广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the ad, then give one or two specific details (what made it memorable and why). Use linking words (for example, because/so) and avoid hesitations and repetition. Keep to under five sentences.

範例: When I was a child, the Oreo commercial impressed me the most. It had a catchy song and a simple rhyme that I could remember easily, so I would sing it all the time. Because of the tune and repetitive lyrics, the ad stayed in my mind long after I saw it.

建議: Answer directly and give clear examples. Begin with a topic sentence (Yes, I see many ads), then specify locations (inside trains, on billboards, on seat backs) and give one brief reason or effect. Avoid unclear words and unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, there are posters on the carriage walls, ads on the backs of seats, and digital screens on platforms. These ads catch commuters' attention because people often look around while waiting or traveling.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then explain with specific reasons and one example. Use linking words like because or however to connect ideas, and finish your sentence. Avoid repetition (website, online website) and filler words.

範例: I like some advertisements, but it depends on the format and content. For example, I dislike intrusive pop-up ads on websites because they interrupt what I'm doing and slow down my browser. However, I appreciate informative ads that explain a product's benefits.

建議: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons and an example. Use cohesive language (for example, because, for instance) and avoid repetition. Mention what makes influencer ads effective (authenticity, demonstration) in one or two supporting sentences.

範例: I prefer influencer advertising because it feels more authentic and practical. For instance, when an influencer demonstrates how they use a skincare product and describes real results, I can judge whether it would suit me. This personal experience makes the ad more convincing.

建議: Give a concise direct answer and include specific platforms and one effect. Use linking words and correct verb forms (it interrupts me). Limit to two or three sentences and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, social media apps, news websites, and free apps all show ads, and sometimes they interrupt what I'm doing or slow down the page loading.

× And when I was a child is the most I memorized is the cookie called Oreo because umm it was the song with the advertisement like it, it contains the math.

✓ When I was a child, the advertisement I remember most was for Oreo; it had a song and a catchy jingle.

The original sentence has unclear structure, extra words and repetitions. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Reorganize into a clear subject ('the advertisement I remember most'), past tense verb ('was'), and concise description ('for Oreo; it had a song and a catchy jingle'). Remove fillers like 'umm' and repeated phrases.

× Yes, when I get trends and or bus, there's a lot of there are a lot of an advertisement on war and also on the chair or the board. So the for example, there's something that.

✓ Yes, when I take trains or buses, there are a lot of advertisements on the walls and on the boards; for example, ...

Multiple preposition and word choice errors (ID 11). Use 'take' with transport, pluralize 'trains' and 'buses', use 'there are' for plural 'advertisements', 'on the walls' and 'on the boards' are correct prepositional phrases. Remove redundant fragments and complete the example.

× I think it depends on the items and also the way of advertisements, because if it's on the website, online website and it always pop up and it's really annoys me because it.

✓ I think it depends on the product and the style of the advertisement; if it's on a website and always pops up, it really annoys me.

Errors include incorrect noun choice and verb forms (ID 10). 'Items' better as 'product(s)'; use 'style of the advertisement' instead of 'way of advertisements'. Use third-person singular present 'pops up' and remove extra 'it' before 'always'. 'Annoys me' is correct; avoid dangling 'because' without a clause.

× MMM I like like some influencers show the experience they use the products and share the real opinions and experiences of using this product and also content advert advantage.

✓ I like when influencers show how they use products and share their honest opinions and experiences; I also like informative advertising content that highlights product benefits.

This sentence has awkward adjective/adverb and word choice issues (ID 13). Remove filler 'MMM' and duplicate 'like', use 'when' to introduce the clause, use 'how they use products', 'honest opinions' instead of 'real opinions', and rephrase 'content advert advantage' to 'informative advertising content that highlights product benefits' for clarity.

× Yeah, I always see advertisements on my phone, whether I use the website or apps or just social media, there are always a lot of advertisements on there and sometimes it interrupt me.

✓ Yes, I always see advertisements on my phone; whether I'm using websites, apps, or social media, there are always many ads, and sometimes they interrupt me.

Errors include adverb placement and subject-verb agreement (ID 20). Use 'I'm using' for progressive activity, 'many ads' is more natural than 'a lot of advertisements on there', and change 'it interrupt me' to plural 'they interrupt me' to agree with 'ads'. Ensure adverbs like 'always' are placed before the main verb for clarity.