广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и ясным. Начните с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавьте детали, используя связующие слова для логичности. Избегайте повторений и неясных выражений.

範例: Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me as a child. It featured a famous singer playing the role of an 'Ice King' who was freezing a whole family when they were sick. This advertisement was for a medication, and it left a positive impression on me because of its creative concept.

建議: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более связным и естественным, используя связующие слова и избегая повторов. Также стоит уточнить детали для большей конкретики.

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on public transport. For example, I take the bus every day to educational centers, and there are large posters as well as small TVs inside the buses that display various ads regularly.

建議: Ответ следует сделать более плавным и логичным, используя связующие слова. Избегайте тавтологии и уточните, что именно вам нравится или не нравится в рекламе.

範例: It depends on the advertisement itself. If it promotes a useful and high-quality product, I usually like it. However, some ads spread negativity or promote cheap and unnecessary items, which I do not appreciate.

建議: Ответ содержит повторения и грамматические ошибки. Постарайтесь использовать более точные выражения и связующие слова для улучшения структуры и ясности.

範例: I like advertisements that are both creative and informative. For instance, those that feature popular actors and present extraordinary ideas while providing important information about the product.

建議: Ответ можно сделать более естественным и связным, избегая повторов и грамматических ошибок. Используйте связующие слова для плавности речи.

範例: Nowadays, advertisements are an undeniable part of the internet. It's almost impossible to avoid them when using a phone or computer because they pop up every time I open a website or application. Therefore, I see ads on a daily basis.

× Is there reference to wars and advertisements that really affected my mind, like in a positive way in my childhood?

✓ Is there a reference to wars and advertisements that really affected my mind, like in a positive way in my childhood?

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'reference'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' corrects the sentence structure.

× So I see this big advertisement posters, I see advertisements on small TV's that are in every bus we have in in my country.

✓ So I see these big advertisement posters, I see advertisements on small TVs that are in every bus we have in my country.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is singular but refers to plural 'posters', so it should be 'these'. Also, 'TV's' is incorrectly using an apostrophe for plural; it should be 'TVs'. Correcting these aligns the sentence with proper plural forms.

× Actually depends on an advertisement itself because most of the time they differ by products.

✓ It actually depends on the advertisement itself because most of the time they differ by products.

The sentence lacks a clear subject; 'Actually depends' is incomplete. Adding 'It' as the subject clarifies the sentence. Also, 'an advertisement' is better as 'the advertisement' to specify the subject.

× So it if it's an advert advertisement of a useful and high quality product, I obviously would like it.

✓ So if it's an advertisement of a useful and high-quality product, I obviously would like it.

The phrase 'advert advertisement' is redundant; 'advertisement' alone suffices. Also, 'high quality' should be hyphenated as 'high-quality' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× But still there are some of them that are that spread negativity and cheap and necessary stuff.

✓ But still, there are some of them that spread negativity and cheap, unnecessary stuff.

The phrase 'that are that spread' is incorrect; 'that spread' is sufficient. Also, 'necessary' is likely a misuse here; 'unnecessary' fits better to describe 'cheap, unnecessary stuff'. Adding a comma improves clarity.

× I like advertisements that are at the same time creative and informative creative in a way.

✓ I like advertisements that are at the same time creative and informative, creative in a way.

The repetition of 'creative' is awkward; adding a comma before the second 'creative' clarifies the meaning. Alternatively, rephrasing could improve clarity, but this correction follows the original structure.

× They include some popular actors or media person and have this extraordinary ideas and feature some information about the product that is have has to be known.

✓ They include some popular actors or media persons and have these extraordinary ideas and feature some information about the product that has to be known.

'Media person' should be pluralized to 'media persons' to match 'some popular actors'. 'This' should be 'these' to agree with plural 'ideas'. The phrase 'that is have has to be known' is incorrect; 'that has to be known' is correct.

× Nowadays advertisements are undeniable part of an Internet, so it's literally impossible to avoid them somehow when you're on your phone or computer because they pop up every time you open any website or application.

✓ Nowadays advertisements are an undeniable part of the Internet, so it's literally impossible to avoid them somehow when you're on your phone or computer because they pop up every time you open any website or application.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'an' before 'undeniable part' and uses 'an Internet' instead of 'the Internet'. 'The Internet' is the correct form as it is a unique entity.

× So yes, I see them like they on on a daily.

✓ So yes, I see them like this on a daily basis.

The phrase 'like they on on a daily' is ungrammatical and unclear. Correcting to 'like this on a daily basis' clarifies the meaning and places the adverbial phrase correctly.