广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific details about the advertisement that impressed you.

範例: I didn't pay much attention to advertisements as a child because they often interrupted my favourite cartoons. However, I do remember a public service announcement that stuck in my mind because it used catchy slogans and colourful visuals effectively.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but lacks coherence and contains some unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why you find the advertisements annoying and inefficient. Also, correct minor grammatical mistakes for better clarity.

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements in the underground trains in Iran. They are usually placed very close to passengers, which I find distracting and ineffective because people tend to ignore them.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant or unclear information. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear opinion, supported by specific reasons or examples. Avoid unrelated topics and improve sentence structure for naturalness.

範例: I don't particularly like most advertisements because pop-ups often distract me when I'm busy. However, I do appreciate advertisements for branded products like shoes and smartphones because they provide useful information.

建議: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammatical errors that reduce clarity. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to organise your points, and provide specific examples of advertising you like. Avoid redundancy for effectiveness.

範例: I prefer advertisements for branded products such as shoes, smartphones, and gadgets because they are informative. On the other hand, I dislike flyers and pop-up ads since they are often annoying and distracting.

× But I recall that our officials made an important information and it sticks to would stick to my mind because they use cache slogans and catchy tunes colorful.

✓ But I recall that our officials made an important announcement and it stuck to my mind because they used catchy slogans and colourful tunes.

The sentence contains several errors: 'made an important information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and should not be preceded by 'an'; 'sticks to would stick to my mind' is a tense inconsistency and redundancy; 'cache slogans' is a misspelling of 'catchy slogans'; 'catchy tunes colorful' is an incorrect word order and missing conjunctions. The corrected sentence uses past tense consistently, corrects vocabulary, and improves word order.

× Actually, I believe that underground trends in Iran are full of advertisement and they are annoying.

✓ Actually, I believe that underground trains in Iran are full of advertisements and they are annoying.

The word 'trends' is incorrect in context; it should be 'trains'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I don't like these advertisements and they are near and they are not really efficient.

✓ I don't like these advertisements because they are too close and not really effective.

The phrase 'they are near' is vague and awkward; 'too close' is clearer. Also, 'efficient' is not the correct adjective for advertisements; 'effective' is appropriate. The correction improves meaning and preposition use.

× Our love is full of advertisement.

✓ Our life is full of advertisements.

The word 'love' is incorrect in context; it should be 'life'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to indicate multiple ads. This correction aligns the sentence with intended meaning and grammatical number.

× Athletics are really common among all people around the world.

✓ Advertisements are really common among all people around the world.

The word 'Athletics' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'advertisements'. This correction fixes the vocabulary error to match the context.

× Followers are not my cup of tea.

✓ Pop-ups are not my cup of tea.

The word 'Followers' does not fit the context; likely the speaker meant 'Pop-ups' (advertisements). Correcting the pronoun/reference clarifies the meaning.

× Pop ups distracted me when I have an important something to do and search and search for.

✓ Pop-ups distracted me when I had something important to do and search for.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly ('distracted' past, 'have' present). The verb 'have' should be in past tense 'had' to maintain consistency. Also, 'something important to do and search for' is rephrased for clarity.

× I like a specific advertisement like branded of shoes, cell phones and different gadgets.

✓ I like specific advertisements like branded shoes, cell phones, and different gadgets.

The phrase 'a specific advertisement like branded of shoes' is incorrect; it should be plural 'advertisements' and 'branded shoes' without 'of'. This correction fixes number agreement and prepositional errors.

× Actually our life is full of advertisement and athletics are really common around the world and I don't like lots of advertisements like Flyers are not equivalently and also pop up as distract me and they are really annoying.

✓ Actually, our life is full of advertisements and ads are really common around the world. I don't like lots of advertisements like flyers because they are not effective, and also pop-ups distract me and they are really annoying.

Multiple errors: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; 'athletics' is incorrect, likely meant 'ads'; 'Flyers are not equivalently' is incorrect, should be 'flyers because they are not effective'; 'pop up as distract me' should be 'pop-ups distract me'. The correction addresses pluralization, vocabulary, and sentence structure.

× But I like branded like shoes, smartphones and different gadgets.

✓ But I like branded products like shoes, smartphones, and different gadgets.

The phrase 'branded like shoes' is incomplete; adding 'products' clarifies meaning. Also, listing items requires commas. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.