广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more fluent and clear by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'I notice'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, start by stating the advertisement that impressed you, then explain why it was memorable with specific details.

範例: Yes, I remember a creative advertisement for a poppy umbrella that impressed me as a child. It showed children playing outside a train with their colorful umbrellas, which caught my attention because of its lively visuals and cheerful mood.

建議: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Be specific about the types of advertisements you see and give examples to enrich your answer.

範例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains, buses, and metros. For instance, there are ads promoting health tech gadgets and other products, which are usually placed in visible areas inside the vehicles.

建議: Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid filler words. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes and be specific about when you find advertisements annoying or enjoyable.

範例: Not really, because advertisements often interrupt my concentration when I watch movies on television or videos on YouTube. However, sometimes I find some ads funny and creative, which makes them more enjoyable.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of the types of advertisements you like and why.

範例: I like funny and creative advertisements that have music and strong visual effects because they attract my attention. Moreover, I appreciate emotional advertisements that tell a story and connect with viewers on a deeper level.

× I notice, uh, remember an advertisement for a poppy umbrella where some children playing outside a train with their umbrella, which make my attention and I.

✓ I noticed, uh, remember an advertisement for a poppy umbrella where some children were playing outside a train with their umbrellas, which caught my attention.

The sentence has plural and singular mismatches: 'children playing' needs 'were' to indicate past continuous tense, 'umbrella' should be plural 'umbrellas' to match 'children', and 'make' should be 'caught' to correctly express the action in past tense. Also, 'I' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

✓ Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

This sentence is correct; 'on trains' and 'other transport' are appropriate prepositions here.

× Yes, I see many advertisements in trains and other public transports like buses and buses and metros.

✓ Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and other public transport like buses and metros.

The word 'transports' is incorrect; 'transport' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'in trains' should be 'on trains' because advertisements are placed on the surface of trains. The repeated 'buses' is redundant and removed.

× I've often found some advertisements ML for health tech gadgets and also for some.

✓ I've often found some advertisements for health tech gadgets and others.

The phrase 'advertisements ML' is unclear and likely a mistake. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and also for some.' which is incomplete. The correction completes the sentence logically.

× Not really, and sometimes I I the advertisements interrupt my concentration on while watching, umm, movies on television or uh, in Youtubes when I'm watching something in online.

✓ Not really, and sometimes the advertisements interrupt my concentration while watching movies on television or on YouTube when I'm watching something online.

The sentence has repeated 'I I', unnecessary prepositions like 'on' before 'while', and incorrect 'in Youtubes' and 'in online'. Correct prepositions are 'on YouTube' and 'online'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Sometimes this feel funny and creative.

✓ Sometimes this feels funny and creative.

'This' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels' to agree in number.

× I like her funny and funny advertisements and advertisements are very creative and and they have music and visual impact.

✓ I like funny advertisements, and advertisements are very creative and have music and visual impact.

'Her' is incorrect here; it should be omitted. The phrase 'her funny and funny advertisements' is redundant. Also, 'and and' is a repetition error. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Sometimes it's attracts my my attention.

✓ Sometimes it attracts my attention.

'It's attracts' is incorrect; 'it attracts' is correct. Also, 'my my' is a repetition error.

× Moreover, some advertisements like emotional advertisements.

✓ Moreover, I like some advertisements, such as emotional advertisements.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. Adding 'I like' clarifies the meaning, and 'such as' introduces examples properly.