广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, correct vocabulary usage is important for naturalness.

範例: Yes, there was an advertisement for a bag company called Scooby Day that impressed me as a child. Many of my classmates were fascinated by their school bags, and I really wanted one too because they were colorful and trendy.

建議: Your answer is too long and repetitive, which affects clarity and coherence. Try to make your response concise and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to make your answer more natural.

範例: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and buses because these are common public places where many people can see them. Therefore, companies choose these transport platforms to promote their products effectively.

建議: Your answer addresses both positive and negative aspects, which is good. However, the sentences are a bit unclear and contain grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I like advertisements because they inform us about new products in the market. However, some ads can be misleading, and after buying the product, we might find that its quality or quantity is not as promised.

建議: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use appropriate vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: I enjoy advertisements that focus on beauty accessories and dresses because they interest me. Additionally, I like ads about kitchen utensils since they help me learn about new tools that make cooking easier.

× One of that one is a bag.

✓ One of them is a bag.

The phrase 'One of that one' is incorrect because 'that one' is singular and does not fit with 'one of'. The correct phrase is 'One of them' to refer to one item among many.

× That's a bag company name is Scooby de Uh, that when I was a child, most of our classmates and the people are the same age, highly obsessed with that school bug.

✓ The bag company's name is Scooby de Uh. When I was a child, most of our classmates and people the same age were highly obsessed with that school bag.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and sentence structure. 'That's a bag company name is' is incorrect; it should be 'The bag company's name is'. Also, 'the people are the same age' should be 'people the same age'. The verb tense should be past tense 'were' to match the time frame.

× It name is Scooby Day.

✓ Its name is Scooby Day.

The pronoun 'It' should be possessive 'Its' to indicate ownership of the name. Also, 'Scooby Day' is the correct name.

× the transportation and a train and a different buses are the platform for different kinds of advertisement

✓ Transportation, trains, and different buses are platforms for different kinds of advertisements

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms. 'Transportation' is uncountable, 'a train' should be plural 'trains', and 'a different buses' is incorrect; it should be 'different buses'. Also, 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match the plural subjects, and 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'.

× because they are choosing that platform for advertising because the it's a common public place and the most of the peoples can can see that advertisement

✓ because they choose those platforms for advertising since they are common public places and most people can see those advertisements

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage: 'that platform' should be 'those platforms' to match plural, 'the most of the peoples' is incorrect; it should be 'most people'. Also, 'can can' is a repetition error. 'It's' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'platforms'.

× and because of the this kind of transportation areas are highly.

✓ and because of this, these kinds of transportation areas are highly used for advertising.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'used for advertising' completes the thought. Also, 'the this kind' is incorrect; it should be 'this kind' or 'these kinds' depending on context.

× In some way, I like advertisements that you can make us aware of the different kinds of most new things in our market.

✓ In some ways, I like advertisements that make us aware of the different kinds of new things in our market.

'You can make us aware' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'that make us aware' referring to advertisements. Also, 'most new things' is incorrect; 'new things' suffices. 'In some way' should be 'In some ways'.

× In some way I could say that it's some kind of advertisement is trying to mislead us and even after buying the things, we can go to realize that the quality and the quantity of the thing.

✓ In some ways, I could say that some kinds of advertisements try to mislead us, and even after buying things, we realize that the quality and quantity are not as expected.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'It's some kind of advertisement is' is incorrect; it should be 'some kinds of advertisements try'. 'Go to realize' is awkward; 'realize' suffices. 'The things' and 'the thing' are vague; 'things' is better. Also, 'In some way' should be 'In some ways'.

× As a lady, I like to watch advertisement that is focusing more on the beauty accessories and the dresses all like that.

✓ As a lady, I like to watch advertisements that focus more on beauty accessories and dresses, and things like that.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. 'That is focusing' should be 'that focus' to agree with plural 'advertisements'. 'The beauty accessories' and 'the dresses' should be without 'the' unless specific. 'All like that' is incorrect; 'and things like that' is better.

× And apart from all that the kitchen advertisement for kitchen utensils are usable for ladies and that you can make no more aware about the new kind of utensils that we can use very smartly in kitchen.

✓ Apart from all that, kitchen advertisements for kitchen utensils are useful for ladies and they can make us more aware of new kinds of utensils that we can use smartly in the kitchen.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. 'Are usable' is awkward; 'are useful' is better. 'That you can make no more aware' is incorrect; it should be 'they can make us more aware'. 'New kind' should be 'new kinds'. 'In kitchen' should be 'in the kitchen'.