广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、内容も曖昧です。具体的な広告の内容やなぜ印象に残ったのかを明確に述べることが重要です。また、冗長な表現を避け、5文以内で簡潔に答えましょう。

範例: One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a TV commercial for a popular anime series that aired after school. It featured exciting scenes and catchy music, which made me eager to watch the show. Many children, including me, were fascinated by it because it was entertaining and relatable.

建議: 内容は理解できますが、文法の誤りや単語の選択ミスがあります。より自然な表現を使い、接続詞を活用して論理的に話を展開しましょう。具体例を加えると良いです。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses because these places have a lot of passengers every day. Therefore, companies use these transport systems as good opportunities to promote their products to a wide audience.

建議: 回答が不明瞭で文法的に不正確です。自分の意見をはっきり述べ、理由を具体的に説明しましょう。また、冗長な表現を避け、簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

範例: I find it hard to say if I like advertisements because many of them appear online while I am browsing. Sometimes, they are annoying because they interrupt what I am doing.

建議: 良い回答ですが、文法の小さな誤り（makes → make）があります。さらに、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。具体例も適切で効果的です。

範例: I like advertisements that seem trustworthy and make me feel confident about the product. For example, when I see ads for food products, I carefully check if the company is reliable and if the food is safe to eat, which helps me decide whether to buy it or not.

建議: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より簡潔で明確な表現を使い、冗長な部分を削除しましょう。

範例: Recently, I often see many advertisements while browsing the internet on my phone or computer. Some ads even force me to watch promotional videos from different companies, which can be quite annoying.

× I saw many impressive advertisement, uh, when I was a child, especially on TV or newspaper.

✓ I saw many impressive advertisements, uh, when I was a child, especially on TV or newspapers.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it is preceded by 'many', which indicates more than one. Also, 'newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' to match the context of multiple sources.

× When I was a child, I was hooked on the anime series of that was broadcasted after the school time of after the school.

✓ When I was a child, I was hooked on the anime series that was broadcast after school time.

The phrase 'broadcasted' is incorrect; the past tense of 'broadcast' is 'broadcast'. Also, 'of after the school time of after the school' is redundant and unclear, so it is simplified to 'after school time'.

× I think every child was fascinated with the.

✓ I think every child was fascinated with it.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object. 'The' is a definite article that requires a noun to follow. Replacing 'the' with 'it' completes the sentence logically.

× I can see a lot of advertisement on transportation system because there are many people who use transport or use airports, trains and buses every day.

✓ I can see a lot of advertisements on transportation systems because there are many people who use transport or use airports, trains, and buses every day.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because of 'a lot of'. 'Transportation system' should be plural 'transportation systems' to generalize the context.

× So it is a good opportunity for corporation to sell themselves.

✓ So it is a good opportunity for corporations to sell themselves.

'Corporation' should be plural 'corporations' to match the plural subject implied by 'many people' and the context of multiple companies.

× It is difficult to say whether I like advertisement or not because I when I practicing through Internet there are many other many kinds of advertisement.

✓ It is difficult to say whether I like advertisements or not because when I am practicing through the Internet, there are many other kinds of advertisements.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. 'I when I practicing' is corrected to 'when I am practicing' for grammatical correctness. 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the'.

× Advertisement popped into my eyes and so I think it is I felt it's nuisance.

✓ Advertisements pop into my eyes, and so I think it is, I feel, a nuisance.

The tense is inconsistent; 'popped' is past tense but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'pop' is appropriate. 'I felt' should be 'I feel' to maintain present tense. 'It's nuisance' should be 'a nuisance' because 'nuisance' is a countable noun requiring an article.

× I like advertisements that seem trustworthy and makes me feel confident about the product.

✓ I like advertisements that seem trustworthy and make me feel confident about the product.

The verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject 'advertisements'.

× For example, when I see advertisement for food products, I carefully check if the company is reliable and if the food is safe to eat.

✓ For example, when I see advertisements for food products, I carefully check if the company is reliable and if the food is safe to eat.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads in general.

× Lately I see many kinds of advertisement when I am browsing on browsing on the net, especially the advertisement that forces me to see promotional movies all over those of those companies.

✓ Lately I see many kinds of advertisements when I am browsing the net, especially advertisements that force me to see promotional videos from those companies.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'many kinds'. 'Browsing on browsing on' is redundant and corrected to 'browsing'. 'Promotional movies' is better expressed as 'promotional videos'. 'All over those of those companies' is unclear and simplified to 'from those companies'.