广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持观点。

範例: Yes, the "Just Do It" advertisement by Nike impressed me a lot when I was a child. I saw it frequently on TV, and the catchy slogan stayed in my mind for a long time.

建議: 表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，缺少逻辑连接词。建议用简单句直接回答，并用具体例子说明。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on taxis and trains. For example, I usually notice membership ads on taxis, which help me learn about different services.

建議: 表达有一定逻辑，但用词不准确，句子不够流畅。建议使用更准确的词汇，并注意句子连贯。

範例: I like advertisements that are lively and colorful because they catch my attention. However, I dislike ads that are too noisy or chaotic because they can be annoying.

建議: 表达较为清晰，但语法和用词有待改进。建议用更自然的表达方式，并增加连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: I like creative advertisements because they teach me new things. Sometimes, I learn different advertising styles, which might help me create my own ads in the future.

建議: 句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持观点。

範例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. With technology improving, more companies choose to show ads online to reach more people and introduce their products.

× some advertisements are most impressed me must own to likes just do it advertisement.

✓ some advertisements impressed me the most, especially the 'Just Do It' advertisement.

这里'some advertisements'是复数，后面用'are most impressed me'结构不正确，应该用过去式'impressed'来表达过去的感受。'must own to likes'结构不通顺，应改为表达强调的方式。

× As a child I I saw this advertisement most time and after the as the surrounding for a while, the slogan Just do it appeared on the TV.

✓ As a child, I saw this advertisement most of the time, and after a while, the slogan 'Just Do It' appeared on the TV.

'most time'应为'most of the time'，'after the as the surrounding for a while'语法混乱，应简化为'after a while'。句子描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时。

× I always see various advertisements on taxi or trains from epicenter with is testing a significant way to impress products and allow more people to know it.

✓ I always see various advertisements on taxis or trains from the epicenter, which is a significant way to promote products and allow more people to know about them.

'taxi'应为复数'taxis'，'with is testing'结构错误，应为'relative clause'，用'which is'。'impress products'表达不当，应为'promote products'。

× As for me it's I always see a membership on the taxi so I know it.

✓ As for me, I always see membership advertisements on taxis, so I know about them.

'see a membership on the taxi'表达不清，应为'see membership advertisements on taxis'。'on the taxi'应为复数'taxis'，并且需要明确表达。

× If the advertisement is more activity and colorful I will enjoy it.

✓ If the advertisement is more active and colorful, I will enjoy it.

'activity'是名词，形容词应为'active'，用来描述广告的性质。

× But however some advertisements always fall bustle and hustle and even a a such louder noise so I hate it.

✓ However, some advertisements are always full of bustle and hustle and even have such loud noise, so I hate them.

'fall bustle and hustle'表达错误，应为'full of bustle and hustle'。'a a such louder noise'结构错误，应为'such loud noise'。

× this must be the creativity advertisements.

✓ These must be creative advertisements.

'advertisements'是复数，指示代词应为'these'，'creativity'是名词，形容词应为'creative'。

× I can always know more knowledge about it and even I can learn some types of advertisements from it so that I maybe one day I can make advertisements by myself.

✓ I can always learn more about it and even learn some types of advertisements from it so that maybe one day I can make advertisements by myself.

'know more knowledge about'表达重复且不自然，应简化为'learn more about'。

× more product, more factors, choice to put ads on phones and internets.

✓ more products, more factors, and choices to put ads on phones and the internet.

'product'应为复数'products'，'choice'应为复数'choices'，'internets'应为单数'the internet'。

× It's such a fantastic way so that more people will learn the products fun function and their lights.

✓ It's such a fantastic way so that more people will learn about the products' functions and features.

'learn the products fun function and their lights'表达不清，应为'learn about the products' functions and features'。