广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the description more natural and concise. For example, use 'an advertisement' instead of 'advertisement', and 'started dancing happily' instead of 'start dancing happy day'. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

範例: When I was a child, I saw an advertisement where a girl received a chocolate bar and started dancing happily. This left a lasting impression on me because it showed how a small treat like chocolate can bring joy. The ad was memorable as it highlighted simple happiness in a cheerful way.

建議: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there is a vocabulary error with 'miniaturisement' which is not a correct word. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, such as 'because' or 'as'.

範例: These days, public transportation is an ideal way to reach wider audiences because I often see advertisements on buses, trains, and metro services. I think this method is very efficient as it reaches people who travel regularly and spend considerable time on these transports.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'help awareness' should be 'raise awareness', and 'Such as advertisement' is incorrect. Use linking words like 'because' and 'which' to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I like advertisements, especially those that are informative rather than intrusive or annoying. For example, I appreciate ads that spread useful messages about health or the environment because they raise awareness and educate people, which not only catches my attention but also motivates me to take positive actions.

建議: Your answer is well-structured and clear. To improve further, you could add a linking word like 'and' before 'as they educate people' to enhance coherence. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more vividly.

範例: I enjoy advertisements that are both useful and entertaining, especially those with a touch of humour, because they capture my attention easily. Additionally, I appreciate ads that address social issues and challenge stereotypes, and they educate people while raising awareness about important topics.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, 'usually prefer as a pop-ups' is incorrect; you could say 'usually appear as pop-ups'. Also, avoid repetition like 'what am I doing what I'm doing'. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise.

範例: Yes, I frequently come across advertisements when using my phone or computer. These ads usually appear as pop-ups and banners on websites and apps, which can sometimes be quite distracting because they interrupt what I am doing.

× I remember advertisement where a girl receives a chocolate bar and start dancing happy day.

✓ I remember an advertisement where a girl receives a chocolate bar and starts dancing happily.

The word 'advertisement' is singular and needs the article 'an' before it. Also, 'start' should be 'starts' to agree with the singular subject 'a girl' (third person singular). 'Dancing happy day' is incorrect; it should be 'dancing happily' to use the adverb form correctly.

× I remember advertisement where a girl receives a chocolate bar and start dancing happy day.

✓ I remember an advertisement where a girl receives a chocolate bar and starts dancing happily.

The verb 'start' must be in third person singular form 'starts' to agree with the singular subject 'a girl'.

× start dancing happy day

✓ starts dancing happily

'Happy' is an adjective but here an adverb is needed to describe the verb 'dancing'. The correct adverb form is 'happily'. Also, 'day' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× I often see miniaturisement on buses, trains and metro services.

✓ I often see mini advertisements on buses, trains and metro services.

The word 'miniaturisement' is incorrect and should be 'mini advertisements' (plural) to match the plural nouns 'buses, trains and metro services'.

× they help awareness and educate people Such as advertisement not only catch my attention but also motivate me to take positive actions.

✓ they help raise awareness and educate people. Such advertisements not only catch my attention but also motivate me to take positive actions.

The phrase 'help awareness' is incorrect; it should be 'help raise awareness'. Also, 'Such as advertisement' is incorrect; it should be 'Such advertisements' to refer properly to plural ads. The sentence was also missing punctuation between two independent clauses.

× Such as advertisement not only catch my attention but also motivate me to take positive actions.

✓ Such advertisements not only catch my attention but also motivate me to take positive actions.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to agree with the plural verbs 'catch' and 'motivate'.

× These ads usually prefer as a pop-ups and banners on websites and apps, which can sometimes be quite distracting because they interrupt what am I doing what I'm doing.

✓ These ads usually appear as pop-ups and banners on websites and apps, which can sometimes be quite distracting because they interrupt what I'm doing.

The phrase 'usually prefer as' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'appear'. 'Pop-ups' should not have 'a' before it as it is plural. The phrase 'what am I doing what I'm doing' is incorrect and should be 'what I'm doing' for clarity and correct word order.