广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があり、内容もやや曖昧です。より具体的に広告の内容やなぜ印象に残ったのかを説明し、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

範例: Yes, an advertisement that impressed me as a child was for a toy dollhouse called the Souvenir Family Series. I liked it because the toys, like a little rabbit, were very cute and imaginative.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。具体的にどのような広告が好きかを明確にし、文法や語彙を改善して簡潔に話す練習をしましょう。

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains. My favorite ones are those featuring comedians because they are very funny and entertaining.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。広告が好きな理由を明確にし、正しい文法で簡潔に表現する練習が必要です。

範例: Yes, I like advertisements because they motivate me and give me energy to work hard the next day.

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法や語順の誤りがあり、冗長な表現もあります。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、具体的な理由を述べると良いでしょう。

範例: I like funny advertisements because they motivate me. When many people watch them, they laugh, which gives everyone energy to work hard.

× It's one of the toy and the toy doll house and the little toy like rabbit.

✓ It's one of the toys: the toy doll house and the little toy rabbit.

The word 'toy' should be plural 'toys' because it refers to multiple items. Also, the phrase is clarified by using a colon and removing unnecessary words for better clarity.

× Yes, I often see a lot of advertisement on trains.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements on trains.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'a lot of'. Also, the preposition 'on' is correct here, but the plural form is necessary.

× there are various kinds of advertisements, and my favorite one is, uh, comedian.

✓ There are various kinds of advertisements, and my favorite one is, uh, a comedian.

The word 'comedian' needs an article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun.

× And comedians are performed.

✓ And comedians perform.

The sentence uses passive voice incorrectly. 'Comedians perform' is the correct active voice form to express that comedians do the action.

× But I like advertisement because as make people motivation motivate it and uh, it gives me energy to hard work tomorrow.

✓ But I like advertisements because they motivate people, and it gives me energy to work hard tomorrow.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar, including verb forms and pronouns.

× it gives me energy to hard work tomorrow.

✓ It gives me energy to work hard tomorrow.

The phrase 'to hard work' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to work hard' where 'work' is the verb and 'hard' is the adverb.

× I like an advertisement of funny one because it motivated me and uh.

✓ I like funny advertisements because they motivate me.

The phrase 'an advertisement of funny one' is incorrect. It should be 'funny advertisements' (plural) to generalize, and the verb 'motivate' should be in present tense to match the context.

× And indeed many when many people watch it, they laugh and it gives energy to do hard work.

✓ And indeed, when many people watch them, they laugh and it gives them energy to work hard.

The pronouns are corrected to match plural 'advertisements' ('them') and to clarify who receives the energy ('them'). Also, 'to do hard work' is corrected to 'to work hard'.