广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I remember a yogurt advertisement from my childhood. It showed a smiling grandma giving yogurt to her grandchildren and wishing them to grow up strong. This ad impressed me because it was warm and caring.

建議: 回答内容不够具体，句子结构混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议直接回答问题，使用清晰的句子并举例说明。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on public transport like buses and trains. These ads usually promote products or services to many passengers every day.

建議: 表达有一定观点，但用词错误较多，逻辑不够清晰。建议使用准确词汇，明确表达观点并给出具体原因。

範例: Honestly, I don't like advertisements because they can be disturbing. Also, some online ads may lead to cybercrime, so I always pay attention to online shopping security.

建議: 回答不连贯，语法和词汇错误严重，难以理解。建议简洁明了地表达喜欢的广告类型，并说明原因。

範例: I like sports advertisements because they are simple and show the excitement of sports. They often display the latest technology used by athletes.

建議: 句子结构不完整，词汇使用不准确，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的语法和词汇，明确说明广告的普遍性和目的。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer. These ads promote new products and encourage people to buy them.

× I remember you girl advertisement in my childhood memory it's depicts about a grandma give his grandchildren's yogurt and wish them to grow up stronger and the grandma always with smile and the yogurt is.

✓ I remember a girl advertisement from my childhood memory. It depicts a grandma giving her grandchildren yogurt and wishing them to grow up stronger. The grandma is always smiling and the yogurt is...

句中“you girl advertisement”应为“a girl advertisement”，冠词使用错误且缺少复数形式；“grandchildren's”错误使用了所有格，应为复数形式“grandchildren”；“give”应使用动名词形式“giving”；“his”应为“her”，因为指的是奶奶。整体句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子以表达清晰。

× Definitely years advertisement come up around the world and especially in the public transportation and on chance or other transport like buses always come up with advertisement to display.

✓ Definitely, advertisements have appeared around the world for years, especially in public transportation and on trains or other transport like buses, which always display advertisements.

“years advertisement”应为复数形式“advertisements”；“on chance”应为“on trains”；“advertisement”应为复数形式“advertisements”；句子结构不完整，需调整以符合语法。

× Honestly speaking for me, I don't like advertisements because it can be a disturbination to my life and some advertisement maybe can cause cyber crime.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't like advertisements because they can be a disturbance to my life, and some advertisements may cause cybercrime.

“maybe can”用法重复，应使用“may”；“disturbination”拼写错误，应为“disturbance”；“advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”；“cyber crime”应合并为“cybercrime”。

× I always found a sports advertisement because it's a simple off we read life and the vibrant and the sport.

✓ I always find sports advertisements because they simply reflect real life, which is vibrant, and sports.

“found”时态错误，应为现在时“find”；“a sports advertisement”应为复数“sports advertisements”；“simple off we read life”语义不清，推测为“simply reflect real life”；句子结构需调整。

× What has man always showed their latest technology on sports fields?

✓ What has man always shown on sports fields is their latest technology.

“showed”应为过去分词“shown”；“man”作为单数，谓语应一致；句子结构需调整以表达清晰。

× Yes, advertisements comes around and there are wider ranges of advertisement in our daily life, especially on our digital gadgets to showcase their latest conversion and to push people to buy them.

✓ Yes, advertisements come around, and there is a wide range of advertisements in our daily life, especially on our digital gadgets to showcase their latest versions and to encourage people to buy them.

“advertisements comes”主谓不一致，应为“advertisements come”；“wider ranges of advertisement”应为“a wide range of advertisements”；“conversion”应为“versions”；“push people”用词不当，改为“encourage people”。