: 'I don't often see many ads', 'when I'm on the phone', 'nowadays you can skip ads', and 'I don't see them much anymore.'