广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to make your sentences more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I remember a large billboard on my street that advertised a fruit company. It showed a child wanting to eat fruit, which made the ad memorable to me because it was simple and relatable.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the advertisements you see. Avoid unnecessary pauses and redundancies.

範例: Yes, especially in subway stations, I often see advertisements promoting good behaviors and habits. These ads attract my attention because they encourage positive changes in daily life.

建議: Your response is unclear and incomplete. Provide a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Avoid filler words and be more specific about why you like or dislike advertisements.

範例: Honestly, I don't like advertisements very much because I prefer to learn about products on my own. Many ads seem ordinary and don't provide useful information.

建議: Your answer is vague and contains many filler words. Clearly state the type of advertising you prefer and explain why, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Although many ads are exaggerated, I enjoy advertisements that inspire me to buy digital tools because I am interested in technology. These ads are more engaging and enjoyable for me.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Use linking words to organize your ideas and be more specific about the types of ads you see and like.

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on Instagram, especially posters that are visually appealing. Additionally, I follow accounts related to digital tools, which feature attractive ads that I enjoy.

× I saw a huge billboard and in this street which shows actually an advertisement and it was about a child, a child who wants to eat fruit.

✓ I saw a huge billboard on this street which actually shows an advertisement, and it was about a child, a child who wants to eat fruit.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to something located along a street; 'on' is the correct preposition to indicate the billboard's location on the street.

× I saw a lot of advertisement about behaviors and actually the habits, uh, which, uh, we have to correct them and it I really am, they really attract my attention and just that.

✓ I saw a lot of advertisements about behaviors and actually the habits, uh, which, uh, we have to correct, and they really attracted my attention, just that.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'a lot of'. Also, 'attract' should be in past tense 'attracted' to maintain tense consistency with 'saw'.

× I can learn by myself and advertisement and just uh, actually umm, print is just normal things.

✓ I can learn by myself and advertisements, and just, uh, actually, umm, print is just a normal thing.

The singular 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. Also, 'print' is singular and should be followed by 'a normal thing' instead of 'normal things'.

× Most of which are exaggerated, but umm, I think, umm, those who give me a passion about buying digital tools, uh, are more enjoyable for me.

✓ Most of them are exaggerated, but umm, I think, umm, those that give me a passion for buying digital tools, uh, are more enjoyable for me.

The pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used; 'them' is appropriate here. Also, 'those who' refers to people, but since it refers to advertisements, 'those that' is more suitable. The preposition 'about' should be 'for' in 'passion for'.

× Yes, I saw and I see a lot of them on Instagram and those posters and are really nice and I like them and and in addition I follow digital tools and Instagram with beautiful advertise.

✓ Yes, I saw and I see a lot of them on Instagram, and those posters are really nice, and I like them. In addition, I follow digital tools and Instagram with beautiful advertisements.

The sentence had missing commas and conjunctions for clarity. 'Advertise' is a verb; the noun 'advertisements' is correct here. Also, 'and and' is a repetition error. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.